Theran Manufacturing

[Pax Theran]

OOC information:
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Developmental thread: N/A
Primary source: N/A
Workshop information:
Name: Theran Manufacturing
Headquarters: Krownest
Locations: N/A
Speciality: metalsmithing and armorsmithing
Tier: tier 2
Parent company: N/A
Description: Theran Manufacturing is a family owned metalsmithing and armorsmithing workshop based on our founder's, Luke Theran, homeworld Krownest. We are a smaller business but we feel that this make our products even higher quality. On top of this we make all our products by hand. This allows us too make very high quality metals and armor sets. We are the best manufacturer on Krownest (even though that is erelevent considering that the galaxy is thousands of planets but I'm still using it in advertising)! We promise that you will get the highest quality armor possible.
Rationale: Our founder, Luke Theran, was trained by mandalorian metalsmiths in the year 13 BBY. In the year 8 BBY he founded Theran manufacturing. According to legend, In 4 ABY Luke created Boba Fetts new armor after his original armor was rendered unusable after being trapped in the sarlac (this was never confirmed nor proven wrong). Unfortunately he passed away in 37 ABY. The Shop went inactive for 2 years until Luke's son, Curt Theran, took up the helm and Theran Manufacturing was up and running again. Unfortunately it had lost its luster in the past 2 years so only a handful of people even remembered it. Although after about 11 months it was on the radar again because of clever marketing. Business went on as usual for over 60 years, nothing really happened. 1 years later Curt passed away. But his son never took up the helm. The workshop went inactive for 789 years. Until Pax Theran, Luke's great great great great great great etc. grandson Took up the helm once more. At this point the shop was completely forgotten. Pax wants to bring it back to its former glory, but in a different way. Pax makes armors made of materials deemed illegal by the governing body and sells them to bounty hunters, mercs, and assassins. And anybody who has the credits. He is now running the shop below the scanner.

 

[Netherworld]

Hello, I'll be the factory judge reviewing your submission. If you have questions, please feel free to respond to this thread once we are underway.

 

[Netherworld]

[member="Pax Theran"]

On top of this we make all our products by hand.

If you only intend to manufacture Unique and Semi-unique products, perhaps a Workshop would be a better fit for Theran manufacturing?

Even if you're not using the OOC section, please readd it to your submission. All submissions must adhere to the template.
Your template is also missing the Locations field. Please add it and fill it out.

Regardless of which of the two you decide to use, you should still expand on the Rationale.

RATIONALE
(How did your character come to own and control the company? Did they make it? Hostile takeover? Clever political scheming? Please write at least five sentences in this field)

@mention me with edits or questions.

 

[Pax Theran]

Netherworld changes made

 

[Netherworld]

[member="Pax Theran"]

Company information:

• Since you seem to have switched to the Workshop template, please change this to Workshop information

Rationale: Our founder, Luke Theran, was trained by mandalorian metalsmiths in the year 13 BBY. In the year 8 BBY he founded Theran manufacturing. In 4 ABY Luke was credited for creating Boba Fetts new armor after his original armor was rendered unusable after being trapped in the sarlac Pitt. Unfortunately he passed away in 37 ABY. The Shop went inactive for 2 years until Luke's son took up the helm and Theran Manufacturing was up and running again. Unfortunately it had lost its luster in the past 2 years so only a handful of people even remembered it it. Pax now seeks to restore its former glory.

• Two problems here:
• Our timeline is from 835 ABY onwards, so your workshop would be over eight hundred years old at this point. While there's nothing wrong with that, I would ask for an expanded history then, how it fared throughout the Gulag plague, etc.
  It's probably easier if you just shift the founding of your workshop to our timeline and avoid the lengthy mess
• Secondly, remove the Boba Fett reference.
  Alternately, if you wish to keep it, explain in the description that it's just a legend surrounding the workshop – an advertising gimmick – and is not in fact true.

Finally, you're missing this from your template.

PARENT CORPORATION:

• In your case, just put it down as N/A.

 

[Pax Theran]

Netherworld changes made

 

[Netherworld]

[member="Pax Theran"]

Thank you. In the future, be sure to put the "@" symbol before the Judge's name, so they will know when you've made the changes.

Approved. Pending Secondary approval. [member="Cira"]

 

[Jamie Pyne]

Approved.