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The Seven

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  • [SIZE=9pt]Intent: To finalize the Jar'Kai in their final stage of evolution and account for their number and casualties. [/SIZE]
  • [SIZE=9pt]Image Credit: Y[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]ahoo Images[/SIZE]
  • [SIZE=9pt]Links: [/SIZE]http://starwarsrp.net/topic/99750-the-full-reach-of-law-ga-dominion-of-atrisia-hex/page-41#entry1449589
    http://starwarsrp.net/topic/98418-the-return-of-the-king-dont-be-shy-jump-in/
    http://starwarsrp.net/topic/85434-bitter-and-petty-like-nothing-you-have-ever-seen/
    http://starwarsrp.net/topic/77498-candle-in-the-dark-ga-vs-os-invasion-of-lujo-objectives-1-2-4/page-3
    and many more. The Jar'Kai have been in almost every thread Mythos has been involved in. These are just the coolest.
  • [SIZE=9pt]Unit Name: The Seven[/SIZE]
  • [SIZE=9pt]Affiliation: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Mythos[/SIZE]
  • [SIZE=9pt]Classification: [/SIZE][SIZE=9pt]Special Forces Infantry[/SIZE]
  • [SIZE=9pt]Equipment: Every member posses a wrist [/SIZE]communicator personally customized and designed to fit their personal needs with a plethora of abilities from firing wrist rockets to sending a hovering drone to even establishing long distance communications in places with obstructed signal like a cave.
  • [SIZE=9pt]Availability: Unique[/SIZE]
  • Deployment: Limited
  • [SIZE=9pt]Strengths & Weaknesses: [/SIZE]
    [SIZE=9pt]Elite+ The Jar'kai are individually a force to be reckoned with. Force wielding[/SIZE][SIZE=9pt] Sith Warriors with years of experience and countless battles under their belt. These are not the type of warriors you cleave through and rather the type of warriors you duel with all your heart.
    Adaptable+ From Dagobah to Atrisia to Lujo and even Midvinter these warriors have faced warfare in many forms and can adapt to any situation.
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    Blast i hate flying- With the Exception of Mythos and Ashai no one here can drive a ship to any skill
    What do we do now?- Without Mythos' leadership of Lee to guide them they lose focus and direction and segon guess themselves. Sometimes infighting occurs (which is cool cause they kill each other)
  • Description: [SIZE=9pt]Once the Jar'Kai royal guard numbered three hundred strong, divided into three divisions each lead by their own captain and swore loyalty to the former king of the dead world Atrisia. From their formation they were unique in all the galaxy both in skill and tactics as well as determination and loyalty. Never was there an assortment of force users in recent history with the adaptability and mobility as the original three hundred Jar'Kai warriors.... all good things must come to an end or at the very least change. The Jar'Kai fought through countless battles, from Naboo to Aten II to Chazwa to Lujo. They were were irreplaceable. As such each one that fell shrunk their numbered until in the battle of Atrisia only one hundred and fifty remained with the child king and in their last valiant charge perished at the hand of the Galactic Alliance along with most of the world. [/SIZE]

Not all fell... that day. Once numbering three hundred now only seven remain.

Baokai The Annihilator
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  • Intent: To catalouge this member of the Seven in the Unit
  • ​Image Credit: Yahoo Images (The Last Samurai)
  • Role: Warrior Beserker. Strong man who does heavy lifting
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 34 years of age
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisian
  • Appearance: Bald, Large and an incredible physique. When not in combat he wears dark robes that make him blend in to a crowd of people and a cowl that covers his face.
  • Name: Baokai Katsumuto The Walking Arsenal.
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'Kai
  • Wealth: Moderate
  • Notable Possessions: Songsteel sword forged by himself, Armor of his father in a shrine hidden in an Asteroid in the Maw Cluster. Secret Tea Stash.
  • Skills: Force Body, telekinesis, Force Rage and Tutaminis.
  • Personality: Baokai is a man of little words but a vile temper, he meditates when he doesn't fight and trains when not meditating. When broken out of his shell and interacting with his fellow Jar'Kai members he is arrogant and boastful, load and quite 'In your face' most of the time. He doesn't care who he hurts but in secretly scared of Amaterasu as they both once had a thing...
  • Weapon of Choice: He uses several weapons mainly his sword and Kenobo but also the Dark side of the force.
  • Combat Function: A brawler and a brute. Baokai is good at breaking enemy defenses and taking a lot of damaege. He is basically the Tank of the group being able to soak up a lot of punishment while dealing out some too. Just because he is big doesn't mean he is slow he will go after the kill if he smells it.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Coming in at one hundred and ten kilograms and three in a half meters tall Baokai is a monster of a man. His sword alone is made of reinforced songsteel and measures more than half his size. His armor is unlike any other, designed in the shape of the ancient warriors of Atrisia but modified with modern technology it makes him mobile enough to keep up with most warriors in the field. HUD in his helmet and jetpack as well as mounted wrist rockets and a flamethrower give him the moniker "The Walking Arsenal" It is not his weapons that make him a fierce and formidable enemy however, it is his power in the darkside of the force. Force Rage, Force Body and formidable Telekinesis make Baokai difficult to face in single combat, his special Djem So style makes use of his physical power to add to this and his Tutaminis help him stay in the fight long after he had been wounded or severely injured. Apart from his sword and lightsaber his main weapon is a blunted staff with layered songsteel balls used for brute force blunt trauma, the weapon also has a tippeed edge that he is able to bring out like a switchblade whenever he feels the need. Baokai is the last member of the Bulwark that survived after the Atrisian charge at the gates of the palace where he singlehandedly took on and killed more than a dozen men and lived to tell the tale.

