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Name: Dharma
Loyalties: Dharma is loyal to his people, the Bendu
Role: NPC Head of State of Orax

Development Threads: N/A

Age: 2100 Years Old; 400 Outside of his Colony
Species: Shard; Slightly Modified BT-Series 3 Droid Body

Appearance: Dharma utilizes a tall droid body manufactured by Bankei Industries. It was one of the first models made by Bankei industries and thus many of his servos and circuits are visible, especially around his neck. A cluster of sensors are located on his forehead. When he is active they illuminate blue and when he is in danger and his droid's self defense systems activate they, along with the slits where his photoreceptors are, turn red. He wears a simple cloth robe over his mostly cream and gold colored plastoid body.

Personality: Dharma is a witty and wise Shard with a strong sense of duty and determination. Compassionate and lighthearted, Dharma leads his people with confidence and love with the hope that he and his followers can bring peace and balance back to their world. He isn't afraid to be a goofball sometimes either. Some have called him too earnest and trusting of others.

Force Sensitivity: As a Shard, his Force Sensitivity is dampened by the fact that he is mostly inorganic. Despite saying that, his grasp on the core Force Powers (push/pull jump speed etc.) are about what you would expect from a Knight. Where he really focuses on though is Control of himself. Meditation, foresight and the like. This comes from a millennia of inner focus and meditation as well as practice during and after Omni's occupation.

Weapon of Choice: Wits, His droid body (BT-Series Hand to Hand Combat Module)

Skills: Dharma is a skilled Force healer and meditation guide. His skills do not lie in combat and in fact lie instead in calm deliberation and conversation. Despite being such a spiritual man, Dharma is still a politician and can talk for days on topics he is passionate about.
  • Force Heailing {Master}
    Force Assist
  • Force Purification

[*]Core Force Powers {Padawan-Early Knight}
  • Push
  • Pull
  • Jump

[*]Meditation/Guiding Others in Meditation
[*]Diplomacy/Negotiation


Wealth: Dharma himself is not a wealthy man. Most of the money he makes goes into poverty initiatives, grass roots organizations, the Church of the Force, the Bendu Monks and Bankei Technologies. The little he does keep for himself goes towards keeping his family.

Combat Function: None

Notable Possessions:
  • Doctorate Degree in Droid Law from Coruscant University
  • The Bendu Symbol above his bed
  • His wedding band

History: Dharma was "born" several thousand years ago. A part of one of the largest Force Sensitive colonies on Orax much of his time was spent debating the semantics of different philosophical ideas. What was the Force, how did it work? Where were the others like them that could feel this great Force at work? He was one of the colonies that first made contact with humans. At first things were fine. And then humans began removing Shards and helping them achieve autonomy. At the time Dharma was vehemently against such a thing and was the final vote in denouncing and excommunicating individual Shards in the consensus.

However as the centuries past and he began to see more and more how destructive the humans could be his thoughts changed. They needed bodies to protect themselves. Even a colony as large has his could only do so much with the Force and even then, most of his colony was non-violent. These feelings set in and simmered for decades before he would finally take action. Using the Force he and several others split from their colony and formed a different colony, closer to the shore of their boiling sea. It was around this time that the Omni factories that had been relocated to Orax to aid in nearby terraforming went rogue and the Gulage Plague began to ravage the humans. Many in his colony were twisted with rage and fell to the darkside, corrupting Dharma himself. However as he saw how Omni was harvesting indiscriminately, often killing Shards in the process, he re-centered himself and with the help of another Force Sensitive human, peacefully separated himself with Shatterpoint and was smuggled away from Omni's factory in the night.

It was after this that the Shard took on the name Dharma and helped lead the rebellion until suddenly the Omni factories stopped producing droids. Faced with a war torn landscape Dharma spent almost a decade in the mountains with a handful of Shard and Human followers looking in on themselves. Finding the Bendu in their meditations they returned to the war torn people of Orax and began slowly rebuilding with love, patience and understanding. The humans were still being devastated by the Gulag plague and would be for centuries still, however Dharma would not give in to despair.

