Approved Species Cryligor

[Hydra]

• Name: Cryligor

• Designation: Sentient
• Homeworld: Sycra Naliga http://starwarsrp.net/topic/33339-sycra-naliga/
• Language: Galactic Standard Basic
• Average height of adults: 1 meters - 1.5 meters
• Skin color: Pale Green, Tan, light blue, Dark Green, Dark Brown with light green lines
• Hair color: None
• Breathes: Type 1

• Strengths:
• Water Breathing - During their evolution line they lived underwater. But as they evolved they came to land and could still go underwater. The Cryligors can only spend a total of 5 hours underwater before dying.
• Natural camouflage - The camouflage only works in forested, plains, or jungle areas. Once in one of these areas their skin blends within the surroundings. This works extremely well in forested or jungle areas. This camouflage is mostly used for hunting large pack animals along with fighting in war on their planet against slave uprising and rebellions.
• Poison glands located in upper jaw - Once a Cryligor bites into your flesh, Nero toxins pulses through the sharp teeth into the victims blood stream. Their is paralyzes the muscles and starts causing excruciating pain ( Like Cobra venom but more dangerous ). Then a small separate part of the toxin works its way slowly to vital organs to shut them down. It takes a total of 12 hours for the victim to die.
• Strong Scales - These are mostly located on the back, head and upper arms and upper thighs, the scales can resist fire with a special type of mucus that can resist some of the heat of fire but it cannot fully resist fire
• Weaknesses: [2 minimum]
• Poor vision during day
• Most diseases can kill them - Theses creatures didn't need a good immune system to survive in their environment to survive. But eventually when mercenaries and slaves came to their planet their diseases began killing the Cryligors and a few other species on the planet. To stop this the Cryligors had the slaves quarantined and washed over to stop any diseases from coming. Another way they stopped this was to wear protective equipment. Although even with these precautions, some 1000 die every year on the planet.
• Skin - Their exposed skin on their stomach, lower arms, tail, and lower legs are very vulnerable to fire
• Fire - If Fire ever comes in contact with skin it will easily burn through their flesh ( it won't happen instantley

• Distinctions:
• Crocodile jaws
• Three Fins on back, two small located on the sides, One big located in the middle
• Gills located on sides of stomach
• four fingers on each hand with hooked claws
• Average Lifespan: 200 years
• Races: None
• Estimated Population: 3 million
• Diet: Meat
• Communication: Growls, Vocal, Crylionus ( Runes ) ( written form of speech )

• Culture: Their religion consists of worshiping one God, the God of war, Kaljuchas. Military might is a honorable action in the Cryligors Society. Government authority is a oligarchy consisting of only high ranking military officials or droid leaders. A Alliance lies between the Cryligors and Silicornas. The Cryligors tame rancors for war and outfit them with armor and weapons made specifically for the rancors. The few star ships that they have are venator class, assault class and cargo ships.
• Their religion order consists of, Priest Kings, Prophets, Bishops, Missionaries ( In that Order, the 1st beginning the highest class, and the last the lowest class ). Their God Kaljuchas comes in mortal form every 200 years to be the High King, the highest ranking official of the oligarchy ( King ). The Cryligors highly care about their religion so much that religion takes up 40% of the separate oligarchs ( a total of 5 oligarchs for each different sector).

• Technology level: Their technology level is fairly moderate. Their weapons consist of poisoned spears and galactic standard blasters.

• General behavior: Extremely hostile to any who appose them. Only friendly to those who agree with their mostly unreasonable agreements. Their religion order consists of, Priest Kings, Prophets, Bishops, Missionaries ( In that Order, the 1st beginning the highest class, and the last the lowest class ). Their God Kaljuchas comes in mortal form every 200 years to be the High King, the highest ranking official of the oligarchy ( King ). General behavior of the Cryligors is mostly hostile. They can be friendly at times in need. If their religion is thought to be wrong they will establish all out war upon the empire who insulted their religion. Their God appears through most of their history, most of it is unwritten though because the mercenaries burned and exploded most of their records.

• History:
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  .Year 350BBY
  The God, Kaljuchas orders that the Cryligor should tame rancors and prepare them for war because a invasion will happen
  
  .Year 300BBY
  Mercenaries come to the planet and start killing and slaying the inhabitants
  
  .Year 250BBY
  After half a century the Cryligors and Silicornas make a alliance and attack the Mercenaries
  
  .Year 200BBY
  The Mercenaries leave the lanet after their command ship is overtaken by rancors and Cryligors
  
  .Year 170BBY
  The Cryligors make the abandoned command ship into their capitol
  
  
  .Year 150BBBY
  A Wall has been made within 50 miles of the abandoned ship and villages are been built within the wall near the ship
  
  .Year 140BBY
  The Cryligors alchemists experiment with materials of the ship and make a weapon that shoots small lasers that do little damage
  
  .Year 120BBY
  The Cryligors begin building transports that carry rancors on them and that have mounted turrets
  
  .Year 80BBY
  The first five transports have been finished and the Cryligors have improved everything in their capitol city to galactic basic
  
  .Year 60BBY
  The First venator class of the Cryligors has been constructed and sent to explorre their system for more durasteel
  
  .Year 49BBY
  the Cryligors establish trade between them and the Republic
  
  .Year 22BBY
  The Cryligors join the clone wars and help with the attack on geonosis, after the battle they salvage any crashed or broken down transports and tanks to rebuild them for their personal use
  
  .Year 19BBY
  The Cryligors attack the clones who are following order 66 on their planet in hopes of defending the jedi on their planet
  
  .Year 3ABY
  The Command ship is finally repaired and renamed the Exter Vulture Executioner
  
  
  

• Notable Player-Characters: None
• Intent: Role play purposes. A species for my created planet

 

[Theophenes]

Hello, good to see you. We've got a bit of work to talk about so let's get to it.


First off, the weaknesses. "can be killed by diseases" isn't a unique weakness--just about anything that's not a robot can die from a sufficiently bad disease. We're gonna have to get a little more in-depth as to why that's so bad as to be considered a weakness.


Second, from a balancing perspective, these guys have a lot of powers. Amphibious respiration, active camouflage, they're nine feet tall, and they're poisonous. By the way, how is the poison delivered, and what kind of poison is it? Also, explain to me in detail how the camoflage works, and I need an upper limit on the scale durability. Are we saying he takes a punch better than a human? Blaster fire? Plasma to the head?


The Runes should actually be considered another language these folks speak. A written form of their own, probably named after their species or planet, but it could be named after something else.

You need to finish the behavior section. Flesh it out, talk about culture and and weightier matters. You mention a god that appears to them--are there prophets? Priest kings? Does this God appear throughout their history, and does he take on the form of his people?

 

[Hydra]

[member="Theophenes"]

Everything in red is either new or changed.

 

[Theophenes]

Could you please remove the line about how the poison can only be stopped via anti-venom? It can still be considered typically fatal, however. Otherwise, I am really liking this submission.

 

[Hydra]

[member="Theophenes"]
Ok I removed the line about Anti-Venom

 

[Theophenes]

I'm good with what's here. Approved by me, pending other folk's weigh-in now.

 

[Ashin Varanin]

[member="Hydran Galimin"] - Approved.