Approved Planet Umriid (Dead Planet Contest)

[Zaiden Dean]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
Intent: FOR THE ABSOLUTE DESTRUCTION OF IT (To submit an attempt for the current Dead Planet contest)
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GENERAL INFORMATION
Planet Name: Umriid (Oooh-m-reed)
Demonym: Umriidian ((above)-ian)
Region: Unknown
System Name: Yuvon Gral (You-vahn Gr-all)
System Features:

• Moon ~ A Small Non Operational Space Station
• Sun ~ One Red Giant (Near End of Its Lifespan)
• Other ~ Seven Separate Astroid Belts

Coordinates: 5,12 (Aza'zoth hex)
Major Imports: Nothing
Major Exports: Nothing

GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
Gravity: 78% Standard
Climate:

• Acidic
• Arid
• Nuclear
• Poisonous

Primary Terrain:

• Desert
• Dead Cities

Major Locations:

• Liltanni (Li-ton-ee)
  Spoiler

  Liltanni is believed to be the original city, the first of the planet. During a time when the planet was berated by the cosmos, the Preludes, a rumonord species with no more solid backing than the belief they existed, supposedly delved deep into the stone of the planet. During times when their sun was unstable, it is hard to imagine how they managed to dig several miles down, branching outward after, making an entire city with tunnel-streets connecting outcropped segments, with a rustic stone build to it all. This is believed to be where the Jayill managed to find the technologies that set them so advanced so quickly.
  
  At the center of the ancient and long decaying city, lays what is presumed to be a king's circle, a location where a leader would sit before his people. According to reports of the exceedingly rare finding of the entrance to this city, the circle has untold riches, including golden bars, jewelry, priceless art, and more.
  
  Consisting of multiple 'floors', with dozens of 'wings', there is quite a size available. The entirety however revolved around the King's Circle, the massive statue holding up the world and all of its problems reaching up through the floors to give hope, show care, and light the world for the inhabitants.
  
  The deepest point inside of the city is quite the enigma. Why, when stone was the main used material, was it required that there be an intensely deep mine? The aforementioned holding tin, iron, graphene, and so many more ores. It was quite the resource, if a confusing point of discussion. While it is believed that the Jayill ransacked the area for all of its technology, there was no evidence of a mineral mine being necessary.
• Yiulé (Yee-ooh-lay)
  Spoiler

  Yiulê was the largest city, evidently, during the reign of the Dristiin. It is a city of near human like styles, in that it is made from manipulated metals, glass (paned and not), dirt, cements and like. It could be compared much to a double in size New York City. There is even evidence of restaurants that sold triangular layered pies of meat, dairies, and sauces, on ultra thick breading.
  
  Split into districts by those whom had discovered the remains, the original designs hold little information. Not much was known other than the districts split sectors, such as the 'center' or 'downtown' in which housed large arenas for sporting events, and the 'food' locales where in... Well, obviously it held what was likely grocery stores, restaurants and the like. There is also the 'housing', 'recreation', 'research' and other districts. Likely the most important to outsiders, would be the one dubbed lovingly the 'wealth' district.
  
  Inside of the 'wealth' district, there are musuems with priceless gems, ancient weapons worth a planet's ransom to collectors, and other artifacts, as well as banks which hold, astonishingly, credits. Seemingly before their fall, the Dristiin had managed to open themselves to the cosmos, achieving the unlikely, and integrating the Galactic standards into their own society. Each vault, holding whatever merits, though is heavily defended. There are traps within, in case ever power had gone out (as obviously it has by this point), as well as the cages themselves housing the materials are incredibly thick. It will not be easy for this system to be cracked.
• Tetrenzi (Teh-ren-z)
  Spoiler

  Tetrenzi was the centralized hub for the Jayill, though not their only large city. After their extinction event, the city was heavily revered, for its technology, as well as the belief of its cursed nature. When the sun explosion devastated the planet, a city wide shield was barelt put in place in time to stop the largest brunt of the damage. Thus, after the failure to halt all sun damages, the rest seemed minimal in comparison. Hence the next generation of species, and all that followed stayed away.
  
  First things first, the city has power. Not much. Not enough to house a population, but much enough to allow the computers that survived to maintain. This in itself too allowed the belief of a curse to thrive: the computers seek assistance! As is the unknown norm amongst artifical intelligences, over time they become truly sentient. With hardly enough power to simply stay booted up, the computer programs cannot seek methods to leave - instead they conjure holograms which they use to interact with the corporeal as best they are able. To unlessoned beings, these flickering, ethereal beings must be spirits.
  
  Within the confines of the buildings, if one ignores the calls of the Holo-Damned, they can find much. Seemingly within the buildings, with their molding bodies, flickering lights, and haunted halls, there is a birth of knowledge. Physics, technology, computerized programming, mathematics of the highest tier. One whom knows little, that manages to stave off death within the limits of the place, would leave a genius of geniuses.
  