His story is a tragic one. When he was a child he was orphaned of both mother and father left to be raised by farmers and builders in the mountains of the cante. Raiders then killed what few people he knew at the tender age of fourteen abducting the child and enslaving him in their warband. Abused, tortured and starved Baokai was left for dead behind their camp one night only to discover his power in the darkside and the hatred and contempt he held for all those who would seek to hurt him or those he held dear. After a night of slaughter Baokai had his revenge. Ten years later the search by Mythos' officers for force sensitive people in the system took place and Baokai was one of the first found. Hiding after the purges and oppression of the Ancient Atrisian empire for force users but also wrecking havoc on the weak his name was well known as the Demon of the Cante. Persuasion and pay made him join, Mythos made him stay.

Baokai also makes some really good tea.
Mythos himself taught him the style he mastered, Djem so and fitted him with an arsenal of weapons also bathing him in gold but after a while monetary gains meant little and power was the only thing that Baokai thirsted for... the path with Mythos only lead him to further indulge in the quest for power....

A Path he still treads to this day.

Takeshi the Untouchable one
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  • Intent:
  • ​Image Credit: Yahoo images (Silent Samurai credit)
  • Role: The Mysterious and Supernatural one in the group
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 81
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisian
  • Appearance: Takeshi comes off as a fragile old man with a straw hat and wears a robe stylish back he was young. No one can recall what era his clothes belong to, no one is that old or versed in history.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Takeshi (Last name Unknown)
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'Kai
  • Wealth: None
  • Notable Possessions: Eleven Journals each describing a decade more or less of his life. None have ever read them. Poetry book.
  • Skills: Force Speed, Force Sense. Illusions/Mentalism (Doppelganger) Force Shield (Defending Against telekinesis)
  • Personality: Calm even in the most dire circumstances. Composed even when under fire. Quiet even when the need to be loud is imperative. Takeshi is mysterious and even Mythos doesn't know much about him. He is quiet and keep to himself writing in his poetry book and journals most of the time and never as much as looking at a stray credit. As if he longs for something or someone that will come any day now...
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: His Lightsaber.
  • Combat Function: He is fast, really fast. He drags out a fight as he avoids blows and stabs tiring his enemy out then swooping in with one swift strike. He never strikes unless he knows that it will land or aid him in the fight. He is a classical warrior.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
The oldest and most ancient of the Jar'Kai. When he joined Mythos' crusade he was already seventy seven years of age yet in the training not only did he prove to still have the strength to keep up with the strongest of the jar'kai but the speed to run with them too... run faster even. He wears no armor and wears no great technological devices other than his wrist device and communicator and single thruster jet pack that weighs next to nothing and even that is seldom that he uses. His signature straw hat and cloak have been the last thing many warriors have seen before the plasma beam of his lightsaber ended their life. In every battle and in every skirmish that the Jar'Kai have faced Takeshi has not a single scratch on his body. He has not been hit and some say he cannot be hit or touched by any weapon made by mortal hands. Mythos knows otherwise... but he wont tell. Only Mythos has landed a single blow on Takeshi and it was after a crucible of combat that lasted two moons. Takeshi is a master of Makashi and well versed in Soresu. His force speed is unmatched by any other in the twelve. His force sense is said to be able to detect when a leaf falls from a tree in the other side of the galaxy and his force meditation once helped Mythos lift a massive boulder with his telekinesis.
His poetry is the finest in the land by far.
His story is much legend and mystery. He traveled from town to town long before Akio and his empire raised Atrisia into an Empire and before Mythos ruled the planet challenging any swordsman who would dare but never saying a word. Some say he is blind and uses force sight, some say he is just an Illusion Mythos casts with his mentalism yet the only thing that is certain is that he never was even cut by a blade. When the call came from Mythos to make the Jar'Kai Takeshi agreed to join with the condition that Mythos had to hit him at least once, a pact of honor bound was made and death if Mythos was to lose the bout.

