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Vakel Mobile Ship Dock Station

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Dorriun Vakel

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[SIZE=9pt]OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]PRODUCTION INFORMATION[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Manufacturer: [/SIZE]Imperial Remnant

  • [SIZE=9pt]Affiliation: Imperial Remnant[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Model: N/A[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Production[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Unique[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Material:[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt] Durasteel hull[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Classification[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: Large Military Station[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Length[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: 3000m[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Width[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: 3000m[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Height[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: 3000m[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Armament[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Low[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Defenses[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Average[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Hangar Space[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]16[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt] Squadrons[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Hangar Allocations:[/SIZE]

    [SIZE=9pt]Starfighters: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]12 squadrons[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Support Craft: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]4 squadrons[/SIZE]

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[SIZE=9pt]Maneuverability Rating[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Very Low[/SIZE]

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[SIZE=9pt]Speed Rating[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Very Low[/SIZE]

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[SIZE=9pt]Hyperdrive Class[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]: N/A[/SIZE]

[SIZE=9pt]STANDARD FEATURES[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Emergency life support systems[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Redundant power generators[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]ADVANCED SYSTEMS[/SIZE]


  • [SIZE=9pt]Redundant shielding systems[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Reinforced blast doors at all key security checkpoints[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]Strengths[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]:[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]The station can house multiple Star Destroyers as well as possess the resources to repair a ship that is 95% damaged. High command hopes to one day be able to use it to build entire Star Destroyers in the very very far future.[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Depending on the scope of the repairs, such repairs could be [/SIZE]completed[SIZE=9pt] in as little as 2-3 days[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]Weaknesses[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]:[/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]The large size prevents the station from moving quickly and the lack of hyperspace engines means that in order for it to move, it relies entirely on maneuvering thrusters. [/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]The emphasis on the station is repairing ships, meaning that it has [/SIZE]minimal defensive capabilities. The station requires constant guard from other ships

  • While repairing ships, power is diverted to essential areas such as part production. This drains power away from station defenses, leaving it vulnerable[SIZE=9pt] [/SIZE]

  • [SIZE=9pt]Cannot move while ships are docked.[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]Description[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]:[/SIZE]
[SIZE=9pt]The station is designed to be a mobile dock for the Imperial Remnant flotilla as well as a one stop shop for ship repairs. Part of the station functions as a factory to develop ship parts while the rest acts as a floating dock. The total crew is 20,000 personnel, primarily engineers and mechanics. The station can hold up to 4 Imperial Class Star Destroyers and one Resurgent Class battlecrusier at any given time in any of the several alcoves that makeup the exterior. [/SIZE]
 
[member="Dorriun Vakel"], first and foremost, thanks for taking the time to use the factory. Before I can slap an approval on this, I'd like to talk about a few things regarding it with you.



Dorriun Vakel said:
For this, please be sure you use the link to the web page where the image is found so proper credit can be given to the artist/owner of the image and not directly to the image itself. The link you placed in "Canon Link" and "Primary Source" will suffice here. You also do not need "Canon Source" as this is not directly drawn from a Star Wars creation via the Wikia.



Dorriun Vakel said:
Material: Durasteel hull
Please be sure you remember to link any specifically stated materials listed in the sub



Dorriun Vakel said:
Strengths: The station can house multiple Star Destroyers as well as possess the resources to repair a ship that is 95% damaged. High command hopes to one day be able to use it to build entire Star Destroyers in the very very far future.
Any way that you can explain how long it would take for this station to repair a ship docked and receiving such restorations? Also would the repair process leave the station any more vulnerable than it would be normally?



Dorriun Vakel said:
[SIZE=9pt]Description[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]:[/SIZE]
The station is designed to be a mobile dock for the Imperial Remnant flotilla as well as a one stop shop for ship repairs. Part of the station functions as a factory to develop ship parts while the rest acts as a floating dock. The total crew is 1,000 personnel, primarily engineers and mechanics. The station can hold up to 4 Imperial Class Star Destroyers and one battlecrusier at any given time.
It would be greatly appreciated if you could expand on the description a bit more. Also, considering the very small crew compliment that is required to operate this station, it seems as though the station itself could be easily overwhelmed. A standard Imperial-I Class Star Destroyer on its own requires a compliment of 1,600 troops to operate and if this station can dock four ISDs it would likely require a crew considerably larger.

Please remember to tag me with any edits or adjustments you make to this sub
 

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[member="Alden Akaran"] I made several changes regarding explaining how long a repair could take and how repairs effect the stations ability to defend itself. With that said, I am unsure of what link you want me to provide for the hull material.
 
Good Morning [member="Dorriun Vakel"],

This sub has been pulled because there are several issues that have been noted with this submission.


1) Manufacturer



Dorriun Vakel said:
Manufacturer: Kuat Drive Yards

Your link for the manufacturer leads to the Chaos submission of the company, did you approach the writer to ask for permission to use their company? While we do allow cannon companies to be used for their canon submissions, using a subbed company like this for a new submission it is always best to check with the company owner.


2) Defenses



Dorriun Vakel said:
Defenses: Medium

Medium is not a rating from the template, did you mean Average?


3) Storage



Dorriun Vakel said:
The station can hold up to 4 Imperial Class Star Destroyers and one battlecrusier at any given time.

How does the station stores these capital ships? A battlecruiser is a ship which can be 5000m long, which is even larger than this station. Is the station capable of moving while storing the ships?
 
[member="Dorriun Vakel"]

Thank you for making those changes. However, I still fail to understand, how does the station actually house the ships. You mention:



Dorriun Vakel said:
The station can hold up to 4 Imperial Class Star Destroyers and one Resurgent Class battlecrusier at any given time in any of the several alcoves that makeup the exterior.

Does this mean that they settle completely in the alcoves, or only partially. How does this affect the movement and repairs conducted by the station?
 

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[member="John Locke"] here is a visual representation of what a larger version of the same station would look like with various ships in it

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[member="Dorriun Vakel"]

This is where I'm having trouble with this submission though. While I can see the ships docking like this in a larger station, on a much smaller station of this size they simply wouldn't be able to fit nor dock in the same way. The ships are simply too big and the station is too small.

Does only part of the ship fit in the station in this case?
 

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[member="John Locke"] I’d like to scrap this submission on account of the fact that the Imperial Remnant no longer exists.
 
Moved to Factory Archives - If you want to remove from the archives, please feel free to tag [member="Runi Verin"], [member="John Locke"], [Member="Alden Akaran"] or [Member="Zef Halo"].
 
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