  Not to mention, the place is frickin haunted!
• Ruth Sil (Roo-th Sill)
  Spoiler

  Ruth Sil is actually a less than granduer environ. With its mainstead being housing the dead, before being retrofitted to act as a monument to the planet's incredible bad luck, finally allowed to decay with the vanishing of the populations.
  
  The importance of the planetary graveyard is in its storehouse of knowledge. Unlike the cities, which hold the intellect of the brightest minds, Ruth Sil holds the history of the peoples found within. It is the main means by which those whom have come since the death of people, and planet, can find the stories of what came. Beings in the lowest depths of some of mausoleums, generally Jayill, are found with computer kept lineages. Even those toward the rise are kept with a written bibliography. Through the guests here, one could find nearly a million million years worth of knowledge (*).
• Trikl Village (Tr-ill Vill-edge)
  Spoiler

  With a name unable to translate to writ, the village is known by the main population found in. It is a simple place, just a town that housed the heavily peace loving hippies known as Trikl. In spite of their 'ultimate killing machine' appearance, this town is known for its gentle architecture, beautiful arches, and non aggravating styles meant to convey peace and love.
  
  Though in spite of this visage, there is definitely a note worthy point of this locale. It is housed over the remnants of an ancient temple for the lightside of the Force. This is a potential cause of the peaceful nature should one look into it. However, like most Temples, should one look, they will find a cornucopia of Force sensitive intel, as well as at least three Vaults of Artifacts of the Light.
  
  Initially the temple was known as Temple Loovisk, named after Master Loovisk, a Sael Litsel Force sensitive that became unimaginably powerful in the manipulations of the ever present energies. His was the way of Light, never faltering in his journeys to protect others, courageous yet selfless. Much time did he spend, traveling about the cosmos, always trying to remain anonymous, yet help as much as he possibly.
  
  Rumor, history really, has it that once he returned home, ready to put away his powers, there was a battle that ensued. Somehow the people he protected had found him, wishing to thank him for his aid, but unbeknownst to them they were followed. An ambush led too Loovisk besting each of the Darksiders in combat, taking their weaponry and locking them away in a Vault, the first items he would collect over the years.
• Goro'nie-Vllesp (Gore-oh Knee Vill-eesp)
  Spoiler

  Goro was the main notable area inhabited by the Knizzura. Crafted expertly via the greatest metallurgists to live on the planet (in its entire history as well) each building, every statue, any poles used for lighting or signs, everything was crafted with an amazing beauty and quality to it. At the center of the massive locale, for example, was an intricate clock tower, around the entirety of which spiraled flower designs, tribal like carvings, and more, all combining to make a perfect symbolism for their property.
  
  Within the perimeter of the grounds, one could find mastery of art around every corner. A vast wealth of beauty.

FORCE NEXUS
Size: Planetary

• Unlike normal Nexus, which pertain to either the dark, or the light, the Umriidian Nexus is... Wrong. It is a perversion manifested by the Force itself. So much death has occured here, more than any can truly comprehend, that the Force seeks to quarantine the planet. The closer one finds themselves to the quadrant in space, the more ill they become, with worse luck. It is not an immediate, dehydrating, body racking thing, nor instantaneous misfire of every gun in the vicinity, but over time it becomes such. If, by some intense illogically achieved mission, someone managed to have a map leading directly where they wished to go, radiation suits to survive, gas masks to not breathe poison, they might be able to leave before entirely voiding themselves of all fluids or solids, inevitably dying of dehydration, or impossible activation of every grenade and explosive..
  
  It is not an empowering thing, nor can it be used as such. It is simply a point where enough is enough. The Force, nature itself, the universe, whatever way you want to look at it, it has had it. If you come here, and you stay too long, you want to do die.

Intent: Initially I intended to not have a nexus evident, as a means of avoiding what I foresee will be a norm. However, the more I reread, and understand the implications of what I am writing, the utter destruction of not one, not two, but a multitude of whole populations... It seems like not having one would be wrong.


POPULATION
Native Species: (*)

• Dristiin (Dris-teen) [EXTINCT]
• Trikl (Tr-ill) [EXTINCT]
• Knizzura (Knit-zur-uh) [EXTINCT]
• Jay-ill (J-eye-eel) [EXTINCT]
• Za'ro'bol (Zah-row-bowl) [EXTINCT]
• Sael Litsel (Sail Lit-sell) [EXTINCT]
• Ddy Ab (Dee-ahb) [EXTINCT]

Immigrated Species: Unknown (Records Lost Too Time)
Population: Uninhabited (Zero)
Demographics: Much the same as Earth, during a species' reign there was little else there. Not too say any of them were, or weren't, xenophobic! Simply it was what it was. Likely the highest population during any evident era, of not the aforementioned in power, was less than 5% of the worlds population
Primary Languages: Galactic Basic (*)
Culture: (*)

• DristiinBefore their untimely demise, the average day, much as humans on our planet, could not be jotted down in a singular style. The Dristiin were a vast, strange people, they did much and reached for everything they could. No one being was told, "You are this, do this." It was the commune most peace loving beings want. Growth on a daily scale was all that was really wanted.
  