To this day Takeshi honors his word...​

Ashai The Codebreaker
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  • Intent: Add another Member to the Jar'Kai
  • ​Image Credit: Cyber Ninja by Zerahoc Deviant Art
  • Role: Assassin of the group. Hacker and Nerd.
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 27
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisian
  • Appearance: Young and quite handsome. Jet black hair and a well toned physique with eyes that when not in 'Sith Mode' are almost black. He usually wears formal attire, tux and black tie and cool jewelry and shades. The works.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Ashai Inkato The Code Breaker
  • Loyalties: The Sith Assassins. Mythos and the Jar'Kai (In that order)
  • Wealth: Wealthy. He has made and aided in several video games and virtual reality simulators that have made him quite a bit of money. He also loves to loot from battlefields and has several houses and luxury vehicles for himself.
  • Notable Possessions: Nubian penthouse in the Solar Fields. Luxury star fighters and speeders. Jewlery. Two Casinos and a Private Island in the planet of the Ssi ruu.
  • Skills: Hiding his force sensitivity and signature in the force. Art of the Small. Force Stealth. Bolt of Hatred
  • Personality: Confident and cocky like a billionaire even though is far from it, Ashai acts like he is the last coca cola in a dry desert and everyone else would just die without him. When it's time to fight and mission he becomes much like Takeshi, in fact they both have an unspoken bond kind of like grandfather and grandson.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: He weilds many weapons but his Cortosis blades are his main weapon.
  • Combat Function: He is an assassin, preferring to stay in the shadows and sacrifice armor in order to sneak behind enemy lines and strike when it is least expected. He is a good saboteur and hacker and has the ability to destabilize enemy mainframes and break coding of encrypted communications. He earned the name Codebreaker for a reason.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
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High education, noble house birth and an intelligence to match super computers in Dejarik Ashai is as cunning as he is intelligent. The only member of the Jar'Kai who broke apart and trained with the Sith Assassins aiding them in their missions behind enemy lines and assassinating key targets of opportunity throughout the One Sith Empire. Ashai is able to make forward operation bases fully functional in communications and cyber warfare in less than twenty four standard hours. His armor is self designed and an incredible marvel in technological achievement as well as unique in all the galaxy. Special cloaking device coupled with nanotechnology allow him to camouflage around any environment as well as set the temperature of his body to the exact same as that around him making him immune to detection trough thermal vision, the device also has a heart beat hider spreading the vibration of his heart beat into the environment making it also undetectable. He wields two blades of cortosis crafted by himself, Force Inhibitor darts, gas grenades, thermal detonators that fit in his shoulder pockets as well as a pair of special pistols modified from the SJ-01. He is a cunning assassin, able to hide his force signature to that of a microbe, he is a master of Ataru and skilled in Makashi, he is also a master in the art of the small. Ashai was a child when Mythos conquered the world, studying in the most prestigious of all learning centers in the system and also cheating in every exam. Ashai knew he was sensitive in the force and used it to his advantage to come out on top in every educational way but when Mythos called out for force users he was one of the first the officers interviewed.... It was simple... no one could be that skilled in coding without either cheating or the force.
He has also made several video games by himself making a small fortune off adults and children with his anonymous work.
Reluctant at first Ashai saw no advantage for himself joining the Jar'Kai but after his first taste of true power and the network of tools and skills he could evolve with Ashai had no qualms about staying. Evolution is always in his mind, to better enhance himself in whatever way possible, Ashai continues to do so.

