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Codex Denied Bryn'adûl | Distortors

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Bryn'adûl | Distortors
OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
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  • Intent: To create a species for the Distortor class NPC creature.
  • Image Credit: X
  • Canon: N/A
  • Permissions: N/A
  • Links: [Embedded]
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Name: Distortor
  • Designation: Semi-sentient
  • Origins: Bryn'adûl Laboratories
  • Average Lifespan: Thirteen Years
  • Estimated Population: Rare
  • Description: The creature known as a Distortor is a cross-breed between a Rhivak and a Debaucher, the Distortor is a slow moving creature that generates an incredible dense molecular shield around itself, charging an electromagnetic pulse to discharge upon the release of its shield.
PHYSICAL INFORMATION
  • Breathes: Type II
  • Average Height of Adults: 5m
  • Average Length of Adults: 10m
  • Skin colour: Red/pink
  • Hair colour: N/A
  • Distinctions: Four legged, carapaced creature. Slow moving living bunker, the creature generates an incredible dense shield that can also shield a total of twenty infantry. One ordered to do so, the creature's back plates will open up, bright energy releasing into an electromagnetic disruptive explosion, designed to disable shield generators.
  • Force Sensitivity: NFU
Strengths:
  • Tough as hell
  • Generates powerful electromagnetic pulse that will kill Shield Generators, other technology is only affected temporarily.
  • Generates shield capable of protecting from orbital bombardment.
  • The Shield generated is a one-way shield, those inside can't leave until the shield is disabled, but those that enter cannot leave.
Weaknesses:
  • The Shield generated is a one-way shield, those inside can't leave until the shield is disabled, but those that enter cannot leave.
  • Slow
  • Shield is eliminated when the electromagnetic waves are unleashed.
  • Must be stationary to deploy electromagnetic waves.
CULTURE
  • Diet: Other - Nitrogen/Gases/Metal Ores
  • Communication: N/A - Telepathically controlled typically
  • Technology level: N/A
  • Religion/Beliefs: N/A
  • General behaviour: Shy creatures that show no particularly great level of characteristics, they are more comparable to clam fish or sea dwelling animals than surface creatures, expression in non human-empathetical methods is most likely the cause of them seeing to lack emotion. However of course, when injured these creatures do express discomfort.
HISTORICAL INFORMATION
Designed after the battle of Kesh in response to the use of city-wide shields and planetary shields, Distortors were designed to be delivered to the battlefield and ferried within the Shield to eliminate electronic defences, allowing for proper combat to begin.
 
Tathra Khaeus Tathra Khaeus

Thank you for being patient. Looking through this submission I can see a few areas which need some clarification before we move on with the approval process.

Origins

Origins: Bryn'adûl Laboratories

Please provide a link to the Bryn'adul here.

Description

Description: The creature known as a Distortor is a cross-breed between a Rhivak and a Debaucher, the Distortor is a slow moving creature that generates an incredible dense molecular shield around itself, charging an electromagnetic pulse to discharge upon the release of its shield.

Can you please provide links to the Rhivak and the Debaucher here so that people don't need to go hunting around for those submissions.

You also mention that the Distortor is capable of producing a dense molecular shield, which needs to be linked, around itself. How? A molecular shield is an advanced deflector shield capable of absorbing energy and re-directing it. There is no example, that I'm aware of, of a living creature generating a deflector shield, let alone an advanced one. Even the Vong and Zonoma Sekot, the galaxy's major users of living technology, didn't use shields on their fighters but instead relied on Dovin Basal technology. Do you have a canon basis for a creature being able to generate a disruptor shield like this?


Strengths

Tough as hell

The Shield generated is a one-way shield, those inside can't leave until the shield is disabled, but those that enter cannot leave.

The molecular shield which you have stated that the creatures generate is an energy-only shield, it has no real effect on physical attacks or personnel. As such, the "tough as hell" strength is a little bit misleading. Could you please clarify that it is, according to the wookie, "invulnerable to all short-range energy weapons, including artillery-grade guns" but not protected against physical attacks, please also add this as a weakness. Also, the shield would have no effect on people, allowing them to traverse back and forth across the threshold at will.

"Generates shield capable of protecting from orbital bombardment."

As quoted above, the original molecular shield was "invulnerable to all short-range energy weapons, including artillery-grade guns". The original droid to use the molecular shielding are the X-1 Viper droids which are analogous in size to the distortors so can be taken as a good example of the shield's capability. If you note, they do not state that the molecular shield is capable of withstanding orbital bombardment since a turbolaser is on a completely different level of magnitude, the energy of which would burn out the droid, and would almost certainly kill the Distortor.

Generates powerful electromagnetic pulse that will kill Shield Generators, other technology is only affected temporarily.

How does an EMP differentiate between what is a shield generator and another form of technology? As an energy wave, the EMP would affect all technology equally, and that would, according to Wikipedia, be enough to kill any electronics it would interfere with.

Weaknesses

Shield is eliminated when the electromagnetic waves are unleashed.

For how long? Will the shield only drop at the moment the EMP is unleashed? Or will it be down for a significant amount of time?
 
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