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(Bio here, Thread tracker here) This is mostly for people that write with me, But feel free to answer either way!
TLDR; Does she give off those smooth gunslinger vibes? If not, Can I improve?
((Further feedback welcome, This is all about improving the roleplay of this character
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I made the decision to decision to play Aloy Vizsla more like an NPC, A catalyst for someone else's story, Than for myself. And I believe that I've grown rusty at writing the real Aloy, Who she was always meant to be or to become.
What I want to know is; When you read my posts as Aloy,
● Does she give the desired smooth gunslinger vibes? Does she seem like a femme fatale but for cowboys\cowgirls who like a fighting woman?
- (^Would updating her vocabulary improve the above?^
● Does she seem properly dedicated to her family and people?
● Does she come off as a professional assassin\spec-ops type or more like the easy going, Loose merc type?
● Am I writing her quirks properly? Am I on top of making her smoke when she's anxious, Or chew her cigarettes\matches? Does her Pyromania(Manifesting in the need to start or watch fire as a stress reliever) coming up often enough to justify being on her sheet?
● Is she talkative enough for someone described as "Talkative For a mando" ? (Is she maybe Too talkative or long winded even?)
● Do you think she kinda sucks for a mandalorian? (No formal melee training, Self taught, Better gunslinger in CQB than she is a marksman etc etc)
● Am I being good about calling her prosthetic leg to attention during posts? Could I be roleplaying her prosthesis better?
● What about emotion? Is she expressive enough despite wearing a helmet? Anything I can do to improve her?
● Combat? Anything I can do to make her fight scenes more interesting?
● Power; Do you think she's underpowered for a mandalorian, Having as few skills as she does outside pistol usage? Should I be making her more powerful or better now that she's had 2 coming on 3 years of character development now?
This is the list of questions that's been nagging at me for awhile now. I know something is missing from her as a character that makes her not as interesting as she used to be and something else missing that makes me feel like she's not the same character I wrote on her sheet or had in mind.
To clarify; This post is meant for people who have already written with this character before and have the experience. I'm not asking anyone to do research and tbh I think it's probably a waste of your time(Tefka please no hurt me), Unless you really do just want to browse my threads for reading's sake lol
In short; This is just so I can link friends and avoid explaining all this over and over <3
PS: Be honest with me, But be constructive. As long as it's not just blatant salt, I can handle it, And I want to know.
TLDR; Does she give off those smooth gunslinger vibes? If not, Can I improve?
((Further feedback welcome, This is all about improving the roleplay of this character
-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
I made the decision to decision to play Aloy Vizsla more like an NPC, A catalyst for someone else's story, Than for myself. And I believe that I've grown rusty at writing the real Aloy, Who she was always meant to be or to become.
What I want to know is; When you read my posts as Aloy,
● Does she give the desired smooth gunslinger vibes? Does she seem like a femme fatale but for cowboys\cowgirls who like a fighting woman?
- (^Would updating her vocabulary improve the above?^
● Does she seem properly dedicated to her family and people?
● Does she come off as a professional assassin\spec-ops type or more like the easy going, Loose merc type?
● Am I writing her quirks properly? Am I on top of making her smoke when she's anxious, Or chew her cigarettes\matches? Does her Pyromania(Manifesting in the need to start or watch fire as a stress reliever) coming up often enough to justify being on her sheet?
● Is she talkative enough for someone described as "Talkative For a mando" ? (Is she maybe Too talkative or long winded even?)
● Do you think she kinda sucks for a mandalorian? (No formal melee training, Self taught, Better gunslinger in CQB than she is a marksman etc etc)
● Am I being good about calling her prosthetic leg to attention during posts? Could I be roleplaying her prosthesis better?
● What about emotion? Is she expressive enough despite wearing a helmet? Anything I can do to improve her?
● Combat? Anything I can do to make her fight scenes more interesting?
● Power; Do you think she's underpowered for a mandalorian, Having as few skills as she does outside pistol usage? Should I be making her more powerful or better now that she's had 2 coming on 3 years of character development now?
This is the list of questions that's been nagging at me for awhile now. I know something is missing from her as a character that makes her not as interesting as she used to be and something else missing that makes me feel like she's not the same character I wrote on her sheet or had in mind.
To clarify; This post is meant for people who have already written with this character before and have the experience. I'm not asking anyone to do research and tbh I think it's probably a waste of your time(Tefka please no hurt me), Unless you really do just want to browse my threads for reading's sake lol
In short; This is just so I can link friends and avoid explaining all this over and over <3
PS: Be honest with me, But be constructive. As long as it's not just blatant salt, I can handle it, And I want to know.