Xiao The Fist of Mythos
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  • Intent: Make Sith Bruce Lee a thing.
  • ​Image Credit: Enter the Dragon Yahoo Images.
  • Role: The fighter of the group and martial arts teacher
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 34
  • Force Sensitivity:Master
  • Species:Atrisian
  • Appearance: Wearing traditional Atrisian clothing even if it is strongly discouraged Xiao sticks out like a soar thumb unless directed to otherwise. Short black hair and a fire in his eyes that never goes away.
  • Name: Xiao the Fist of Mythos
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'Kai
  • Wealth: Slightly Higher than moderate. He still has the prize money for all the tournaments he won but keeps it all stocked away for emergencies.
  • Notable Possessions: He possesses a prototype weapon that he practiced and fought with during some time. Two lightsabers cut short and linked by a chain. Never been used in combat outside of training but perhaps one day... (Lightsaber Nunchucks )
  • Skills: Force Body and Tutaminis. Sith Sorcery (very limited)
  • Personality: Always cheery and optimistic Xiao sees the cup half full every time. He and Mythos shared that a lot. He is also a health freak, he WILL flip out on a member and cause a fight if any of them eat something that is not absolutely nutritious and good for you in some way.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: His Fists
  • Combat Function: he will challenge his enemies to unarmed combat to test his skills and make the bout like a traditional Atrisian Martial Arts tournament.
    HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Martail Artist champion of all the system and the greatest hand to hand fighter that Mythos had ever seen so far in his life. Xiao was the reigning champion of the Atsirian martial Artist Tournament for almost a whole decade when Mythos called forth force users to join his guard. Raised by inquisitors to fight and kill force users Xiao was left out of a job when they disbanded and joined the martial arts tournament to fight who could match his skill. This course of his life ended in disappointment as challenger after challenger fell to his skill and speed in the tournament year after year. The call Mythos made offered him a once in a lifetime opportunity to find what he desired most: A Worthy Opponent. Reluctantly he trained in lightsaber combat and the skills necessary to be part of the Jar'Kai main force but now he fights only with his body as weapon.
He has written several books in diet and nutrition that all members follow.
Tutanimis and Force body allow him to deflect and withstand slashes and strikes from lightsabers and even blaster bolts but it is his raw skill and speed with his unique martial art that make him a fearsome warrior. Ancient Sith runes in the palms of his hands combined with sith sorcery and words of power allow him to strike with incredible power strong enough to crack boulders and dent durasteel without as much as a bruise. He was called the fist of Mythos for this reason, a single blow from him was enough to topple the strongest warriors from across the galaxy. He is still searching for a worthy opponent but he does so in service to the one man who defeated him...

Amaterasu The Everlasting Flame
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  • Intent: To make Martha's sister
  • ​Image Credit: Yahoo Images. walpaperawesome.com
  • Role: The Fire and Fury of the team
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 21
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisian
    Appearance: She wears red almost exclusivley and has a pretty good fashion sense. Red hair and red eyes. She is beautiful by any organic standards and her well toned and slender figure make her desirable to slave owners... shes killed a few.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Amaterasu The Fire
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'kai
    Wealth: Moderate
  • Notable Possessions: Her sisters necklace.
  • Skills: Pyroquenises, Telekinesis and Force Shield.
  • Personality: Feisty and full of life. Amaterasu almost embodies fire in her personality. She is passionate about everything she does and seeks going to any extent to achieve her goals. She hides the pain of her sisters death through combat and training always seeking to push herself into the limits of death and beyond to keep her mind off it. She and Mythos are close them two being the only solace and understanding of the loss of Martha.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: Fire is her main weapon but her blazing blade is also a part of her as much as her arms
  • Combat Function: Being a pyromancer and proficient in Juyo she mixes both the techniques into a unique fighting style Mythos calls an Art. It is beautiful to behold but terrifying to be on the receiving end of. She is always on the offensive and never taking a step back seeking to pound her enemy into submission as quickly as possible and with overwhelming volumes and blows and fire to turn enemies into ash or bits and pieces. agony and fear give her strength.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

The sister of the first Jar'Kai captain Martha, Amaterasu Shineroku is the last living daughter of the noble house of her birth. She and her twin sister both born with incredible gifts of fire and fury in the force and a passion for both love and warfare. Beautiful like her deceased sister who died at Chazwa and as packed with fury unlike anything Mythos had seen before. The only thing Mythos feared in the galaxy was Martha's rage and equally so Amaterasu, when sisters fought side by side nothing was safe not even fellow allies. Pyrokinesis was the gift Amaterasu was given and Martha's was Force body and Force rage however both were equally as talented with the blade as the other. Her voice is as soothing as a Diathim and her skills with a harp and music are the stuff of legend. Many a night she has softened for weary warriors with her melodies many lyrics composed by Takeshi. After the death of her sister her fire grew to an unprecedented degree that Mythos had not seen, along with her sister entering the training for the Jar'Kai her talent for causing massive fires was noted by now she could easily call upon a storm of fire. Telekinesis is also strong with her and the Art of Juyo just like Mythos is her preferred and most skilled fighting style, this made Mythos take great pride in being her personal teacher. Only she was trained by him personally. her red fire fire hair and the blazing sword made of beskar she wields along with her red phirk armor make her a sight to behold in combat.

