Neuronic Whip

[Jarven Zexxel]

Image Source: Image found in Lord of Nal Hutta source book for Edge of the Empire and on this website: http://starwars.wikia.com/wiki/Neuronic_whip .

Intent: Tool/Weapon of Slavery that becomes a personal item for Jarven Zexxel (being the only weapon he currently has and representing a "trophy" of the one who dishonored him)
Development Thread: (Still not sure, even after reading Factory 101, how this works, but here goes) Readily available in the grittier parts of Star Wars.
Manufacturer: TholCorp.
Affiliation: Slavery
Modularity: You can do very little with this weapon to mod it. You might be able to sharpen the end of it, but that's about the scope of it's modularity.
Production: Minor.
Material: Durasteel handle and a long, heavy, flexible cable (The one in the Nal Hutta book looks much cooler)
Classification: Whip/Exotic Melee Weapon
Size: One handed
Length: 11/2 meter (I don't know exactly, but does that seem fair? I'm only supposed to have enough reach to be able to attack at a short range, instead of the usual melee engaged range, and it has to be able to wrap around people enough to be able to yank them.)
Weight: 1kg?
Special Features: Is connected to a battery, so it can deliver a powerful electrical shock.
Description: "Used by slavers across the galaxy to keep "merchandise" in line, the Neuronic Whip is a terrible weapon banned on many worlds. A powerful electrical charge runs the length of this cruel wire whip, discharging when it strikes its target and sending a painful impulses racing through its victim's nerve cells. The whip emits an ominous, low humming sound when charged, exploding like the crack of a gunshot when it comes into contact with its unfortunate target. Can be used at short range as well as engaged range." -Lords of Nal Hutta,Melee Weapons, page 104
"Unlike a typical leather whip, the heavy cable could crack bones and break flesh, although death was an extremely unlikely outcome. It was capable of causing a great deal of pain and trauma." -Wookiepedia, Neuronic Whip
Normal Cost: 750 credits.
Availability: Not restricted on unbanned worlds.

 

[Ellie Mors]

[member="Jarven Zexxel"]
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[Jarven Zexxel]

Is that good enough?

 

[Ellie Mors]

[member="Jarven Zexxel"]
As there is no change from the canon Neuronic whip to this one, this is marked as denied. You need not submit canon items to the factory for approval, as all canon items do not require submissions. If you believe this has been done in error or unfairly judged, you may submit a second chance in our second chance thread in the factory discussion.