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Approved Starship The Obsidian Fist

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Intent: For a flagship to WD-334’s part of the Metal Lord fleet
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Image Source:




[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Canon Link: [SIZE=10.5pt]http://starwars.wiki..._Star_Destroyer[/SIZE]
[SIZE=10.5pt]http://starwars.wiki...Heavy_Artillery[/SIZE]
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Restricted Missions: N/A
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Primary Source: [SIZE=10.5pt]http://starwars.wiki..._Star_Destroyer[/SIZE]
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Manufacturer:[SIZE=9pt] LOOM[/SIZE]
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Model: Victory II Class Star Destroyer
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Affiliation: WD-334, Metal Lords
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Production: Unique
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Material: Durasteel hull, Turbolaser components
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Classification: Heavy Cruiser
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Length: 900 metres
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Width: 578 metres
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Height: 248 metres
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Armament: Moderate
22 Turbolaser batteries
20 Double Turbolaser batteries
10 Heavy Ion cannons
1 SPHA Cannon
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Defenses: High
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Hangar: Average; 2.5 Squadrons
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Maneuverability Rating: Low
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Speed Rating: Average
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Hyperdrive Class: 1 (Backup 1.5)
SPECIAL FEATURES:
Hoersch-Kessel Drive Engine Unit
Tractor Beam projectors
Droid Repairing Station
3 x Power Cells




Strengths:
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Higher Defense: With an additional power cell, the systems control the flow of additional energy toward the shields. This gives a boost to the vessel's defense.
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Hangar Space: Without the need of organics, the ship’s hangars were expanded slightly in design, allowing for a couple of transports or half an additional squadron, giving two and a half squadrons overall, making up space for at least thirty fighters.
[SIZE=10pt]·[/SIZE]Broadside: Under closed hatches along the side of the cruiser there are hidden Turbolasers that can unleash a powerful broadside strike.
Weaknesses:
[SIZE=10pt]· [/SIZE]Armament:[SIZE=9pt] With the increase in armament, and an additional power cell which is only focused toward shielding extra power from the overall power of the ship drains rather quickly compared to the original design. With the quick drain, weapon recharge is slower.[/SIZE]
[SIZE=10pt]· [/SIZE][SIZE=10pt]Shield Opening: When firing the SPHA, the shield is partially opened around the cannon on the underside as to provide maximum firepower from the weapon, which can allow a strike against the cannon as it charges. This could cause a chain reaction, damaging the front half of the ship.[/SIZE]
[SIZE=10pt]· [/SIZE]Crew Size:[SIZE=10pt] Due to most of the inner hull being replaced by other things such as hangar space and additional storage space and the added power cell, there is less room to house crew. However, the entirety of the crew is made up of droids and other automated [/SIZE][SIZE=13.3333px]crew members[/SIZE][SIZE=10pt].[/SIZE]



Description: The Obsidian Fist is a salvaged Star Destroyer, something that took to WD-334's liking as the droid always favored Imperial make. Thanks to LOOM, owned by a fellow Metal Lord to WD, the ship was reconstructed with additional armament and another power cell. With the added weapons it could pack quite a punch, and with the SPHA, it could target unshielded targets and unleash a powerful blast which also leaves the ship vulnerable around the underbelly weapon.

The war droid went on to name this ship after it's first, the Tartan cruiser Obsidian which was to later become more of a front line ship.

The refitted Star Destroyer was designed to be WD's flagship amongst the fleets of the Metal Lords, however is only the second ship owned by the droid. It would be the beginning of it's own fleet's expansion. Despite having such a powerful armament, WD designed it to be more of a defensive ship.
 
WD-334 said:
§22 Turbolaser batteries §20 Double Turbolaser batteries §10 Heavy Ion cannons §1 SPHA Cannon
Please move this information to the Armaments section.



WD-334 said:
·Hangar: Very Low

WD-334 said:
·Hangar Space: Without the need of organics, the ship’s hangars were expanded slightly in design, allowing for a couple of transports or a few (at least four) additional fighters.
These two are contradictory. Very low is, aside from having no hangar space, the lowest rating you can get - and here you have your hangar space listed as a strength. Please clarify how many squadrons of fighters can fit into your hangar and correct this strength, either by removing it or by changing the hangar rating to more accurately fit this strength's description.



WD-334 said:
· Armament: With the increase in armament, and an additional power cell which is only focused toward shielding extra power from the original power cells must be shared more thinly. This means the energy overall within the ship would be drained more rapidly. This also means the ship is slightly slower when firing then it usually would. It's only armament is effective against large ships, but fighters prove effective at evading fire.
Simplify this to simply state that the weapons fire slower than the norm and place a heavier drain on the ship.



WD-334 said:
·Defenses: Moderate

WD-334 said:
·Heavy Defense: With an additional power cell, the systems control flows the additional energy of this extra cell to shielding, and shielding alone. The power cell was able to be added for the need of organics was not necessary, so less space within the hull was needed for movement throughout the ship. This model of ship also has a thick hull compared to some other ships.
Moderate is just slightly more than average, what you're describing would be a bit further above that - it reads, to me, as a high defensive rating. If you intend to have your defense rating at moderate, please reword your strength so it doesn't seem like it provides greater defenses than the rating you've placed there.
 
WD-334 said:
·Hangar: Average

WD-334 said:
Hangar Space: Without the need of organics, the ship’s hangars were expanded slightly in design, allowing for a couple of transports or a few (at least four) additional fighters.
You have still not addressed my request in my previous post.


Darth Ananta said:
These two are contradictory. Very low is, aside from having no hangar space, the lowest rating you can get - and here you have your hangar space listed as a strength. Please clarify how many squadrons of fighters can fit into your hangar and correct this strength, either by removing it or by changing the hangar rating to more accurately fit this strength's description.
 
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