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  • Intent: [Beholding a secret base in storage on this purple planet made a perfect plan for an empire unnoticed, being in the unknown region it'd be far to reach and an atmosphere earth like.]
  • ​Image Credit: Narbada
  • Canon: [N/A]
  • Links: [Deviant Art]
  • Narbada
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Narbada
  • Demonym: [Nardoshians]
  • Region: [Unknown Regions]
  • System Name: [Tartecta]
  • System Features: [Konletio, a known sector of the system. Being placed on the outside, disabling most interceptions/transmission and electrics, acting as a nebula, only Forgotten Defeat technology and Nardoshian Tech may pass. Flac'ordo, being a huge planet, the size of a gas planet, though the size was unbelievable. There was important resources of desire, though also containing ancient artifacts. However the species there are extinct, there's rings surrounding it, a red and yellow tint. With a purple acid just like the streams and valleys of Narbada.
  • Coordinates: [The coords are 13-x 29-y (13,29)]
  • Major Imports: [N/A(Not trusting others, this planet and system has not been discovered by outside armies except for the Forgotten Defeat, it's known by Mandalore and the Forgotten Defeat also having a trade connection with Mandalore]
  • Major Exports: [Shipments, Cargo, Equipment, Weapons, Vehicles, Explosives. For it's exports to be carried out, it's equipment is transported by a ship to Mandalore, from Mandalore to another planet. The planet still being undiscovered by others, except for the Forgotten Defeat. For a ship to come back into the atmosphere, there is a shipment hold on Mandalore which had been established already. Ships that sell and buy from Narbada must go to Mandalore and deliver their stuff to the Forgotten Defeat shipment pickup where a ship comes to pick their supplies/money up and trades from there]
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: [Standard (Earth Like)
  • Climate: [Different Hotter, other temperatures and mixed]
  • Primary Terrain: [Stone tree's, rock terrain, little vegetation, streams of purple acid like substance. (Certain parts, which the base is located) Certain parts including grass and flat area and places of comfort, where domes can be made with filtered and clean earth like air]

  • Major Locations: [Miketoes Bazaar, near cliffs and mountains. Huge streams of water, acids on the outside. Thick air supply and a nice spot to get sunlight, a perfect angle of the sun. A city like area, holding markets such as Miketoe's Bazaar. Clean water supply, fresh food, and a satisfying view. This location is where the fingers of the "Nardo" Having a huge cliff in the shape of a bridge, letting passage over and under. Most finest spot to relax and hang out, a major spot but also covered.]
Force Nexus
Sauroki Forest. A desert with a warm temperature, a strong force sensing place. The habitat of strong and ancient creatures, having a nice view as well. Being in the middle of the inner regions of the planet, like a piedmont, containing many species and holding a Sith temple, the unknown and off/odd part about it was that there was a Jedi Temple right beside it, with 2 hands shaking each others hands as a banner for both. As ruins were on the exit of the pathway to the temples.


POPULATION
  • Native Species: [Nardoshians]
  • Immigrated Species: [Humans/Mandalorians/Imperial Loyalists]
  • Population: [Moderately Populated]
  • Demographics: [Humans, Mandalorians, Nardoshians. Any other, no rebel loyalists.]
  • Primary Languages: [Basic]
  • Culture: [No religion, belief in the universe. Strong belief in neutralism, having no other thoughts about it. Arts are drawn through energy, to them force is energy, energy of all types. Sports like sparring and training exercise also plays an important part, these are strong minded species but decided to follow the league of the Forgotten Defeat.]
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: [Low belief in democracy a mix between this and a custom(Having little to no belief in buying, this species do stuff for free, and don't focus on harming the planet. Race vs Race isn't believed.]
  • Affiliation: [These species are extreme Loyal to the Forgotten Defeat]
  • Wealth: [High, the ability to work with a species with a open minded and teamwork power would generate the freedom to mine resources without restrictions. Allowed to have multiple mines and rigs digging for supply, sometimes in a natural way. Often using solar powered bases and factories. Since the star of the system is at least 1/2 a size bigger than the original sun seen near earth, this has it's own flares and energy. It's energy powers and has different unknown resources that may be extracted]
  • Stability: [High. No, people are satisfied and wealthy off of supplies. In between, having bases and military power is not a peaceful view point. Safe to those whom are under the influence and control of the Forgotten Defeat, other visitors such as rebels may be trespassing but wont be attacked. A good feel, no sympathy for those who oppose threats, there are no sudden thoughts. The people here are greatly happy, they do not feel the lack of power, there is no confusion. Nothing wrong here.]
  • Freedom & Oppression: [Outsiders and Natives also insiders are free to move around, leave, and enter, when and whenever they'd like and want to, this is the reason behind trade between the Mandalorians and this planet. No. There is no fear, only the fear of daring to attack the great remnant that has been established so greatly on this planet. No, the setup is all fairly legal and equal.]

MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY

  • Military: [The military power here is huge, it shows off how much time and credits were spent into founding it, having such a huge empire makes the enemy flee(even though there have never been any recent attacks)Shipyards are outside of the planet, and built around the whole system. A base big enough to cover an entire continent, not worldwide/global. The navy is huge and contains certain branches, not to many. Ranks from low to high and different legions. The shipyards and resources, also turrets set up throughout the sector. It's a major faction base. The tech here is discovered only by the mandalorians and the forgotten defeat, also giving new materials and rich resource.
  • Technology: [Technology levels are high. Strong and rich technology, also following behind skills and branches. Technology to travel far and to other planets throughout the system. The rest N/A]



HISTORICAL INFORMATION
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Back in 833 ABY, a mandalorian fascinated with the technology of the Galactic Empire that existed in bby, he wanted to re-make the empire and destroy the flaws and replenish the flawlessness. He wanted to settle some where else, he wanted to be different. A couple years later he was arrested for treason, then being held in a public prison he found a partner that would stay by his side like brothers. Somehow it was a Nardoshian, he wanted to believe in what he believed. They shared their locations of birthplaces. The mandalorian came up with his idea to find the planet and make his own empire. He got Mandalorians and other volunteers, also old time Imperial Loyalists, nardoshians would follow him. As time passed his friend was killed by another employee of a major faction. He wanted his faction to strike back but, years down the road later on he forgot, and instead focused on something else. He went to the system and found the planet, soon finding it in 834 ABY, and bringing 16 colonies with him. Narshodians honored him for protecting the son of the King Nordo, the giant beast of the planet. Having his son killed he decided it was time to join him, he gave the ruling power to the Mandalorian. Settled in 835 ABY. For mass wide empires, and a perfect hidden planet/capital for The Forgotten Defeat. Having wars and conflicts between other old and ancient factions in the system, disease and death spread. The religious discrimination passed along, other planets hating Narbada's non-religious belief's, so then the Narshodians won, their powerful species and beholding brain power. Later on the planet took on attacks from other planets again, Narshodians completely wiping them out. In order for the Narshodians to be limited the others placed chemicals on their planet which caused the Narshodians to find innocent and evil sides to be destroyed and decimated. Later on in 20BBY the clone wars was heard of by messengers and spies, the war caused fear which drove them insane and started to make domes, just in-case. The domes could activate shields that would last up for weeks, and when hit on, they powered up more. The shields are used and made out of the resources and renewable supplies from other planets and theirs. After doing so all the way untill 800ABY there'd be acid, having the chemicals finally removed, not doing damage nor killing any nardoshians they made a few outside dome cities and bases, also camps.



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[member="Tarishee"] like I said with your species submission, Ashin has had things to take care of in real life and can't give this the attention needed so I'll be reviewing instead.

You can expect a detailed response from me within 24 hours :)
 

Tarishee

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Samka Derith said:
[member="Tarishee"] like I said with your species submission, Ashin has had things to take care of in real life and can't give this the attention needed so I'll be reviewing instead.

You can expect a detailed response from me within 24 hours :)
Umm hi, has my Nardoshian specimen been accepted, sorry for asking too much.
 
[member="Tarishee"] You'll know when a submission has been approved, you'll receive a notification.

Now to the topic at hand:

Firstly please put the image source link with the image credit.



Tarishee said:
Major Imports: [N/A(Not trusting others, this planet and system has not been discovered by others] Major Exports: [Shipments, Cargo, Equipment, Weapons, Vehicles, Explosives,]
If the planet is undiscovered how does it have exports?



Tarishee said:
Force Nexus Sauroki Forest. A desert with a warm temperature, a strong force sensing place. The habitat of strong and ancient creatures, having a nice view as well. Being in the middle of the inner regions of the planet, like a piedmont, containing many species and holding a Sith temple, the unknown and off/odd part about it was that there was a Jedi Temple right beside it, with 2 hands shaking each others hands as a banner for both. As ruins were on the exit of the pathway to the temples.
On the planet template (here) you'll see a Force Nexus has its own points you must fill out.



Tarishee said:
Primary Languages: [Deep, English, scratchy and a rodian type of accent in between wookie and rodian]

Please put 'Basic' instead of 'English'. The rest isn't describing languages but ways of speaking. If they aren't languages, remove them.

Across the rest of your submission there are a lot of random comments such as "no" and "Not at all" with no context in sentences. Please clear these and other bits of misplaced punctuation to the best of your ability and then tag me to continue :)
 

Zeradias Mant

Democracy Dies in Darkness
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I am archiving this sub for inactivity. When you are ready to continue working on it, tag myself or another member of Codex Staff and we will move it to the Pre-Codec for you, where you may complete the aforementioned edits required from your Codex Judge.
 
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