  In every sense of the growth, too. Betterment of the species. Genetically curing disease was a prize goal, but also stuff like understanding physics and sciences. Oddly, for this peaceful people, there was no religion, nor organized sporting industries.

[*]Trikl

• Trikl, being the surviving sub-species of the Dristiin, were much the same as their predecessors. In spite of their walking, talking death machine appearances, they were incredibly delicate species in manners, treatment of others, and their day to day choices. Feel like painting today? Do it. Want to go for a walk? Please, enjoy yourself.
  
  Sports though, for the Trikl, deserve a mention. These guys were zealots. For some reason, differing much from the others in this nature, the Trikl were athletic as much as they could achieve with their chosen life styles. Many would pick times every single day to wrestle, throw javelins, and other styles of athletic get together.
  
  Still though, as would be expected of a peace loving species, it was always simply for the fun of it.
  
  Another note, there was yet another absence of spiritualism.

[*]Knizzura

• Knizzura are the primary activist really, because they were the most populated of all of the species. They lived great lives. There was always a surplus of food stuffs, enjoyment factors, hobby items, and even spiritualism.

[*]Jay-ill

• These freakish beings lived peculiar lives, for sure. In that the most part was dedicated to computers, technology, and furthering their knowledge in the technical sciences. One could expect them to be in front of a computer physically as much as they were able, at all times, without exception. It was a dangerous thing, really, their absolute addiction, their need to better their technology. Some would forget all together too eat, others would do so many times in a row.
  
  This species, like most of this planet, was too a peaceful being type, but it did not mean that they much cared like the others. There was no religion, no sporting events, no running, jogging, or camping. Just computers and the rest.
  
  When an AI is brought online they might spend a few days forgetting everything about life, save for their genius work before them. As a matter of fact, when the initial sun explosion killed the people, most of those that didn't flee were found dead in front of their tech.

[*]Za'ro'bol

• Za'ro'bol were the initiative to a type: they were spiritual. They were ones that attempted to devote much of their lives to the laws believed passed too them from their gods. A typical day consisted of morning prayer, eating, then going to work. Before lunch there was another bout of prayer, afterward they would retire too home where in there was another prayer before bed. For these people there was not much in the sense of noticibility, save the massive graveyard city they made.
  
  They did not believe in extravagance, so there was no grand cities, nor artwork, or even well written plays. They were a simple people.

[*]Sael Litsel

• The Sael Litsel hold a lazier outlook than the rest, in that they generally did not do much. Each held a small, or non existent, connection to what they deemed the Pressure (the Force). Most could do basically nothing with it, though one become extremely note worthy, even taking the task of keeping histories for the planet.
  
  They did not strive for much. There was no grand architects, no profound artists - they were lazy.

[*]Ddy Ab

• Little can be said for the Ddy Ab. They were wiped out before they could become much.

GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
Government:

• DristiinMeritocracy - As a Meritocratic government, the Dristiin were governed by those most meritorious, also known as those with the best abilities and like. Be the best, get treated like it.

[*]Trikl

• Meritocracy - As a Meritocratic government, the Trikl were governed by those most meritorious, also known as those with the best abilities and like. Be the best, get treated like it.

[*]Knizzura

• Ochlocracy - The Ochlocracy of the Knizzura is a populace of people governing themselves. There was no focal government, instead everyone had a voice in what choices were made

[*]Jay-ill

• Technocracy - As one would expect of the people, Jayill were governed by those most technological and advanced. If one proves they are better than the rest, they can hold power in the government.

[*]Za'ro'bol

• Geniocracy - Geniocracy tends to infer those with higher intellect, etcetera, yet for the Za'ro'bol this was not in, rather in forward thinking. Be creative and you got a shot at being in the governing body.

[*]Sael Litsel

• Timocratic Oligarchy - The Sael were governed by the absolute highest honorary beings. If you were a supremely good person you might be one of the very few too be in power.

[*]Ddy Ab

• Demarchy - This was the fun one: random generating lists bound the populace into a pot, from which annually they called for their seats of power. It was all random. You might hate the idea, but if your name is called, your in.

Affiliation: (*)

• DristiinN/A

[*]Trikl

• N/A

[*]Knizzura

• N/A

[*]Jay-ill

• N/A

[*]Za'ro'bol

• N/A

[*]Sael Litsel

• N/A

[*]Ddy Ab

• N/A

Wealth: Generally, a higher wealth could be found here. There were points of less, but over all each population held a decent wealth. (*)
Stability: As a whole, this planet did not suffer much instability. It was generally well off, ignoring the demise of everything that lived here.
Freedom & Oppression: A grand number of the populations of this planet were peaceful, there was never a fear of government, nor oppressive natures.


MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
Military:

• DristiinN/A

[*]Trikl

• N/A

[*]Knizzura

• N/A

[*]Jay-ill

• The Jayill military was one much like their government, those with the best technological prowess held the best positions. However, it was a non-standing military, in that it was never formally housed nor kept at the ready. Simply, those that were best knew it, and kept weaponry should ever a battle ensue

[*]Za'ro'bol

• N/A

[*]Sael Litsel

• N/A

[*]Ddy Ab

• N/A

Technology:

• DristiinDristiin populations allotted the normal level of tech - not the galactic norm if you will, more of the Earth equivalent

[*]Trikl

• Around 1980's American. They were decent, not great.

[*]Knizzura

• Mainly their technology was based around stay at home life. There was not major science growths, or hospitalized types. But man they could brew a cup of coffee at home.

[*]Jay-ill

• Yes. Imagine the absolute highest tier computer programming and technological prowess.

[*]Za'ro'bol

• Moderate. They didn't stand out, nor fall absolutely below any bars.

[*]Sael Litsel

• Minimal, as in even owning microwaves would be a stretch. They had communications but that was basically the height of what they achieved.

[*]Ddy Ab

• Surprisingly, before their ultimate ends, the Ddy Ab were beyond Earth equivalent. Not exactly galactic standard, but decent note worthy.

RESOURCES

• Asteroid BeltsEach asteroid belt holds a damned fine quantity of materials for harvest. Some contain gems that can be sold off, or made into jewelry. Others contain raw ore for mining.

[*]Prototype Station

• There is not much for resources that might be taken elsewhere, instead the station itself is not housing the deadly prospects of the planet itself. If you can ignore the sickness, one can stay here as a base of operations

[*]Liltanni

• This is a resource center much like the asteroids: it houses much in the means of raw materials. Stone galore, ores of all types, newer strains potentially as well

[*]Yiulé

• Yiulé is a treasure trove, literally. This city has potentially billions worth of cash, gathered through multiple populations of people. Including gold and jewels, credits, and more!

[*]Tetrenzi

• Tetrenzi is a computerized graveyard. Weapons that might have been, no longer are. However, super computers reside all over within, and even haunting holoprojections of the computers consciousness that drift around the city

[*]Ruth Sil

• This place houses knowledge of the ages as a resource

[*]Trikl Village

• Trikl Village houses a Force Temple that acts as a repository of the gathered intellect for the manifestations of the ever present energies. Many of the traditional names are altered with the aspect of a race of users that did not ever contact the Jedi or others, and so don't know the true names. It also acts as a storage place of heavy artifacts of the Force, including dark and lightside

 

[Zaiden Dean]

HISTORICAL DOCUMENTARY
You, the viewer, step forward to a dusty holoarray. A swipe on its screens, buttons, and controls, signal an oddity - power returns with a dull hum. Slowly from one point, too across the rest, blue light emits until with finality an image of an elder human male appears, cast into holographic life by a near by emitter.

"Hello... No... That's stupid... How too begin..." The man rubbed at his chin, then was over come by a racking coughing fit, "Frak it. I am Loovisk, Master of the Force. This body is not mine, I won't pretend it is. This young man is a visitor to this planet... This.. Cursed land...

"God's above, if someone tries to say that this planet is not cursed..." Loovisk paused, staring into the distance before shaking his head and returning to that moment, "I am sorry, I am little more than an essence taking hold. I came to this man, this Dreyth, begging that with both of our last breaths, we might tell a tale. You see, during my life, about two hundred years ago, I spent a vast deal of it studying the past.

"Im sure there is some natural name for the ability I speak of," Loovisk waved a hand absentmindedly, "-but I called it Time Gazing." Another coughing fit jolts through the body of this man before you, it is odd. At first gaze, this man could be considered healthy. His is the fit body of the healthy. Yet upon closer examination, his skin is sluggish, gray, wrinkled beyond the years.

"By moving back the veils of time, I could see as if I was present in the moments I looked too. Of course, ignoring the histories passed by word of mouth, I had to know one major thing first, above all." Loovisk pauses again, remembering some face, or image once seen, "Were the Preludes real?" His face, that of a dying healthy man showed no emotion, "Honestly? I cannot say. I have tried to find the answers for this.

"I Gazed back as far as my energies would allow, directly physically on site in Liltanni. I stood next to what we call the King's Circle. With as much power as could be accumulated over weeks of Zen... It could not be achieved. I cannot even explain the building of the massive underground city." At this point the hologram moved, Loovisk was now sitting down, "Even outside of the city, I could only ever see two points: after and before it was built. None have ever, once, seen a Prelude. None of my students were able either. Of this I am certain."

Loovisk sighed, reaching about where could not be seen behind the limits of the hologram, he finally brought his hands back into sight. Now within them were a lighter of some sort, and the indistinct shape of a cigarette. After a moment fighting against the lighter create a flame viable enough to light the cigarette, he took a deep pull then glanced at it, then the camera, "His body. His habits. I can't stand the prospect of smoking, but I told him I would treat his body as best as I am able. It wants what it wants, regardless of my desires, ya..." At this point, an odd sound can be heard nearby, dulling the already flickering overhead lights, and wavering the hologram.