She seeks revenge just like her master. Vengeance for her dead sister at the hands of the Republic and her people and house at the hands of the Galactic alliance. She is pure madness incarnate, sadistic and cruel unlike any other sith. Her psychotic tendencies have been the death of many good soldiers on her sides just because she likes to see people die.

Oda The Demon Sorcerer
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  • Intent: We need a sorcerer too
  • ​Image Credit: Oda Nobunaga likesuccess.com
  • Role:He is the consultant of magic of the team
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 42
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisian
  • Appearance: He dresses and looks like Atrisian Nobility of classical ages past. What armor he does wear is traditional in look and his facial hair and grooming is also of the classical style. Takeshi finds this very amusing.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Oda Ashaiosa
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'Kai
  • Wealth: Wealthy. he is the Lord of two Atrisian houses and before leaving the Jar'Kai he exported all his wealth into secret accounts held by well payed accountants.
  • Notable Possessions: Oda owns a secret museum of ancient weapons deep in the caverns of Midvinter that is guarded by traps and a Labyrinth.
  • Skills: Sorcery and Sith Magic.
  • Personality: Pompous and self important to an unbelievable degree. Oda is petty and takes insults no matter how slight as a personal offense to his honor. He thinks himself higher than the others and spends his time telling stories about how awesome and great him and his powers are or how he outwitted nobles and stole the hearts of fair maidens. It gets old quick. He and Mythos share the weakness of beautiful females of humanoid races because of this they have bonded several times.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: He has a lightsaber but relies mainly on sith sorcery
  • Combat Function: Oda is a tough cookie. He will keep his distance and summon undead, use sith sorcery to destroy his enemies and he has a book filled with incantations and sith rituals that allow him to pull off amazing feats of power and destruction. He is also a formidable swordsman and a cunning warrior.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Long ago two houses were in conflict before the One Sith came upon Atrisia. The house of Osha and the house of Asai. for two decades they warred between each other and none held the upper hand until the head of house Asai conscripted a thousand warriors to beseige the townhouses of house Osha burning crops and taking prisoners of the civilians. Lord Mahaki, patriarch and elder of house Osha prayed to the spirits of his ancestors for a salvation before house Osha would be doomed forever and within seven standard days a man came upon the doorstep of house Osha riding a majestic four legged beast. He claimed to be an answer to the predicament of house Osha but had demands in return that he would reveal after he got some rest and some sleep. Lord Mahaki conceded to Oda all that he asked for but Oda spoke not a word until the armies of house Ashai were at the gates with siege equipment. In their darkest hour, Lord Mahaki begged Oda for his help and promised to grant him anything that was in his power to grant. Oda spoke, demanding the marriage of himself to the daughter of Lord Mahaki, a beautiful woman spoken of across the system, a bargain Oda knew the old man would never agree to until there was no other choice. Reluctantly the Lord of house Osha agreed but Oda was not pleased, he wanted the ceremony to be conducted before he lifted a finger to help. Seeing no other hope to save his house Lord Mahaki agreed and the ceremony was hastily done in the palace of Lord Mahaki. Now being the rightful heir to house Osha, Oda stood above the balcony of the walls that defended the palace and called upon the soldiers of house Osha, once aligned he told Lord Mahaki to have them draw their swords and jump on them, killing themselves before the gates, he persuaded the Old man to give the order saying it was the only way that the house could be saved. The old Lord saw no other way, either way the men would die so he gave the order. Oda then killed lord Mahaki becoming the Lord of house Osha and naming it house Oda after himself.

