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Species Review Drakemillon

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
• Intent: [ to make a cool character for the purpose of equalizing the universe force balance]
GENERAL INFORMATION
• Name: [ drakmeilleon ]
• Designation: [ Sentient, but if they fall to the darkside will becime semi Sentient]
• Origins: [ they were born when the force itself need to rebalnce on the planet zero azar it has chromatic flora such as crimson sand beaches with blue waters, forests with onyx barked trees and silver leaves, and its surface is mostly golden other metals walkable land ]
• Average Lifespan: [ as they age normaly to at most 90 they cant die of age but can be killed in conventional ways ]
• Estimated Population: [ , Planetary mainly but are Scattered depending in the will of the force]
• Description: [• Drakmeilleon
Species of humanoid with reptilen features such as
(Hydra hair,tails, scails on a random% of body, and if strong in the force can grow wings and the ability to breath and shoot fire or lightning) though attributes can appear later as the person becomes stronger in the force the first combination is different for each individual(they will gain these new features through a metamorphosis meditation)

This species is incredibly force sensitive and clanlike religious. The most powerful and skilled will be hailed as king and leader of species. They rarely talk to outsiders but can easily sense intention
So would be will to negotiations with jedi.
They have a strong resistance to the corruption of the darkside but if they are corrupted they lose sense and become as intelligent as a beast and it is impossible to be restored


• Diet: [ omnivoreis]
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TITLE/CHARACTER NAME GOES HERE



Character images go here.


NAME: Give your character a name, even if it might not be their real one. Remember, be original and don't use canon names unless they are Mandalorian names such as Ordo, etc.

FACTION: A faction helps a character get into the galactic scene and grow in strength. Feel free to join any that suit the character.

RANK: As a member of society, your character might have a rank that exemplifies his or her importance.

SPECIES: Star Wars is filled with many different species, so choose wisely.

AGE: This helps as a quick gauge for other writers to guess how old your character would look.

SEX: Note whether your character ismale, female, trans-gendered, etc..

HEIGHT: This will help writers know the size of your character.

WEIGHT: This will help writers know the size of your character.

EYES: Sometimes eye color might not be apparent in an avatar - especially if the avatar dons a mask.

HAIR: Just as eye color, if the avatar of the character has a hat or helmet, it is hard to tell what his or her hair color is.

SKIN: And just as the other two categories, the skin color might not be apparent depending on attire.

FORCE SENSITIVE: Whether or not your character is sensitive to the Force is important.



STRENGTHS AND WEAKNESSES (Required: 2 Weaknesses Minimum) :
Describe in moderate detail the strengths and weaknesses of your character.

APPEARANCE:
Describe your character's physical appearance. While your avatar should represent your character's appearance, there might be some things not apparent in it for use in role-playing. Height, weight, eye color, hair color, and skin color may also be listed here.

BIOGRAPHY:
Describe your character's backstory up to the point you started RPing him/her. Be sure to update this section as the role-play continues.

SHIP:
Does your character have a personal ship? If so, describe it in moderate detail (what does it look like, what can it do, what types of weapons and engines does it have, etc.).

KILLS:
Post the names of the PC characters (characters role-played by real people) that your character has killed. If possible, include a link to the thread in which your character killed him/her.

BOUNTIES COLLECTED:
Post the names of any bounties you have delivered and the amount of money you gained for it. If possible, include a link to the thread in which it happened.



ROLE-PLAYS:
Post the links and the titles to all of your characters Role-Plays. To make things easier, post the link and name here as soon as you enter the Role-Play thread.
• Communication: [ some like orion have appendiges that are snake/hydras as part of their body usually on head and they communicate with the connect individual but the actual person is as capable of learning any languge as a normal human ]
• Technology level: [ their technology is more like force imbued stones and metals on their homeworld]
• Religion/Beliefs: [ they listen to the leader of the planet who inturn listens to the force to aid in destiny]
• General behavior: [ leader is constantly listening to the force but others normaly similar to early civilization type of living (go do what u have to do and go back to whatever place you picked to sleep)
 
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Delila Castillon

#GhostlyRedheadsReign
Alright, a lot to work on with this....

• Designation: [ Sentient and in certain occasions semi, ]

So some are not of standard intelligence? What and why? Is it a mutation? The Force?

• Origins: [ they were born when the force itself need to rebalnce ]

Where were they born?

Description: [

There is no description

if strong in the force can grow wings and the ability to breath and shoot fire or lightning) though attributes can appear later as the person becomes stronger in the force the first combination is different for each individual

So if their midicholorians are high they just randomly sprout wings? What do these wings look like? Feathery? Leathery?

So would be will to negotiations with jedi.
They have a strong resistance to the corruption of the darkside but if they are corrupted they lose sense and become as intelligent as a beast and it is impossible to be restored

This doesn't make sense. Also expand further on how Darkside turns them into a semi-sentient beast

• Diet: [ varys by individual]

Carnivore? Omnivore? Herbivore?

• Communication: [ some like orion have appendiges that are snake/hydras as part of their body usually on head and they communicate with the connect individual but the actual person is as capable of learning any languge as a normal human ]
• Technology level: [ their technology is more like force imbued stones and metals on their homeworld]
• Religion/Beliefs: [ they listen to the leader of the planet who inturn listens to the force to aid in destiny]
• General behavior: [ leader is constantly listening to the force but others normaly similar to early civilization type of living (go do what u have to do and go back to whatever place you picked to sleep)

All this needs expansion.


In short your submission needs a lot of work. Remember writers will either be potentially playing these characters or reading about them when writing with you (even if not made into a PC). I highly suggest you look at recent species subs to get a general idea of what the judges are looking for when it comes to a sentient species.

Tag me when your edits are complete.

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