Approved Starship The Shadow Hawk

[Colton Renth]

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Affiliation: personal
Manufacturer: Originally Corellian Engineering Corporation, modifications made by captain Colton Renfroe, the Hutt cartel, and various independent parties.
Model: YT-1300 light freighter “The Shadow Hawk.”
Modularity: Additional cargo modules can be externally fitted. Additional modifications are likely.
Production: UNIQUE
Material: Duralloy (Hull); Alusteel (Frame); Glasteel (Viewports)
Classification: light freighter/ Smuggling ship
Length: 34.52[1]–34.75 meters
Height: 8.27 meters
Width: 25.61 meters
Minimum Crew: 1 pilot
Standard Crew: 1 pilot; 1 Co-pilot
Optimum Crew: 1 pilot; 1 Co-pilot; 2 Gunners; 1 Mechanic
Passenger Allowance: 4 on top of minimum Crew Numbers.

Armament: 2 x CEC AG-2G quad laser cannons
1X F[SIZE=11pt]lex Tube proton torpedo launcher[/SIZE]

Defenses: Torplex deflector shield projector
Nordoxicon deflector shield projector
Kuat Drive Yards deflector shield projector

Special Features: a VT-Particle Gatling under the cockpit, Siep-Irol passive sensor antenna, 4x-Phantom short-range sensor jammer

Maneuverability Rating: 4
Speed Rating: 3

Armament Rating: 10
Defensive Rating :14

Non-combat systems: Upgraded Sub-Space Radio Communicator
Advanced Deflector Shield Generator Systems
Standard Life Support Systems
Personalized Flight Controls

distress Beacon
IIF Transponder Falsifying System
Smuggling Compartments
3 system droid brains operating within system

Hyperdrive Class: 0.523
Strengths: fast and maneuverable with limit jamming, IFF falsification ability
Weaknesses: prone to systems overload, and other issues related to numerous modifications made to the ship as well as the age of the class of ship. As well as the ship being constantly pushed to the breaking by its pilot.

Description: a fast maneuverable modified light freighter, that serves as Booth Colton Renfroe’s smuggling and personal ship.
Intent: to create a Personal Smuggling ship for Captain Colton Renfroe, Reminesante of the Millennium Falcon
Who Can Use This: Colton Renfrew
Primary Source: http://starwarsrp.net/topic/76287-the-millennium-falcon/?hl=falcon
http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Millennium_Falcon



[SIZE=11pt]http://starwarsrp.net/topic/68543-vt-particle-gatling/?p=1019711[/SIZE]

 

[Cyrus Tregessar]

Hello, I'll be the factory judge reviewing your submission. If you have questions, please feel free to respond to this thread once we are underway.

 

[Cyrus Tregessar]

[member="Captain Colton Renfroe2"]

Please hyperlink the tech in the submission itself rather than placing all the links at the bottom, it makes it much easier to read.

Additionally, per this reference, Tractor Beams are Capital Ship-sized emplacements, requiring both a great deal of space and power to operate. If a modified YT-1300 was to have any, there would be one at most, and it would require substantial internal modifications.

Finally, please do a once over as far as grammar and spelling go. There's several sentences I cannot clearly understand what you're talking about, or you seem to have forgotten a word or two.

 

[Colton Renth]

k think I got it fixed now.

 

[Cyrus Tregessar]

[member="Captain Colton Renfroe2"]
About half your hyperlinks link back to this page, rather than the associated sub. YT-1300, Duralloy, VT Particle Gatling, and Sensor Jammer all need to be fixed.

You also need to provide an Armament and Defense Rating, in accordance with the template. As you have a rather standard armament but heavy defenses, something like a 10/14 would be appropriate.

Finally 1.2 speed and 3 maneuverability (with a .5 hyperdrive) is simply too much for a ship this size. Right now you're nearly outpacing an A-Wing but turning just as well as an X-Wing, on a ship three times the size. You have several options here.

1. Simply increase speed to 3 and maneuverability to 4. That's still very good for a freighter, and would require no other changes.
2. Increase speed to 2, increase maneuverability to 5 and reduce either Armament or Defense rating.
3. Increase speed to 2, maneuverability to 4, and complete a 10 post dev thread.

 

[Colton Renth]

updated.

 

[Cyrus Tregessar]

Awesome. Pending Admin Approval. Thanks! [member="Cira"]

 

[Raziel]

<p>Approved.</p>