Using the power of Sith Sorcery taught to him by the Lords of the Sith in Coruscant at the time and learning several rituals in the Temple of Pain when it was still around Oda raised the dead soldiers and opened the gates sending an army of undead warriors against house Ashai and as the terrified thousand swung and blasted the things Oda stood atop the gates sending Chaos Blasts from his hands against the army before riding ahead leading an army of the dead to the gates of house Ashai straight into the throne room of Lord Haikuto, the young and brash head of house Ashai. After killing his guards he promised not to harm the young lord or his house if he took his place as head of house Ashai as well. The young man was defiant, preferring death until Oda killed his mother and moved on to kill his child sister. Pleading for his sisters life Lord Haikuto submitted before being beheaded and raised as an undead along with his entire band of soldiers. Lord of two houses Oda then went under the radar, killing any messenger or civilian that came across him or his fortresses and fathered two children.

When Mythos came and called upon the system for his guard a single One Sith ship came upon house Ashai with a single Sith Lord in it's cockpit. Mythos himself. He offered Oda the chance to become more powerful than he had ever been in return for his undying loyalty and service. Oda being the practical and self serving sith he had always been demanded proof, that's when Animus Malgus the king of Atrisia showed him what he could do by swinging the Axe of Adas once and with a single blow cutting down half of his undead armies and a tower. This display of might convinced Oda to join Mythos' guard but now he follows Mythos for the power he has already attained... he always wants more and Mythos always provides him with something new.

Oda is an incredible cook, uses the style of Niman to perfection and his armor and weapons are always light as he prefers to rely on sorcery during combat.

Lee The Legend
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  • Intent: To finally make Lee a thing. The leader of the Jar'Kai
    ​Image Credit: Yahoo Images. Let Li
  • Role: He is the leader and most powerful of the Jar'Kai
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Age: 37
  • Force Sensitivity: Master
  • Species: Atrisia
  • Appearance: Lee is a master of chaining his image to suit his surroundings. Learning from the Sith Assassins how to blend in it's impossible to know what he would typically be wearing. He is the shortest of the group and his hair is gone after Atrisia. He is witty and loves to banter with Mythos while in combat he is also a stickler for communication.
SOCIAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Lee Shinto
  • Loyalties: Mythos and the Jar'Kai
  • Wealth: Moderate
  • Notable Possessions: One fifth of his own Holocron in the making.
  • Skills: Force Lightning, Force flight, Telekinesis, Force Speed and Sith Sorcery
  • Personality: He is the calm and calculating leader of the Jar'Kai for many years running and as such acts and talks like it. Rarely does he get visibly angry or annoyed and often talks to himself. When asked why he replies with "Need Expert Opinion and i only know one". He prefers to wear clothing like the robes of the high mountain monks of the Cante with their ceremonial beads but usually just wears what is best for the situation.
COMBAT INFORMATION
  • Weapon of Choice: [Military blaster rifle? Toy lightsabre? Bioweapons? Wits? The Force?]
  • Combat Function: Lee is a jack of all trades. Fighting him solo is a difficult task. he is powerful enough to stand against Mythos is full contact combat and has done so surviving for some time. He adapts to his enemy searching for weaknesses and styles to use to exploit them. it is impossible to say how he approaches a fight.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Lee is the Final member of the seven and the second captain of the Jar'kai after Martha passed away. He is the strongest of the seven by quite a large margin in fact there is not a comparison. He has fought several of them in training at the same time and come out on top every single time. His skill in martial art is unparalleled and no one can match his speed. He is a master of the way of the Sarlacc but knows how to use and fight with every lightsaber style, he knows how to use every weapon in the Atrisian and One Sith arsenal and even more. Telekinesis and force flight are second nature to him and he can even use Sith Lightning and force sight as well as sith sorcery. A match for Mythos himself he even once stood his ground and fought Ashin Varin in single combat. As a child him and his brother Sin Lau were both students of an ancient Sith master in Atrisia long before the One Sith came. the brutal training brought them both to adulthood and as their final task the old master tested them to fight to the death for the right to be his apprentice. After a long fight of remorsless combat Lee came out on top killing his brother and few months later his master as well. When the call came for a Sith lord to rule Atrisia Lee did not think twice about joining his crusade and fighting his war as it meant becoming stronger and gaining more power. It was not long before Lee himself outclassed everyone except Martha and became second in command to the Jar'Kai guard. After the death of Martha his promotion did not even need be said, he had killed more people than the entire Jar'Kai in service combined together and his acts of brutality and bloodshed earned a name as an individual in a place where most knew them as a unit...

Lee is loyal to Mythos to this day and is seeking a rematch with one former empress.
 
