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Goshun

Tobasu

Nihilist
Writer
Name: Goshun.

Designation: Sentient.
Homeworld: Orion Setha (to be submitted). Imperium space.
Language: Sethian (common), Galactic Basic (only those of nobility).
Average height of adults: Varies although the past few generations have been roughly six feet, some shorter and of course some taller.
Skin color: Can range from pale to lightly tanned, however all are a light olive in complexion.
Hair color: Ranges onyx black mainly, there have been cases of 'oni' children possessing blonde and even brown hair; children with such tainted hair or anyone with what is considered abnormal hair color or even eye color are greatly frowned upon.
Breathes: Type II, I.

Strengths:
  • Poison / Disease Immunity: Inhabiting a planet filled of thick poisons that seemingly haze the planet's surface the, Goshun people have developed an almost complete affinity to poisons at the cost of having their life span severely shortened; although it is possible for one to create a disease to kill off the Goshun they would have to take into account their rapidly adaptable body. Think of the thoery reciving vaccines; they inject you with part of the virus to help the body adapt and grow to it, this is how the body of the Goshun work.

  • Adaptable Body: Again at the cost of their life span, the Goshun have a sentient body the seemingly can adapt to near any environment besides the extremes such as being able to be so heat resistant they could walk on magma. Orion Setha is a very fickle planet having sudden, almost instant weather changes, it would only make sense they would be able to adapt to the harsh environments.

  • Force Sensitive: All though this proud warrior race is all naturally gifted and attuned to the force (meaning they seemingly are prodigies and are exceptionally skilled in manipulation of it), the Goshun have never in their existence had any sort of force training from outsiders and thus don't know of the force, people who can utilize it fully call it aether which consists of the light side abilities and neutral side abilities the force can militarize and the nether which of course are the dark side abilities.

  • Proud and Loyal: Their loyalty could be compared to their barbaric counter-parts, the mandolorions who were known to follow a single leader who united the various clan; well the Goshun use to do that but a civil war upon Orion Setha and the race has been divided into four main clans since, although the Goshun have had a single leader who was a figure face since the beginning of their existence simply known as, Shogun, the Goshun will fight to protect their lordships until the day they die.

  • Fierce Combatants, Unmatched Strength and Agility: The original Goshun being of mandalorion descent kept their thrive and love for battle, it is not about winning or losing but the way in watch the battle was fought. Hailing themselves as the best melee and hand hand-to-hand fighters in the galaxy, they believe their only true worthy opponent is themselves and thus the, Goshun rarely leave Orion Setha.

  • Godsend Weapon Smiths: The very first, Goshun being made up of five (four known to the majority of the Goshun race) were all different specialists in various areas. The third lord, Dexal was one of the Neo-mandalorians greatest weapon smiths of his generation. The house of Dexal now consists of the Galaxy's finest blacksmiths unknowingly to the rest of the galaxy.
Weaknesses:
  • Secretive: A race that has naturally developed upon the outter planets of the Outer Rim regions, the Goshun are very select in sharing their knowledge with outsiders and to date there has only been two others who weren't of Goshun, to have even step foot upon the holy surface of Orion Setha. In order to deal with 'explores' and 'traders' the Goshun travel into space to the nearby desolate space satellite in which has become the trading hub known simply as, 'The Final Ark'.

  • Shortened Life Span: The average Goshun, lives until he is 30 (human years), although some have lived longer and indeed much shorter. It is because of their natural development that has occurred throughout their evolution the bodies of the Goshun are in a somewhat fragile state, although they will never directly tell you this. The Goshun are born with a deadly disease inside of them in which they call 'Oni', although Oni has no direct symptoms, most users who suffer an extreme case have discoloured hair and a cold almost blank set of eyes. This disease if not accelerated eats away at the Goshun's body and eventually cripples them causing limbs to seize up and eventually fall off. This disease is but one of the most brutal and tragic things a Goshun can suffer and often many life's are ended years before they were ready to die simply because they don't fully understand.

  • Thrive For Combat: No matter how many peaceful Goshun are born there will be five blood driven barbaric children conceived. Battle to them is the way to pray to the four founding lords of the Goshun, as they consider them gods thus being unlike Mandolorions, the Goshun is not just a belief anymore but a race of sentient humanoid beings because of their physical changes. Although anyone can technically be Goshun, there have been no recorded non-native Goshun being inducted into what people would call a cult.

