Jen'ari Marauders

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
* Intent: To add NPC Sith Marauders to the Order of the Jen'ari

* Image Credit: Header pic
* Armor Pic
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* Role: The Sith Marauders are considered the front line combat Sith warriors. Therefore they are the first in when in combat within the Order of the Jen'ari

* Links: N/A

GENERAL INFORMATION
* Unit Name: Jen'ari Marauders

* Affiliation: Order of the Jen'ari

* Classification: Sith Warrior Infantry division.

* Equipment:
* Standard Duraplast Armor with Sith Robes, and a Duraplast mask, pic below in spoiler simple red lightsaber.

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COMBAT INFORMATION
* Availability: Uncommon

* Deployment: Minor

* Strengths & Weaknesses: The Marauders were exceptionally skilled lightsaber combatants, but were poorly trained in the force using basic methods such as telekinesis and force repulse and as such only are considered dangerous in a duel of swordsmanship. Their armor was basic molded duraplast plates making them highly resistant to blaster fire and giving them a low resistance to lightsabers. Over their armor they wore a traditional hodded Sith robe woven with armorweave that had been altered to have short sleeves. Their mask was just a duraplast mask with enhanced vision modes such as thermal and night visions. Those could easily be taken out by an EMP blast or the mask easily cut off from a couple lightsaber swings.

* Description: The Marauders stood to display a terrifying presence when in combat with the Order of the Jen'ari. Highly trained in lightsaber combat but lacking great skill within the force itself. They are hand selected Sith warriors that showed great prowess in combat and fighting. The Marauders served as the first line of combat for the Order of the Jen'ari when engaging enemies or just needed an overwhelming force of lightsaber combatants.

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Darth Vyrassu"] Under review

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Darth Vyrassu"]

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* Equipment:
* Standard Duraplast Armor with Sith Robes, and a Duraplast mask,

* Strengths & Weaknesses: The Marauders were exceptionally skilled lightsaber combatants, but were poorly trained in the force using basic methods such as telekinesis and force repulse and as such only are considered dangerous in a duel of swordsmanship. Their armor was basic molded duraplast plates making them highly resistant to blaster fire and giving them a low resistance to lightsabers. Over their armor they wore a traditional hodded Sith robe woven with armorweave that had been altered to have short sleeves. Their mask was just a duraplast mask with enhanced vision modes such as thermal and night visions. Those could easily be taken out by an EMP blast or the mask easily cut off from a couple lightsaber swings.

Many of the strengths and weaknesses you've listed belong to the descriptions of the items used by the Maradaurs. Please take all the mentions about the strengths and weaknesses of the gear and move it to equipment list in the sub. Essentially, the only sentence here that fits the strengths and weaknesses is "The Marauders were exceptionally skilled lightsaber combatants, but were poorly trained in the force using basic methods such as telekinesis and force repulse and as such only are considered dangerous in a duel of swordsmanship." However, I would strongly recommend adding to this. You can add extra strengths and weaknesses alike, this is not a balance issue, but please keep them balanced.

Additionally, please list your strengths/weaknesses in bullet list format please.

* Description: The Marauders stood to display a terrifying presence when in combat with the Order of the Jen'ari. Highly trained in lightsaber combat but lacking great skill within the force itself. They are hand selected Sith warriors that showed great prowess in combat and fighting. The Marauders served as the first line of combat for the Order of the Jen'ari when engaging enemies or just needed an overwhelming force of lightsaber combatants.

This description is really just a stub, and needs to be expanded on.
Additionally, you've listed them as Minor Deployment, but your description states that they can be used when an overwhelming lightsaber combatants are needed. That is not something that can be done with a Minor Deployment. You need to either remove their intention of being used for overwhelming numbers, or change their deployment to major.

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Darth Vyrassu"] Hey hey, it's been four days since the requested edits What is the status of this submission?

 

[Darth Vyrassu]

Working on it[member="Scherezade deWinter"]

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

[member="Darth Vyrassu"] Would you like me to move this submission to pre-codex until you're done?

 

[Scherezade deWinter]

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