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[member="Mythos"]

So, prepare for what is likely going to be a very long list so I'll be breaking it down for each section:

General Unit Notes
  • The title at the top of the submission reads the Twelve, but the sub is called the Seven. Please change this
  • Their classification would not be Special Force infantry, these are a unit of Force Masters. Please change this to reflect that
  • Does this wrist communicator that can fire rockets, send out a drone, and establish long-rang communications have a Factory sub for reference?
  • I'll be perfectly blunt here, those weaknesses are not weaknesses. That they can't fly themselves is never an issue, especially when you as Mythos or Lee can fly them wherever you want to send them and if Mythos isn't around, they lose focus and second guess themselves when they have a designated commander makes no sense. Please change these weaknesses to be something more.
Baokai
  • First off, please link the image to the actual site it comes from, not Yahoo Sources.
  • While songsteel no longer needs a RM thread for unique weapons and such, I am extremely uneasy about him wielding two songsteel weapons.
  • His armor should be included in his possession section, and does it have a Factory sub for reference considering you describe it as unlike any other?
  • I'm a bit wary of letting him have Force Body, Force Rage and Tutaminis together, especially as you describe him being able to shrug off serious wounds. That seems a bit overpowered to me, and I would recommend either toning down the description or eliminating one of these abilities.
  • Your personality contradicts itself as you start off by saying he is a man of few words and a vile temper, but then state he is loud and boastful among his fellows. Please fix the contradictions, also loud is misspelled as load.
Takeshi
  • As before, link to the actual site for image, not Yahoo Sources.
  • His jet pack should be included in his notable possessions, along with his lightsaber. A further note is does this jet pack have a Factory sub for reference considering it weighs next to nothing which would be quite the jump in jet pack technology.

  • Mythos said:
    In every battle and in every skirmish that the Jar'Kai have faced Takeshi has not a single scratch on his body. He has not been hit and some say he cannot be hit or touched by any weapon made by mortal hands. Mythos knows otherwise... but he wont tell. Only Mythos has landed a single blow on Takeshi and it was after a crucible of combat that lasted two moons.
    This part right here is just no, this is an NPC and while flavor text is all well and good, I will not accept an NPC either as a unit or individual that cannot be touched. Tone down the description.

  • Mythos said:
    His force speed is unmatched by any other in the twelve. His force sense is said to be able to detect when a leaf falls from a tree in the other side of the galaxy and his force meditation once helped Mythos lift a massive boulder with his telekinesis.
    Once again, you mention the Twelve, but the unit is called the Seven. Also, further on in the submission, you describe Lee as being the fastest but here you describe Takeshi as fastest with Force Speed. Which is it?
Ashai
  • As before, link to the actual site for image
  • Weapons and armor should be included in notable possessions. A related to note to this is another restricted material in cortosis, and a banned technology in nanotechnology, appear now without a RM thread. His armor also needs a Factory sub for reference as you describe it as unique, and frankly, rather overpowered when it comes to stealth.

  • Mythos said:
    Hiding his force sensitivity and signature in the force. Art of the Small. Force Stealth. Bolt of Hatred
    These Force abilities, combined with his armor, basically seem to describe him as totally undetectable, even by PCs. Please tone this down.

  • Mythos said:
    Ashai acts like he is the last coca cola in a dry desert and everyone else would just die without him
    Please remove mentions of anything related to Earth or Earth brands. On the topic of personality, this needs expanded on as well.

  • Mythos said:
    He is a good saboteur and hacker and has the ability to destabilize enemy mainframes and break coding of encrypted communications.
    How is he able to do this?

  • Mythos said:
    Ashai is able to make forward operation bases fully functional in communications and cyber warfare in less than twenty four standard hours.
    Again, how does he do this so fast?

  • Mythos said:
    Special cloaking device coupled with nanotechnology allow him to camouflage around any environment as well as set the temperature of his body to the exact same as that around him making him immune to detection trough thermal vision, the device also has a heart beat hider spreading the vibration of his heart beat into the environment making it also undetectable.
    As stated previously, remove mention of nanotechnology to begin with. Number two, a special cloaking device would fall under the Personal Cloaking Device RM thread, which would need to be completed to keep this here. Number three, as also mentioned previously that combined with his Force abilities, he can't be detected in anyway.

  • Mythos said:
    He wields two blades of cortosis crafted by himself, Force Inhibitor darts, gas grenades, thermal detonators that fit in his shoulder pockets as well as a pair of special pistols modified from the SJ-01.
    All of this should be noted in notable possessions.
 
Xiao
  • As before, link to the actual site for image, not Yahoo Sources.