"...that whole thing." The hologram of Loovisk came back once again, "Anyway, where was I? Ah, yes, the start. No Preludes, yet, evidence of someone else being here before the Jayill. Who were these people? Why did they leave? What did they do to this planet..? Its friggen harmed too its very core, the very essence of everything here..." Again a pause, while Loovisk calmed himself.

"Im sorry. Obviously by now you have the feeling, understanding what I mean. I am a spirit, and the foul aura of this place makes me weak.. I can't imagine how it is for you, a flesh and blood being." Loovisk said, "Anyway, whatever they did during their days here, it led to this effect beginning. Its as if life simply isn't allowed here. You get a certain time, then no matter what, try as hard as you might, and you simply can't outrun the demise.

"Take the Jayill for example - they are the first I can find evidence of. They were incredibly intelligent, I mean... Absolutely mind boggling stuff. I can't begin to understand, or even wrap my mind around, most of the things those bastards accomplished. Its just.. Dumbfounding." He took another deep pull of his cigarette, "They were odd too. Peaceful, but not holy if you will. Large, as in length, like a minimum of eleven feet tall. Super gangly. Even their fingers, legs, hell their necks even. Huh, what else..

"They had an almost metallic golden skin, not to mention absolutely hairless, eight digit hands, most had four eyes - two sets of two on opposing sides of their head," He gestured to similar placement as his own, "Some didn't, I wasnt able to figure out if that was an abnormality or a choice - they could genetically alter their off spring, so who knows." Another hit, "Um... Oh yeah, they had three legs. It was, in my opinion, the oddest part of the whole equation. It was not, from what I saw, for balance, locomotion, or any other factor. They were a people about learning, growing more in their technological prowess. Strangely, they like myself, were interested, heavily if I might add, in the past." Another drag.

"Yet, even looking over shoulders, listening in too conversations, I could never gather how they grew so quickly to the techno-gods they had become. Nor about those blasted Preludes," A sigh ensued, before another hit, killing the cigarette before it was dropped down then presumably stepped on, "Anyway. The Jayill were a fun bunch. They were only in a few battles, one main example being when they were invaded. I couldn't even manage to see whom the attackers were! They were blasted into oblivion a if they had never been here to begin with!" The dying man laughed a moment, then coughed a few times. Magically it seemed the cigarette had cleared some of the... Whatever was fudging up his lungs.

"Yet.. Other than their overly powerful tech, and utter annihilating strength in battle, little more could be said about the Jayill. Even their tech is mostly ignored to this day! None know what they look at when they see it!" Loovisk grinned, "Nor will I help you cheat and find any. Just look for yourself, if you think its worth it.

"They had one major other thing actually, now that I think about it: they tried harvesting power from their sun, for some immense project, can't explain what. It worked well, for a time. Through some means most people cannot understand, they directly siphoned a vast amount solar emission." Loovisk reclined at this point, crossing a leg over the other, "Honestly, ignoring the confusion, its friggen amazing. The feats they achieved.. Well, they frakked up. In a push for more than they had been gathering, or perhaps simply because it was time, maybe the Force, for whatever reason... The sun went omega.

"The people deduced quickly that they had a mere few days. In a rare spat, it seemed half of the population came too one conclusion: leave the planet. The others chose to attempt to protect the planet." Loovisk grinned, "Can you understand that? The prospective gall, the absolute vanity required to believe they could stop the cosmos? It... Well it was beautiful inspire of the stupidity.

"Well, those who were leaving did so, but waited within reach of the solar system, believing they would soon see their brethren again, that those 'idiots on the ground' would see how impossible it was what they wished to achieve." Laughter glitches slightly with static, "They had a few days, that's it! Not months, not even weeks! Just days!

"Here is the kicker! The could have succeeded!" Loovisk nodded solemnly, "They almost did. With the very energy they had siphoned, they powered a planetary shield, the first any of them had ever heard of something like that as well. But it took much too long to establish properly. Thus the devastating explosion that destroyed almost every object in the solar system, ripped clean through the shield... Mostly. Having projectors about, there were a few key points that were destroyed... But not annihilated. Hence a city or two of theirs. Life though.. It was extinct."

Another cigarette was pulled free of its container, placed into his mouth, then lit, "You probably are thinking about the escapees, no? Well, here is yet another reason I think this place is cursed. Even off planet, seemingly going to survive, the Jayill were killed...By the frakkin planet itself!! Like one throws a ball to a child, the sun hurtled the planet directly into the ships!"

"Do you understand the level of... Well impossibility there? They. Were. Hit. By. The. Planet." Loovisk stated, then sighed as he threw his hands into the air, "Its impossible. The exact requirements for something like that? Astronomically unachievable."

With that he shrugged then sighed, "I hope I am not taking too long... This body doesn't have much time, and there is still so much I would like to say... These are lives that mattered... They may be gone, but it doesn't mean they should be unknown...

