Work In Progress Lowrin IV

[Darth Retrius]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: To establish a planet that looks incredibly similar to Ancient Rome for Darth Retrius
• Image Credit: Getty Images

• Canon: No
• Permissions: Anyone technically can travel here, but not a lot of people know about the existence of this planet. If you do want to travel here, please notify me if it is not in a roleplay with me, that way I can keep its history intact and without and contradiction.
• Links: https://www.starwarsrp.net/threads/darth-retrius.189068/

GENERAL INFORMATION

• Planet Name: Lowrin IV
• Demonym: Lowrini
• Region: Far Outer Rim
• System Name: Lowrin
• System Features: Rotation around a single sun causing yearly seasons, the only other planets surrounding the same sun are uninhabited
• Location: The only Red hex that touches the very left edge of the Galaxy Map.
• Major Imports: None (No outside contact except for Darth Retrius)
• Major Exports: None
• Unexploited Resources: Durasteel, Phrik, possibly Kyber

GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION

• Gravity: Standard
• Climate: Temperate
• Primary Terrain: Grasslands with some mountains
• Atmosphere: Type I

LOCATION INFORMATION

• Capital City: Ronalin
• Planetary Features: Interconnected cities, no advanced technologies, mix of urban and rural across the entire planet.
• Major Locations: Ronalin and other surrounding cities are the most heavily populated areas, with other similar areas across the planet. There are also some large areas of the planet dedicated to strictly farmland. These two area types are scattered throughout the planet, with a nice Interconnected mix that makes a popular city or isolated farmland available to anyone.
• Force Nexus Details: None, the planet has no specific connection to either side of the Force, and aside from Darth Retrius, their knowledge of the Force is little-to-none. There is, therefore, no Nexus.

POPULATION

• Native Species: Humans
• Immigrated Species: None
• Population: Heavy in urban areas, moderate in rural areas.
• Demographics: Exclusively human, any aliens would be feared because of lack of knowledge.
• Primary Languages: The only language is their own (Lowrini) due to lack of outside connections.
• Culture: Due to lack of Force connection and knowledge, they have no religion. They live simple, primitive lives. The wealthy lived at the very tops of society, controlling much of the less fortunate's lives. Their massive gladiator ring in Ronalin offered for their entertainment, with the gladiators being the poor who sold themselves into slavery to support themselves and/or their families in the future. Simple, yet beautiful architecture in urban regions, and less impressive but highly practical architecture in rural regions. Jobs for middle and lower-class citizens include building, farming, and trading. Darth Retrius, upon arrival, was thrown into the gladiator ring due to nobody knowing who he was or where he was from. He killed all of the wealthy members of society, and became the sole ruler of the planet. This has made the middle and lower class thrive economically. Daily life would include working most of the day (whether that be building, farming, or hunting Nerfs). The native people are usually very hard workers. There is usually some time during the day that everybody can find to relax afterwards. Sometimes, this is filled with watching plays, which is something Darth Retrius contributed to their culture. The destroyed gladiator ring was rebuilt and repurposed to be the Grand Theater, with some people even writing the plays as a second job. Overall, everybody is usually happy and enjoys living under the rule of Darth Retrius because of the freedoms he has given them and the advancements he has given them. They enjoy working for him, and he even shows gratitude to them when that have done a good job, making them want to do it more.
• Economy: The economy is based heavily on trade of tools and food. They do have a standard currency, however, which are gold coins. Their main food sources are Nerfs, as well as the plants grown by farmers. Passes into the Grand Theater and other smaller theaters also help circulate their gold. It is a large mix of using gold to buy things and using what you have for trade, and (despite how chaotic that sounds) this has offered a very stable economy and helped ensure that people do not go into debt often.

GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY

• Government: Autocracy
• Affiliation: Darth Retrius
• Wealth: The planetary wealth is incomparable to other planets due to lack of outside connections. Wealth varies throughout the planet, but variation has gone down exponentially.
• Stability: Very high stability, everybody loves Darth Retrius for aboloshing slavery as a gladiator and evening the planetary wealth. Outside visitors would have to be approved by Darth Retrius, otherwise they will likely be killed,
• Freedom & Oppression: A fair amount of freedom has been given to the people through Darth Retrius, and everybody is happy under his rule. Very positive.

MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY

• Military: No military capabilities whatsoever due to lack of advancements
• Technology: Very little technological advancements have been made, the best technological advancements are plows and carts. Writing has recently been developed to record the history of Darth Retrius.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Previously undiscovered and not settled by outsiders, the native humans have always (inexplicably) been there. Darth Retrius has been the only outside connection, and he has not allowed them to use his technology or travel with him. Any more outside connections from a third party would likely cause planet-wide chaos, especially if they oppose Darth Retrius.

 

[Allyson Locke]

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[Allyson Locke]

Image Credit: Getty Images

Please add the link itself to each image you're using, you've added the embedded but we need the required link.