  • Mythos said:
    Two lightsabers cut short and linked by a chain. Never been used in combat outside of training but perhaps one day... (Lightsaber Nunchucks )
    *blinks* I'm not sure that would work, but that is a question for Factory to decide.


  • Mythos said:
    Tutanimis and Force body allow him to deflect and withstand slashes and strikes from lightsabers and even blaster bolts but it is his raw skill and speed with his unique martial art that make him a fearsome warrior. Ancient Sith runes in the palms of his hands combined with sith sorcery and words of power allow him to strike with incredible power strong enough to crack boulders and dent durasteel without as much as a bruise.
    No, just no. Tutaminis and Force Body might help stop blaster bolts, but it is not going to stop a lightsaber attack across a bare chest.

    Mythos said:
    He was called the fist of Mythos for this reason, a single blow from him was enough to topple the strongest warriors from across the galaxy.
    Once again, no. This is a running theme for this submission, but I feel it needs reiterated again for this point. NPCs are never supposed to be as powerful as PCs.
Amaterasu
  • As before, link to the actual site for image, not Yahoo Sources.
  • Pyrokinesis is spelled wrong. Fix this.


  • Mythos said:
    Her voice is as soothing as a Diathim and her skills with a harp and music are the stuff of legend. Many a night she has softened for weary warriors with her melodies many lyrics composed by Takeshi.
    Mythos said:
    She is pure madness incarnate, sadistic and cruel unlike any other sith. Her psychotic tendencies have been the death of many good soldiers on her sides just because she likes to see people die.
    These contradict each other.


  • Mythos said:
    her red fire fire hair and the blazing sword made of beskar she wields along with her red phirk armor make her a sight to behold in combat.
    Once again, we have more restricted materials in beskar and phrik appearing.
Oda
  • As before, link to the actual site for image, not Yahoo Sources.


  • Mythos said:
    Oda owns a secret museum of ancient weapons deep in the caverns of Midvinter that is guarded by traps and a Labyrinth.
    I'm curious how a Sith Master would be able to get in and out of Midvinter in the middle of SJO space?


  • Mythos said:
    use sith sorcery to destroy his enemies and he has a book filled with incantations and sith rituals that allow him to pull off amazing feats of power and destruction.
    This part should really be reserved for PCs, and I would want to know what incantations and rituals are contained within this book.


  • Mythos said:
    sending Chaos Blasts from his hands
    What are Chaos Blasts?
Lee
  • As before, link to the actual site for image, not Yahoo Sources.


  • Mythos said:
    chaining his image to suit his surroundings.
    Should be changing instead of chaining


  • Mythos said:
    Notable Possessions: One fifth of his own Holocron in the making.
    How does he have one fifth of his own holocron done?


  • Mythos said:
    Skills: Force Lightning, Force flight, Telekinesis, Force Speed and Sith Sorcery
    I notice in your description that Force Sight is mentioned, but not included here.


  • Mythos said:
    Weapon of Choice: [Military blaster rifle? Toy lightsabre? Bioweapons? Wits? The Force?]
    This was left like this, what are his weapons of choice?


  • Mythos said:
    Fighting him solo is a difficult task. he is powerful enough to stand against Mythos is full contact combat and has done so surviving for some time.
    Once again, NPCs are not supposed to be as powerful as PCs.


  • Mythos said:
    He is the strongest of the seven by quite a large margin in fact there is not a comparison. He has fought several of them in training at the same time and come out on top every single time. His skill in martial art is unparalleled and no one can match his speed.
    Throughout the sub, you have mentioned that each individual is the best at what they do, but then Lee here tops all of them so that contradicts each point for those individuals.


  • Mythos said:
    He is a master of the way of the Sarlacc but knows how to use and fight with every lightsaber style, he knows how to use every weapon in the Atrisian and One Sith arsenal and even more.
    Mythos said:
    Telekinesis and force flight are second nature to him and he can even use Sith Lightning and force sight as well as sith sorcery.
    So he is a master of every lightsaber form and a master of each of his Force skills... No, that is way too powerful for an NPC. This needs toned down.
I'm going to be honest here, I see seven extremely powerful Force masters, each with extremely powerful abilities and unique weaponry and armor. The submission is loaded with restricted materials and includes a banned material in the form of nanotechnology. Each individual that makes up this unit is, frankly, overpowered. It is for this reason that I will be denying this submission. You are free to second chance this of course. I would highly recommend toning these guys down and subbing them individually.

Link to Second Chance thread if that is what you desire: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/34722-second-chance/

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