Frost Redoubt - Critique

[Aran Finn]

http://starwarsrp.net/topic/52477-frost-redoubt/

This is my first go at writing something "literary" in quite some time. Have at me, Chaos. Don't pull your punches. Show me the love. Make me beg for mercy.

 

[Arla Ordo]

I've been waiting for you to post another so I can see what happens when he wakes up. The journey of someone feeling their age, and finding their regrets I find interesting to hear the thoughts as he goes through the memories.

I am enjoying this journey.

 

[Arla Ordo]

[member="Alen Na'Varro"] very nice. I'm enjoying your story.

 

[Aran Finn]

[member="Arla Balor"] Thank you! Glad to hear it's turning out okay