  • Cult-like: The Goshun are very religious, believing in the ways and teachings of the second founding lord, Lady Myriad, founder of house Myriad, who taught that the four founding lords are but gods in their own right and the fifth founding lord, the unspoken one although the original 'Shogun', the unspoken lord has been scratched from the history books and the religion that is what the Goshun call Shinto which is actually named after the unspoken one, how ironic. The Shinto belief is mainly about believing in the flow (also known to as the force in other parts of the galaxy) that runs through all organic and non-organic beings like an energy in which the Goshun can call upon their ancestors to help use in combat.

  • Cryptic Yet Spiteful: The teachings of Lady Myriad has taught the Goshun to talk in cryptic tones, answering questions with questions a form of battle to them is debating making them great diplomats in theory however it is untrue because of the sheer fact if the Goshun are denied what they want they will just take it for you, this is one of the sole reasons the civil war started causing the great divides between the four major clans. They are stubborn and driven to get their own way and because of their rather 'bloody' past of being from mandolorion descent, the, Goshun will take their hatred to those who say not to them with a blade.
Distinctions: Although one cannot see the insides of the Goshun, their main distinctive physical aspect that defines them from any other species is the natural evolution of a second pair of lungs developing, although much smaller than the main set of lungs these lungs are used to filter any substance that travels through the Goshun's body that could be harmful to them, while very deadly poisons can still live through them those who have suffered from great plagues and diseases can still kill them although if a Goshun were to live, they would be given full immunity from said disease making them perfect test subjects for those looking to cure various illnesses and plagues. Yet everything comes at a cost, and because of this new set of lungs that has developed, the, Goshun heart has been severely reduced in size, shortening their life span greatly, at first Goshun's could live roughly up to sixty, now that has been halved.
Average Lifespan: Thirty human years.
Races: None.
Diet: The Goshun live off the land, hunting and growing their food although they did use to trade with the unique few explorers to have stumbled upon this intriguing race and planet, would get the chance to trade for food, although once someone traded nerf meat into the planet and seemingly the newer born Goshun couldn't process it properly, it won't kill them but they suffer stomach cramps and constipation if eaten.
Communication: Verbal and written. The Sethian writing is compared to Japanese writing, using various strokes and symbols it is quite beautiful yet unreadable to behold. The Sethian writing was developed by the first lord and founding lord of Omega Setha, Markseth. Galactic Basic is only taught to the lords and ladies of the four main houses although there are a small group of non-noble Goshun who teach Galactic Basic to others.

Culture:
Gods
God of the Planet and all that resides on it: Markseth
Goddess of the Afterlife and the Flow of eternity: Myriad
God of Weapons and War, the second shogun: Dexal
God of the twilight, Balance and Technology: Baltore
The unnamed God, First Shogun, God of the Hunt and Darkness: Oni.
The Goshun was first made up of four lords and a single lady who were drafted into the Neo-mandolorion cause by Mandalore the Ultimate; however these five held different views to their current leader believing they had no use to conquer other planets simply due to the fact they were already the strongest thus they were sentenced to death however upon earning their freedom through battle the original five set off into the Outer Rim region of space.

This can specifically explain why they are so arrogant and proud, believing they were already the strongest and the only true enemy they had to face was themselves. That is why these proud warriors are now considered more sophisticated and 'noble' than their barbaric counter parts, it also explains why the five were so secretive, even in the Outer Rim regions the five heard about the Mandolorion War and how Revan pretty much single handily destroyed them.

They live off the land and pray to their 'gods' through battle bloodshed is but a daily and trivial thing in the land of Goshun. The four gods consisting of the four founding clan heads; Lord of the Planet, Markseth, Lady of the Afterlife and Flow Myriad, Lord of Weapons and War, Dexal, and Lord of the Twilight and Technology, Baltore. These four were once well respected mandolorions who had travelled because of their exile, their nomad existence finally ending upon finding a baron planet which had no human-like life aboard it. They called it home along with a fifth member, the unspoken one, Lord of the Hunt and Shadows, Oni; who would become the first official 'Shogun', leader of the Goshun people as he was the most fierce warrior of all. His household would be held to shame upon the other four households feeling anxious and terrified how power it was. It is believed that all Goshun come from Myraid who is the teacher and fathered by the second Shogun, Dexal, although there is a select family line who has decedents that were directly related to Oni. These people are called monsters due to their unnatural hair and eye color, simply speaking they are outcasts and live miles away from any of the other clans.

