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Approved Tech Sky'ito Yumi's Armored Suit

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Lyth Meran

Bullet with Butterfly wings.
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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

PRODUCTION INFORMATION
  • Manufacturer: Meran Mechanics
  • Model: NA
  • Affiliation: Sky'ito and Kami ( 4 made)
  • Modularity: no
  • Production: semiunique ( only 4 )
  • Material: Armorweve and Instant Adhesive
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification: multi purpose
  • Weight: 2kg
  • Quality: 4
SPECIAL FEATURES
is an armorweve suit intended to act as a semi combat armor

Strengths:
  • Dapper
  • the suit is fully blaster and semi saber resistant able to take glancing blows
Weaknesses:

  • Vulnerable to explosions
  • Vulnerable to temperature extremes
  • Vulnerable to melee weapons
  • Vulnrable to kinetic damage
  • Head is exposed
  • tie can act as a grip in combat allowing the opponent to grab hold during grapples.
DESCRIPTION
Created to be a bodyguard outfit the suits wound up becoming overly expensive to create and as such only 4 were made one suit was sold to a force user.
the suit was deemed too expensive to mass produce and there fore shelved and mothballed
the suit uses a few additional items like boots and gloves and under-suits to add to its protection the suit its self is intended to protect the wearer and look professional while acting as a non combat "combat" armor.
as Lyth is known to she went in to the creation of the suit without any real idea of what to do with it the intention was for a combat business attire.
as such it is more intended with form over function effectively acting as a security armor offering some protection while not being a full armor.
sadly the tie is not a clip on and is tied with a Coruscant knot and sadly can be grasped in a grapple and be used to grad hold of the wearer and be used to choke the wearer.
sadly the suit offers less protection and kibble as a Mando flight suit.
 

Netherworld

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Hello, I'll be the factory judge reviewing your submission. If you have questions, please feel free to respond to this thread once we are underway.
 

Netherworld

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Cool concept, but it needs some work.



Lyth Meran said:
Manufacturer: Meran Meckanics
  • Please link the manufacturing company.


Lyth Meran said:
Production: Unique ( only 4 )
  • Please change the Production to Semi-unique.


Lyth Meran said:
Material: Armorweve and Hjarna stone Kinetic Plates Instant Adhesive Thermal Gel and Kami's Boots & Gloves
  • Hijarna stone is... stone. It can't be used in the manufacture of clothing. Remove this.
  • Kinetic armor is an actual armor. It's made of metal plating, and therefore can't be used in a suit. Remove this.
  • The usage of thermal gel would 1) compromise the suit's mobility and 2) increase the weight, as it would require an underlay. If you wish to keep it, increase the weight of the suit, as well as add the lowered mobility under Weaknesses.
  • Kami's Boots weigh 3 kg each, and would thus increase the overall weight of the suit, if they are included.
    My personal recommendation is to remove the boots from the submission, and just use them alongside this suit as a standalone submission.
    If, however, you want to keep the boots, you'll have to copy their Strengths & Weaknesses into this submission as well.

[*]Kami's Crushgaunts are an Unique submission, and therefore cannot be used to craft four (4) suits. Remove this.


Lyth Meran said:
the suit is fairly expensive to create and can not be repaired only remade
the suits can not be cleaned conventionally and require specialist cleaners.
can wear at the seams
  • All of these weaknesses are irrelevant for balancing purposes. Please remove them.
  • Replace them with actual Weaknesses, like, for example:
    Vulnerable to kinetic damage
  • Vulnerable to explosions
  • Vulnerable to temperature extremes
  • Vulnerable to melee weapons

  1. Make the changes requested above and remove all the resistances associated with the materials / submissions you remove.
  2. Please expand on the barebones description:

    Raziel said:
    DESCRIPTION (Describe some of the histories behind the submission. Give us some idea of how it might perform its function, what it excels against and what some limitations of it are. This is where you talk about your idea, flesh it out over at least a good-sized paragraph, and address some of the ways it might be used or abused. For especially powerful or ambitious submissions, a very thorough description is recommended.)

@mention me with edits.
 

Netherworld

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Please split the Strengths from the Special features list in the formatting of your submission, as it makes it difficult to peruse.
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Lyth Meran said:
the suit is highly resistant to kinetic energy reducing impacts

Lyth Meran said:
Vulnerable to kinetic damage
  • The first is a strength, the other is a weakness, and they clearly contradict each other.
  • Since your suit contains no material that would provide kinetic resistance, please remove the first quoted line from the Srengths field.


Lyth Meran said:
saber resistant arm guards.
  • What makes the arm guards more resistant to lightsabers than the rest of the suit? Since the only relevant component is the armorweave, I see no clear cause for this.
  • Provide an explanation for this, or remove it.


Lyth Meran said:
Quality: 6
  • The suit is basically armorweave, which means it can take a couple of blaster shots, and one or two glancing lightsaber blows.
  • Coupled with its weaknesses, this doesn't warrant a quality of 6. Please bump this down to a quality of 4.
  • However, since it is just armorweave, you can also reduce the weight to 2 kg.

Lastly, please expand on the description meaningfully. You've added a single sentence. You can go into why Lyth has decided to fashion this suit, how she went about it, what it does, etc.
 

Netherworld

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Lyth Meran said:
Weight: 5kg
  • Please drop this to 2 kg.


Lyth Meran said:
the suit is highly resistant to kinetic energy reducing impacts
  • No material or system in this suit grants this resistance. Remove this.
  • Add a Weakness against kinetic energy under the Weaknesses section.
 
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