Permissions: Anyone technically can travel here, but not a lot of people know about the existence of this planet. If you do want to travel here, please notify me if it is not in a roleplay with me, that way I can keep its history intact and without and contradiction.

Please remove this. People do not have to notify you if they're going to use a planet that has been codified. Once its been approved through the codex it becomes public domain and people are allowed to use them for roleplay. Planets are not your personal fiefdom. They're for the community to enjoy - And may exist on the website long after you're gone. This is non-negotiable.

Major Locations: Ronalin and other surrounding cities are the most heavily populated areas, with other similar areas across the planet. There are also some large areas of the planet dedicated to strictly farmland. These two area types are scattered throughout the planet, with a nice Interconnected mix that makes a popular city or isolated farmland available to anyone.

Please expand on the locations, this is very vague. What cities are on the planet? What is the capital? How does each city differ? There is no information here to help someone understand the planet nor help provide information for roleplay. This is extremely vague.

Demographics: Exclusively human, any aliens would be feared because of lack of knowledge

This is also very vague, please expand. For reference the term "Demographic" means: statistical characteristics of a population, including age, gender, income, education, occupation, and other relevant factors. Please incorporate this into your submission.

Primary Languages: The only language is their own (Lowrini) due to lack of outside connections.

Please expand, this is a non canon language - is it spoken? is it gestures or a variations of sound? are there different dialects per cities? is there a difference in language between city folk and famers?

Culture: Due to lack of Force connection and knowledge, they have no religion. They live simple, primitive lives. The wealthy lived at the very tops of society, controlling much of the less fortunate's lives. Their massive gladiator ring in Ronalin offered for their entertainment, with the gladiators being the poor who sold themselves into slavery to support themselves and/or their families in the future. Simple, yet beautiful architecture in urban regions, and less impressive but highly practical architecture in rural regions. Jobs for middle and lower-class citizens include building, farming, and trading. Darth Retrius, upon arrival, was thrown into the gladiator ring due to nobody knowing who he was or where he was from. He killed all of the wealthy members of society, and became the sole ruler of the planet. This has made the middle and lower class thrive economically. Daily life would include working most of the day (whether that be building, farming, or hunting Nerfs). The native people are usually very hard workers. There is usually some time during the day that everybody can find to relax afterwards. Sometimes, this is filled with watching plays, which is something Darth Retrius contributed to their culture. The destroyed gladiator ring was rebuilt and repurposed to be the Grand Theater, with some people even writing the plays as a second job. Overall, everybody is usually happy and enjoys living under the rule of Darth Retrius because of the freedoms he has given them and the advancements he has given them. They enjoy working for him, and he even shows gratitude to them when that have done a good job, making them want to do it more.

From what this reads is their entire culture is based around Darth Retrius. What are they beyond him? What were they before him? A planet's culture should be about the planet not a glorified fable about your character. A planet submission should be about the planet and if the planet cannot stand up without being a retelling of your characters history it shouldn't be submitted. This section requires heavy work and heavy changes. Please redo.

Economy: The economy is based heavily on trade of tools and food. They do have a standard currency, however, which are gold coins. Their main food sources are Nerfs, as well as the plants grown by farmers. Passes into the Grand Theater and other smaller theaters also help circulate their gold. It is a large mix of using gold to buy things and using what you have for trade, and (despite how chaotic that sounds) this has offered a very stable economy and helped ensure that people do not go into debt often.

Please expand, what is their tools, food? Do they trade only with each other? Do each city have their own focus on a food or tool? This all ties back into the entire planet having vague descriptions. Again expand and rewrite.

Affiliation: Darth Retrius

Please hyperlink the character

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Previously undiscovered and not settled by outsiders, the native humans have always (inexplicably) been there. Darth Retrius has been the only outside connection, and he has not allowed them to use his technology or travel with him. Any more outside connections from a third party would likely cause planet-wide chaos, especially if they oppose Darth Retrius.

Again, like in the culture there's nothing here that provides a history for the planet. Please expand, there's a whole lot of history that has happened around the galaxy and while they're on their own in the corner of the galaxy with your character being their own link to the outside world he has to have brought information with him to them.

Even then, has there been no advancement in their culture (which you will need to expand on to even fill this part out)? Have they not done anything impactful on the planet? You mention gladiators and an area - how did that come about? Remember things just don't "appear" there's always a start and process.

I will reiterate, the history of the planet cannot just be about YOUR character. These submissions should the full detail of a lot of the canon planets in the wookiepedia. Submissions are meant to provide people with history and an understanding of the planet you're submitting to the public domain.

Again if a planet/species/location cannot function/have value without it entirely being about YOUR character - then it shouldn't be submitted until the concept has been thought through that it can stand automatously without your character being the reason of its existence.

Because of how many issues this submission has I'm going to be returning it to the Pre-Codex where you can take the time to think through your concept and finalize it to completion. Darth Retrius