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  • Intent: To provide a set of alchemized knives for Amethyst Atreides
  • Image Source: Myself (Image, headers), Killzone 2 (Some header elements)
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Primary Source: N/A
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  • Manufacturer: The Devil's Claws
  • Affiliation: [member="Amethyst Atreides"], Closed-Market
  • Model: Alchemized Karambit knives
  • Modularity: No

  • Production: Unique
  • Material: Alchemized Meteoric Iron
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  • Classification: Pair of daggers
  • Size: Average - 36 Centimeters
  • Weight: Average
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  • Sorrow: When cutting into someone's flesh, Sorrow can transfer intense memories from the victim to the wielder, enabling the user of this knife to use this information to play mind games with the enemy
  • Despair: This blade can slowly drain the life essence of its victims, taking a little with each cut and transferring that energy to the wielder
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  • Lightsaber Resistant: Forged out of meteoric iron, the knives have been alchemized to be lightsaber resistant and can block lightsaber strikes
  • Memory Thief: The dagger Sorrow has been imbued with the ability to transfer its victim's memories to the wielder, allowing the wielder to use this information in order to play mind games with her victims
  • Life Stealer: The dagger Despair has been imbued with abilities similar to the technique Force Drain, allowing its wielder to potentially slowly drain away her victim's life force with each cut
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  • Force Light: Like all alchemized weapons and items, Sorrow and Despair are vulnerable to the Force Light technique, which can damage, or even destroy them
  • Ysalamiri: Sorrow and Despair depend upon their connection to the Force, in order to function. Ysalamiri, void stones, or other Force-negating methods will block their abilities
  • Dark Beacon: As is often the case with alchemized objects, Sorrow and Despair emit a very strong and noticeable Darkside presence in the Force, giving away their user's position to other Force sensitives in a radius of thirty meters or more, depending on the level of training
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Like is often the story with gifts given by the Sith, the tale of Sorrow and Despair begins with fear and pain. Once upon a time, there was a Sith Lord named Darth Tacitus. He was the ruler of the planet Nelvaan, a cold and frigid world located within the heart of the Confederacy of Independent Systems.

One day, the Sith Lord met a young woman who went by the name Amethyst, of the House Atreides, who's breathtaking beauty and inner strength so astonished Tacitus, that he fell in love with her. So he took her with him to his frigid fortress on the icy world over which he ruled and began to teach her in the ways of the Sith.

To him, she was the center of the universe, his only comfort and the only person he truly loved. But, having lost another lover to Death's cruel embrace, the love he felt for Amethyst was always accompanied by the fear of losing her to the same fate. So, the ruler of Nelvaan gathered his most skilled sorcerers and alchemists, a cabal of masters of the Darkside known as the Devil's Claws and ordered them to forge a pair of Karambit daggers using the foulest and most bloody of Sith rituals, in order to imbue them with special abilities that would aid his lover in combat and keep her safe from those who wished her harm.

A hundred prisoners were dragged into the deepest bowels of the Fortress of Solitude, never to be seen again. A hundred prisoners were tortured and then killed, the deed so gruesome that it doesn't bear mentioning within these pages, lest it forever scar the minds of those reading these words with images of the most brutal atrocities known to man and alien alike.

The first dagger was named Sorrow and the touch of its cold and wicked blade, could transfer its victim's most intense memories back to the knife's wielder, allowing her to use them to torment her enemy with hidden secrets and the images of loved ones.

The second dagger was given the name Despair and it is an appropriate name, for the bite of this blade can steal the victim's life energy and transfer it back to the blade's wielder with each cut, giving the Sith Lord's lover the ability to drain away her enemy's life and use it to heal her own wounds.

The two daggers form a matching pair, forged from the same piece of meteoric iron and imbued with the shared souls of those who had been brutally sacrificed so that these weapons could be made, giving them their unique powers and the ability to block lightsaber strikes with their wicked blades. Their cold, dark presence in the Force is unmistakable, casting their twin, black shadows like dark lighthouses summoning the storm amidst a calm sea.

These unholy blades are frightening and deadly, but there are some ways to avert their horrible powers. Like so many artifacts of the Darkside, they can not withstand the touch of a pure manifestation of Light. Indeed, its mere presence will weaken these knives, until they are completely eroded away and reduced to the dust from which they came.

The wielder of these knives would also come upon an unpleasant situation in the presence of Force-blocking items or techniques, as an Ysalamiri or a Void stone would block these daggers' connection to the Force, preventing their powers from being used.

However, despite these shortcomings, Sorrow and Despair passed the Sith Lord's inspection, who gazed upon their beautifully-engraved blades with satisfaction. Upon receiving the two weapons, he gifted them to his lover on the very same day, as a token of his affection and proof of his desire to keep her safe from the cold touch of Death.

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Hey there! I'll be helping you out with this.

First thing I notice here is that you've chosen the weapons to be lightweight. Since you're using Sith Alchemy, one of the inherent issues with it is that it increases the weight of the invested item. Is the base item something extremely lightweight? Otherwise, you might have to increase this rating a bit.

Also, could you elaborate a bit for me on how you're getting these effects? I assume they're based off the powers Memory Walk and Force Drain but your method is what counts here.

(You also misspelled Despair in the Special Effects are, just in case you wanted to fix that.)

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[member="Alkor Centaris"]

Ooh! Forgot the part about the weight increasing. Fixed now (increased the weight).

Also fixed the other two parts by adding some links. The powers used are Telepathy (for mind reading) and Force Drain. How the wielder uses those memories is up to her (in this case, Amethyst is a shapeshifter who can take on the appearance of loved ones). It can be something said, or brought up, or projected with other Force powers (its up to the user).
 
Darth Tacitus said:
This blade slowly drains the life essence of its victims
Throw the word can between blade and slowly (probably a good idea to remove the s from drains when doing so for grammar).


Darth Tacitus said:
allowing its wielder to slowly drain away her victim's life force with each cut
Throw the word potentially in between to and slowly
 
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