"That blasted planet.." At that he turned to look from his position, and if you do as well, both you - in the present - and he - the past - will be looking at the same thing for a moment, "The poisons released during the Quakes... The frakkin radiation from the fallout... He was down there just a bit too long... The sickness got too him and he made an easy mistake, letting both in..." He gestured to his own face, bringing his eyes slowly back to the holo and therefore your face, "This young man, is only 26. He looks 70! He is dying, just from a few hours on that Gods forsaken rock!!"

Turning hand over, he eyed the flesh there, "Well, I might as well tell the story. It was obviously an extravagant amount of time between the deaths of the Jayill and the next point, as the planet literally was sent rocketing through space. However it managed to align itself with another, safely halting its flight, setting the gravity tugged debris into asteroid belts about itself." He absent mindedly mumbled, "I think those are the first thing newcomers come for. They possess so much ore... Raw material... Anyway.

"Even then, it took millions of years for the next species to come, to do so. They called themselves Za'ro'bol. The Za is what I dubbed them. That name. Damn. Am I right?" He laughed and held up his hands, "Well anyway, I watched the Za spring up from the ground seemingly. At first they were growing at a decent rate. They sought much it seemed, always eyes too the stars and the future.

"Physically they were some what different than the Jayill. By some what I mean they were extremely different obviously. Firstly, they had these odd eye stalk things. Literally eyes on the end of these appendages... Like a slug!" Loovisk snapped and gestured, "I knew I would eventually remember what they were like. Anyway, yeah, eye stalks. Some could be upward of a friggen foot in length! Their skin was, despite what you would think, as normal as human or like species. Yet they appeared almost slippery, always... Actually yeah, lets stick with that slug appearance. That's actually a prime way to describe their appearance!

"By no means, not to say they were bug people. They were humanoid. Just... Bug attributes." Loovisk smiled, waving a hand, "Anyway they were extremely religious. They devoted almost all of their available time towards worship. There was work, of course, it was required really, just not the type most people call work. Basically farming and fixing vehicles, but almost no betterment of any kind beyond spiritual." Fixing to reach for a cigarette, he paused in his motion, "Honestly I can say watching their fall disturbed me. Most of all of the events I witnessed I think. They were good folk, people just wanting goodness for themselves." Tapping a cancer stick from the pack, he placed it too his lip, looking around for his lighter. In his speech he had happened to move about at least four of the rolled tubes, and the lighter, much more, "Ah. Here we are. God I can't stand this habit. But the body loves it."

Taking a deep pull, Loovisk held the smoke in for a long time before slowly exhaling, "There were these.. Just gargantuan Earthquakes. Massive things really. Like they were another end of the world event waiting to happen. But they didn't directly end anything. Instead in a heavily quick succession, fissures that opened in the crust released mixes of natural gases. It would seem though that each in itself was toxic, so mixing them all only made a massively new deadly fume that moved across the planet. It was like death on the march to kill everything, all over again. Another bloody purge. The Za were forced to choke on their own blood while their lungs burned from the inside, their hearts ruptured, so much more.

"Quite the depressing state, that bit. So, I'm going to just move it along." He tapped his chin a moment, "Next came my people, Sael Litsel. We did absolutely nothing really. From what I understand, we did hold the highest per person count of connections to Pressure, but ninety nine point nine nine percent of all of us did nothing more than the absolute most basic things." Loovisk showed a hand in defense, "Not too toot my own horn, but I was the first, and only, too master use of the Pressure. I had students down the road, as I said, but none could ever truly catch on. I don't know why it was that way...

"Well, we looked mostly human, with our own variations and like. But mostly just like humans." A wave of the hand sent on the conversation, "The Ddy Ab came next. Boy those guys were strange. They had three everything: eyes, nose, mouth, hands, feet, legs... I don't know the pragmatic ideals evolution had for them in mind.

"However, it seemed to not limit them. In a shorter time than the rest, they were wiped out of their own accords, yet that's the point. They achieved much, extremely large amounts, in basically no time at all. Potentially they had a chance to drastically make changes for the planet, themselves, maybe even the galaxy at large. But they tried to make advances.

"From what I witnessed, the people were attempting to create a pathogen that would assist in surviving the outlying lands, where the Planet Poisons were heavier then the cities. Most of them had managed through evolution too get minor resistance to the gases, yet should some one move too deeply into the outer areas they couldn't and would perish forthwith." Loovisk paused, then shrugged, "It is absolutely astounding what they managed to evolve around, yet still fell prey to the fix they hoped would work.

"Though, the pathogen simply destroyed them, what they had grown minor resistance toward now was a million fold worse. In spite of it being the gases that inevitably killed them, it is marked throughout the histories as a plague that ended it." Loovisk paused yet again. It seemed ever more and more obvious he held a flare for the dramatic.