He convinced one of his Followers, Bankei to help with his knowledge of droids and robotics and engineering. This would eventually lead to Bankei Technologies. Beloved by the people, both Shard and Human alike, they made him their first unified leader. After that he served on and off as their Head of State, trading seats with the human representatives over the centuries. However, since the return of the Sith Empire to prominence in order to maintain stability a provision was put into place that essentially has kept Dharma in power for over forty-five years. At some point he married to a human woman named Julia Mercy and adopted a pair of Force Sensitive Zabrak twins, Jax and Piper.


Intent: To create and keep with the GA's theme of using NPC leaders.
 
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Please change the Development Thread section to N/A for now.

Is the Droid body the shard is living in canon or factory approved? If so, please provide a link. If not, you will need to get it approved in the factory first.

Let's start there.
 
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Bankei said:
Species: Shard; Slightly Modified BT-Series 3 Droid Body
Ok, so let's get started here. Modifications to droids have to be approved by the factory unless it's a modularity that's listed in the droids Wookie page or the submission. I do see that this droid does have some modularity. Is your intent with saying "slightly modified" really just covering the use of some of the different modules in the sub? If so, I'd like you to list which are being used for this submission. If the modification is not something listed in the modularity line of the droid submission, I'll have to ask that you submit the modified sub to the factory.


Bankei said:
Force Sensitivity: As a Shard, his Force Sensitivity is dampened by the fact that he is mostly inorganic. Despite saying that his grasp on the core Force Powers (push/pull jump speed etc.) are about what you would expect from a Knight. Where he really focuses on though is Control of himself. Meditation, foresight and the like. This comes from a millennia of inner focus and meditation.

Skills: Dharma is a skilled Force healer and meditation guide. His skills do not lie in combat and in fact lie instead in calm deliberation and conversation. Despite being such a spiritual man, Dharma is still a politician and can talk for days on topics he is passionate about.
I need some expansion between the two of these. What skill level is Dharma in the listed skills? This is very important to the submission that you be specific in this. Additionally, his history needs to reflect the acquisition of these skills in some fashion. How and when did he learn them? Typically people will list his skills and apply a rank to it such as: apprentice, knight, master. Doing so helps us, and others, to know the NPC's capability level.


Bankei said:
Weapon of Choice: Wits, His droid body (BT-Series Hand to Hand Combat Module)

Combat Function: None
Your combat function is contradicted by your weapon of choice section. Realistically, though, everyone has a combat function, and it could be as simple as running away. The droid body has a hand to hand combat module, so I would assume his combat function would be something like "running away if possible, but if engaged in close quarters, fighting off his attacker with the Force and his hand to hand combat skills." Just an example.

For your history the only thing I see is what I mentioned in my review of the Force sensitivty and skills section.

Let me know your thoughts on these and if/when you make the changes.
 

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Darth Ignus said:
Your combat function is contradicted by your weapon of choice section. Realistically, though, everyone has a combat function, and it could be as simple as running away. The droid body has a hand to hand combat module, so I would assume his combat function would be something like "running away if possible, but if engaged in close quarters, fighting off his attacker with the Force and his hand to hand combat skills." Just an example.
Usually in these the Combat Function is used to dictate whether or not said NPC is being made to perform combat functions and if they were what they were. Dharma has no combat function, but like you said, IF he were you were correct in assuming that his weapon of choice would be himself and his wits. Inserting a combat function wrongly gives the false impression that he will be used for combat, which he will not which is why I left it None. Will get on these other edits asap.
 
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Ok, so, on the combat function, it still does need to be filled in. Needs to simply say what happens if he's in a combat zone (if he runs away, put that, but also say if cornered he uses his hand to hand combat).

You need to knock the Force Healing down to Knight level, and when you do that, you need to flesh out his history in terms of his learning of the Force. I understand he knew a little bit and that was how he split colonies, but he still had to receive training at some point.

Also, you still need to remove the slightly modified part before the link to the droid body.
 
This is being moved to the Pre-Codex for edits and updates.

The Codex templates have changed since you were here last. You will need to update this submission with the new NPC Template.

When you are ready for the submission to recommence the judging process please PM me.
 
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