Darren Jarok
The Imp
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Qvar-Class Anti-Infantry Tripod
- Thread starter Darren Jarok
- Start date
Grand Admiral, First Order Central Command
Hello, I'll be the factory judge reviewing your submission. If you have questions, please feel free to respond to this thread once we are underway.
Grand Admiral, First Order Central Command
[member="Darren Jarok"]
Your description appears to be copied and pasted from some other source. A wiki, perhaps? Regardless.
Consider this a warning.
1. Your format needs to follow the new Vehicle template listed here.
2. 100m is huge, taller than the Geat Pyramid of Giza. An AT-AT is only 22m tall, so even 30m would be quite large.
3. Hyperlink the Approved Company page of Jarok Shipyards.
Your description appears to be copied and pasted from some other source. A wiki, perhaps? Regardless.
Consider this a warning.
Additionally a walker like this (i.e. a clear copy of a HG Wells Tripod) is also in violation of Rule #7.
My recommendation is to think about what you want to do with this walker and re-work the submission. At the very least you need a totally re-written description, preferably that doesn't mention Mars. If you intend to use a Heat Ray or similar weapon I would need to see in the description what that weapon is capable of and such. A few additional notes:
1. Your format needs to follow the new Vehicle template listed here.
2. 100m is huge, taller than the Geat Pyramid of Giza. An AT-AT is only 22m tall, so even 30m would be quite large.
3. Hyperlink the Approved Company page of Jarok Shipyards.
Darren Jarok
The Imp
I need this deleted.
Cira
Best Onion
Moved to Factory Archives - If you want to remove from the archives, please feel free to tag Raziel, Braith Achlys, or Cira.