The current standing on the culture believes the flow (the force) is an energy or aura that can be utilized into two different categories, the Aether and Nether, although neither side is frowned upon one must take precautions if using the Nether as it can taint the soul and stop it from rising to Myriad's plane where the mother will be with her children again.

The political structure currently is a tricky one, the religious like outlook of the Goshun people has fallen and the four households of Markseth, Myriad, Dexal, and Baltore are now at civil war. Although there are but a few minor clans (most unbootable in name and are only deflects of the bigger households) none of them hold superior military strength or numbers, beside one that is...The household of Oni is still alive and kicking, within the mountain regions of Omega Setha, the clan Oni is currently reconstructing and electing a leader themselves before making an impact on this war.

Technology level: They are quite advanced for their place in the Galaxy, taking the remnants of destroyed Basilisk War Droids with them during their exile the original five has developed all technological advances based off the Basilisk design. Although they are running low on natural resources and thus technological development has started to slow down.

General behavior: The Goshun are a noble and valiant warrior race, that holds battle as the most sacred and holy thing. That is any type of battle and it is known that some of the Goshun aren't as blood thirsty as others since making an argument or debating is a form of combat to them. They could be compared to the Japanese ronin (samurai) due to their loyalty to a single lord and humble personality for the most part anyway, maybe a more fitting example would be the Han Dynasty conquerors. There is clearly a rift between people who are visibly, Oni and who are not as there is the rift already from the civil war meaning most Goshun don't trust others currently.

History: The first lords were once Neo-Mandolorions (humans drafted to the cause) that were exiled before the start of the Mandolorion wars due to the fact they had different views from Mandlore the Ultimate although they were amazing fighters and combatants in their own right. They would eventually find a baron planet, in the Outer Rim regions of space during their nomad travels of exile. They would eventually call this planet home and claim they were gods of a new species of people; each would become a god of their own respective fields and together the five would naturally evolve due to evolution. Due to the fact that their body would cause a chemical reaction which over the years of inhaling the deadly gasses that create a thick purple haze on the planet would cause the children of the five gods to be genetically abnormal creating a new species which would be unknown to the rest of the galaxy as Goshun.

It was during the times of the first children being born from Oni that the five decided they would create a cause that would rival the mandolorions, thus Oni would become the first Shogun because he was the strongest out of the five. Yet as time passed the first and third lords, Markseth and Dexal would become jealous and a twenty-five year war would be the death of Oni and the rise of the second Shogun Dexal who would betray his partner in crime Markseth, killing him.

Breading and years passed, the last Shogun from household, Myriad was Lady of the household, Armada; upon her death due to the illness that all Goshun suffer which was now more evident and aware of, it was dubbed Oni by the clans elders because they said it was the revenge of the unnamed god of the hunt and shadows for the betrayal that he had suffered. The Death of the last Shogun split the clans and a new war has been waged simply due to the fact no one would sit down and talk about it instead it would seem blood would be needed to be spilt before anyone could claim the title once more and unite the clans.


Notable Player-Characters: None currently.
Intent: To create a race that follows the rulings of feudal Japanese samurai however on a more 'barbaric level' in terms of combat for a character, I'm working on. It will also give the people of Chaos to write as a unique race that follows the ideals of religion through war.
 
The Admiralty
Writer
Going through your submission I must say you have put a lot of effort in it, loving it. That said there are still a couple of things that have to be fixed before I can approve it on my end.

Most notably is the Strength section, you will have to modify it a bit to make it acceptable. For one the Force Sensitive part, we do not allow species to start out with a natural trait that gives them a big edge against other species in terms of Force Power. As a rule generally all characters/species have to start at the same level.

Besides that, there is the Fierce Combatants and the Godsend Weapon Smiths traits that have some problems. Relativity is the key here, try to stay clear from absolutes as: "Unmatched Strength and Agility or The Galaxy's finest blacksmiths."

Tag me when you have changed those parts, I will then add some more improvement points.

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