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Codex Denied Shylindrael Laes

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Shylindrael Laes
  • Demonym: Shylindraeli
  • Region: Outer Rim Territories
  • System Name: Eisalai
  • System Features: Two Moons -- Rukum & Eldos, 34 hr rotational period, 250 day orbital period
  • Location: Beside Ziuna -- 150 Light years away
  • Major Imports: Cortosis, Ammunition (Standard Slugs -- for Widowmakers and Slugthrowers)
  • Major Exports: Doonium, Durelium
  • Unexploited Resources: Elden Wood from forestry -- utilized in producing Widowmaker & Slughtrower pistols and rifles
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: Earth-Like
  • Climate: Arid, Hot Climate
  • Primary Terrain: Deserts, Mountains, Caves, Valleys
  • Atmosphere: Type I
LOCATION INFORMATION
  • Capital City: Eisalai
  • Planetary Features: Ruins, Wild
  • Major Locations:
    • Ancient Temple of Eisalai -- Situated near the north pole of the planet, adorned in fields of black roses leading up to it.
    • Ans'hou Library -- Situated near the Temple of Eisalai. Housing archives and holocrons.
    • Doonium & Durelium Mining Facility -- Manufactured solely out of cortosis. Large unmanned hydraulic jacks are scattered throughout the facility.
POPULATION
  • Native Species: Yashuvhi
  • Immigrated Species: Zabrak, Zeffo
  • Population: Sparse -- 5,000
  • Demographics: Primarily Yashuvhi, small percentage of Zabrak and Zeffo -- Living in harmony.
  • Primary Languages: Sithese, Galactic Basic, Yashuvhi, Zabraki, Dathomiri
  • Culture: Majority of inhabitants practice the religion of their choosing. Most beings have devoted their life to knowledge.
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: Oligarchic Dictatorship
  • Affiliation: Under the primary control of Lord Jiang and his bloodline.
  • Wealth: Low -- Primary production consists of arms including blasters, rifles, and some low tier extraction such as mining.
  • Stability: The current system is one of cohesive harmony within the different sentients on the planet.
  • Freedom & Oppression: Majority of the population is heavily opressed under dictatorial rule. Beings on the planet have grown accustomed to the current oligarchy and know no better.
MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY
  • Military: Due to the strategic location of the planet, the planet is currently demilitarized.
  • Technology: Galactic Standard
HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Over several millenia ago, a Yashuvhi elder that was sentenced to exile by the Jedi Order was aimlessly looking for a new planet to expand his knowledge in the force. He came across a planet that was isolated enough, and out of the reach of the old republic. This was on a whim, the elder was hyperspace skipping. The planet he had found was Shylindrael Laes. Located in the outer-rim territories, it was a barren, hot, humid planet. Without a force nexus on the surface the elder had the freedom to channel the force to reach out to other Yashuvhis. Significant amount of Yashuvhis would eventually immigrate to the planet, and ultimately start the construction of the Temple of Eisalai which would be a monument to the elder for saving the species from extinction. How beautiful it was, with its valley adorned in statues and innumerable fields of roses leading up to its entrance. But these days of grace, humility and honor would be short lived. As the Sith Empire grew in power so did the aura around the planet. As more and more planets fell to the empire, it attracted species that were fundamentally twisted and dark in spirit -- the Zabrak and the Zeffo.

As the population on the planet grew, so did the thirst for knowledge from the influx of immigration. Collectively, the inhabitants decided to build a library on the planet to house all this information. Over the next millenia, the beings would solely fixate upon gathering as much knowledge as possible. The archives grew exponentially with numerous holocrons also being instituted into its hallways.

This would be like a homing beacon for Lord Jiang who has dedicated the significant part of his life to gathering knowledge. Hearing only rumours of the desolate planet, had been trying to locate the planet through the force. Tirelessly, scowering the outer-rim territories. Until, a tremor in the force ocurred to him during battle meditation. It was the Zeffo reaching out to him. This would lead him to the exact coordinates of the Eisalai system. After hearing the inhabitants tales and them witnessing the unusual traits Jiang had in the force, they would willingly subjugate themselves to their new lord.

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Alrighty! Apologies for the long wait, been a busy few weeks, so overall this is a fairly solid submission! There are a few issues but they're quick fixes for the most part so no worries!

First of all you'll need links for the Yashuvhi, the Zeffonians, Doonium, and Durelium in Species and Major Exports respectively. Also Yashuvhi will have to be moved to Immigrated Species rather than Native Species. Sithese, I'm assuming you mean the Sith Language, would be good to link as well. Stability will also need a rating and some further detail for it as well as Culture and Freedom & Oppression would be preferable. How exactly is the population oppressed and how does the system of oligarchy work? Is there some council representing the different species and religions?

The Historical Information section could use a bit of addition as well. It is pretty fleshed out overall but I'm very confused why and how the sudden shift from an otherwise scholarly society suddenly subjected themselves to a a random newcomer? What traits did Jiang have that made them submit to him so easily? Was there some prophecy involved perhaps? This could also be where you flesh out the government a bit more as well.
 
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