"The next two too arise were of a kind, one predecessor the other successor. Of course neither lasted, but it is what was meant to occur I guess." Loovisk lit yet another cigarette, smoking silently for a moment, "I actually enjoyed my time among the Dristiin. Through the accident that allowed me to outlive my own people, I was alive during theirs. They were these huge, massive, all muscle no brain appearing behemoths most would wish to enslave for battle.

"Though, in reality they were amazingly gentle. Unnaturally so. It seemed a perversion really, for some of us to be born so... Minuscule. Yet their average was eleven feet, they weighed triple a healthy human as a weak median, and looked to be made out of granite. I witnessed a young Dristiin that lifted a boulder nearly double the height of this body, and nearly three times the same wide. Had to be a few thousand pounds. Absolutely. Incredible. Stunning really. Yet amongst them, there was zero battle. Ever. I scoured every piece of information I could find in their time, viewed them as much as possible, while still managing to keep a healthy body.

"They refused aggression. One hundred percent. If they were invaded, I am sure they would bow down without a drop of blood shed. Without throwing even a stone, they would submit instead." Loovisk held the look of a man struck with awe, "Then there was the aspect of their lives before death, another via their own hands mind you, which were great. They lived free. Every country on the planet, every locale, everyone was free to choose what they wanted in life. Theirs was a simple life one about which growth of an individual was the mainstead.

"In the sense of mass growth, they were decent. Not quite as advanced as some of the galaxy that I saw all of those years ago during my own life. However much the same as others, these were a people that perished by their own hands, this time it being nuclear power.

"Theirs was a situation that sought much, so how else for a fresh populace, would they achieve it? They managed to create self sustained plants that they rarely managed, believing the simple capabilities in place would always be capable of covering any present dangers." Finally finishing yet again another cigarette he flicked it, "So many, a massive plant would be up around, in the same way one might imagine radio towers in a heavily populated country...

"When the first went... It was just a minor accident as well. An alarm blared, but a short in the signals stopped it from reaching any maintenance in enough time. It blew. Hard." At this the weary body Loovisk inhabited shuddered. Dragging his hands over his eyes, he sighed, "Look, the point of this all is to explain a planets history that will never be heard else where. We... Me and him.. We don't got enough time to do much else... The Umriid has a Nexus now, it even repels spirits... In fighting to stay for so long, to keep the histories past my time...

"They died. The Trikl, an even more weaponized version of the Dristiin, they died. Sael, Ddy, all of us. This planet... It is done with.. There is much to come here for. Riches beyond measure. A million million years worth. But there is death, barriers to bring more too. I won't pretend to understand how this all happened.

"Even the Knizzura, the newest breed to be here, how they managed to evolve through planetary poisons, nuclear radiation and winter... Just for them to be killed by some Sith who called himself a God. Zaiden... Jayden... Kayden... Something like that. He dropped a ship here as a test, the ship held three - THREE!!! - undead. They wasted everything left away. All of it. Every single point of life snuffed out. Now... Now it seems like the planet is finally in agreement. No more. No more life, no more death. No growth, no peace.

"If you have stayed long enough to hear all of this... Please, from an ancient man that has seen the beginning, and end, of a planet... Go away. The gains are not worth it... Bring a hundred men, you might leave with six. A thousand? Thirteen. This whole place makes no sense..." A massive coughing fit cracked through his body at this point, a literal crack rang out as the cough broke something inside him, "This man... Has family... On Dantooine... Tell them... He loves the-"

Then the body falls to the ground, where it now lies parallel with the still form the holo would cover as if they were the same thing. Because they are. Loovisk perished once more, his spirit now to spent, and the kind man who let him tell his story did as well.

You glance to the side, approaching the viewport found there. This station has minimal systems to maintain life, so you are in a suit. But that isn't the point, is it? The station matters none. Its the planet. The wealth. A half dozen whole populations worth. Is it worth it?

Is dying worth it?

 

[Zaiden Dean]

ABRIDGED HISTORIES
There were hardly any battles here, not even what could be called a fight happened more than once a blue moon. This was true for the planets histories as a whole, no species was ever an aggressive one. And there were a few, at least seven. Each held its own merits, doing their own things, leaving behind their own wealth's.

However in the end, the planet and its curse killed each of them. They would leave behind everything as if they had never been.

Now there is a husk, filled with profitable ventures, if one wishes too risk death for it.


NOTES

• Loovisk spent more than three decades Time Gazing (Flow Walking) to witness as much as was able. During the times in the past he would attempt to review as much information the populaces had of their own, so the information stretches as far as mentally, physically, and possibly could be achieved
• This is a list of species, in no particular ordinance, simply written then maintained in the same order throughout. Each and every, is entirely extinct. Not a single is found anywhere eelse
• Loovisk found several other languages, but never took the time himself to translate them. Thus what is found in most locations is Basic
• What should be obvious, but will still be noted, is these examples of culture and more, were from before extinction events for the individual races
• Affiliating was not a real thing for the people of Umriid. Rarely did there be a small enough group to even call themselves affiliates of theirs. The Jayill were affiliated to technologies
• A planet that had minimal war, strife, or battle, led to a decent selection of wealth over all. Certain species were less inclined to make worthwhile choices, but even those held some things.

 

[Zaiden Dean]

Honestly its my first time using Pre-Codex, so I don't know who too tag. However I saw that tagging [member="Mahet"] was a good idea. So.. Ready for judging!

Also, shout out too @rusty. I had a massive wall before, bigger than this fin product. Initially I had so much difficulty with making decisions. I had knocked it down to roughly this, and mentioned how I wanted to bring back some of the extra fluff I had removed. His intelligent advise to not makes me see how much I already had lol.

 

[Quietus]

Moved to active Codex.

 

[Samka Derith]

Under Review

 

[Samka Derith]

[member="Zaiden James-Greyson"]

You'll need to credit the artists and provide direct links to the image sources that you use. 'www.deviantart.com' is not enough information for us to find the source due to the wealth of images there. See this topic for more help should you need it.

A Force Nexus across the entire planet would be rare. Now I can see multiple large scale extinction events being a suitable cause for a planetary Nexus of this type. If I'm understanding this submission correctly, it seems as though the Force is doing all it can to prevent any off-worlders visiting and offers absolutely no benefits to visitors, Dark or Light. Based on it only providing harmful effects I am going to approve this Nexus.

A few things with the history section, the first extinction event was the death of the sun and you list there as being no sun in orbit. The other species which appeared afterwards would therefore have had to develop without a sun. Given the many necessities a sun provides to life which there have been no adaptations to among the planet, I'm going to ask you to change this a bit. You could switch the sun's explosion to the final extinction event or have it propelled to orbit another sun or an idea entirely of your own, just offering a few suggestions

Tag me when these changes are complete

 

[Zaiden Dean]

Apologies. I don't really know how to operate Tineye, so I just copied the exact links it offered. I can try again. And will!

Yup, ZERO benefits can be gained from the nexus... I mean unless you are into having bad luck that degenerates too worse and worse points over timed, ON TOP OF getting sicker and sicker... At which point mental health evaluations are in order!

The last of your offers, is actually what I thought I had portrayed lol. It was blasted from one point in space, to a separate where it slowed and drifted into an orbit around another sun.

I will do my best to clarify this all within... Twenty minutes if I can!
[member="Samka Derith"]

 

[Zaiden Dean]

Edited.

[member="Samka Derith"]

 

[Samka Derith]

[member="Zaiden James-Greyson"]

You're going to have to link directly to image like this http://www.publicdomainpictures.net/view-image.php?image=157365&picture=dead-planet-earthrather than to albums containing it. You also must make sure we have the original source material as your second link was not the source, it was a Japanese blog pretending a variety of sci-fi, fantasy and apocalyptic artwork were the casual views from the man's house for humour.
After a little work using nothing but a right click google image search I found the original artwork and the artist here https://www.pixiv.net/member_illust.php?mode=medium&illust_id=4034962the artist's name translates as 'Noba'.

Please do this with the rest of your images.

 

[Zaiden Dean]

Well, considering I used Tineye and those were what I can find, I would recommend explaining that Tineye should not be used in the aforementioned link you showed me.

I will try yet again. Im just hoping this gets approved in time for the contest.

 

[Zaiden Dean]

Still had issues. Was inevitably going to have to change images yet again. So Im just removing them. I can always just edit them in with a modification later.

I don't want my finding links to be the reason this isn't approved in time for the contest.

[member="Samka Derith"]

 

[Samka Derith]

Well, considering I used Tineye and those were what I can find, I would recommend explaining that Tineye should not be used in the aforementioned link you showed me.

Tineye is a valid option. It will turn up a variety of domains where the image is used, it is up to you to use the information provided to find and credit the original artist but as you've removed the images this is a non-issue.

Sun ~ None

You still need a sun. I can't find anywhere in the submission that mentions orbiting around another sun. I requested this earlier and it would be a great shame if the contest deadline was missed by this oversight.

 

[Zaiden Dean]

as the planet literally was sent rocketing through space. However it managed to align itself with another, safely halting its flight, setting the gravity tugged debris into asteroid belts about itself.

This has been here the whole time. I also edited it into the initial post, but I guess it didn't save. I will fix it again.

[member="Samka Derith"]

 

[Zaiden Dean]

[member="Samka Derith"]

Edited again.

 

[Quietus]

[member="Samka Derith"]
[member="Zaiden James-Greyson"]

I am extending the deadline for this submission only until end of day tomorrow. Please do what you can to get this submission to pending by then.

 

[Samka Derith]

as the planet literally was sent rocketing through space. However it managed to align itself with another, safely halting its flight, setting the gravity tugged debris into asteroid belts about itself.

The phrasing wasn't clear though, it reads like it's orbiting another planet and is irrelevant if the original template says there is no sun.

I see no further irregularities.

Approved Pending Secondary

[member="Mahet"]

 

[Quietus]

Approved