Intent: Downsize an existing sub.
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You can put N/A here
Firewalls: Firewalls have been installed in this that will prevent most hackers from slicing into the device and controlling it.
In what ways could a hacker control this?
Anti Hacking Failsafe: Should a hacker breach the Firewalls, it will attempt to send a nasty computer virus that will flood their system with Memes, and the equivalent to the Narwhal Song.
Menes ad the narwhal song does not exist in star wars nor adhere to star wars.
Self Destruct Switch: A Self Destruct Switch.
What purpose does a self destruct serve on a furnace?
Size: Versions of this exist in various sizes. This includes the normal size, Droid Mounted, Microwave, Etc.
If it has variable sizes then that should be under modularity
- Material Synthesis: The Neo Forge can convert materials into new materials via breaking them down at a molecular level and reprogramming them.
- Versatility: It can produce a wide range of materials via breaking down others.
- Can under certain circumstances create custom materials. (Materials must be apped, and accepted beforehand.)
- Can also synthesize new items. (Must be apped, and accepted as well.)
Molecular furnaces broke down. Something like a duplicator made new things. Additionally these strengths are almost all literally the same thing.
- Overheating: Continual use of it to make rare materials (Any amount over Semi Unique) of Restricted Materials would cause the device to overheat, and explode.
- Fail-Safe: The Neo Forge has a fail-safe that will activate should someone try to use it to create poisons or toxic materials.
These are more a feature of a duplicator then a molecular furnace.
- Anti Tamper Fail-Safe: Attempts to dismantle or Reverse Engineer a Neo Forge would brick the device.
- Fail-Safe: The Neo Forge has a fail-safe that will activate should someone try to use it to create poisons or toxic materials.
- Should one of these be marked as stolen, it will self destruct with the force of a landmine.
- Voided Warranty: Attempts to hack into or bypass the failsafe against Poisons would void the warranty.
Generally something would only have one fail-safe, you have four all fairly powerful So is it creating poisons or blowing up or ceasing to function? If it ceases to function and is bricked how does it also create poisons and explode?
With the murder of the Mandalorians by The Sith Empire that was done recently, loads of Beskar was taken illegally. Between that, and the murder of the Mandalorians in order to get the materials by the Sith Empire, this inspired the realization that a new source of Beskar would be needed in the galaxy.
One this repeats almost Frank Miller style and two this is a furnace not a new form of beskar as far as I have been able to see. This might be better suited for your beskar B submission
From there, Taji looked into the existence of the Molecular Furnace. Studying the designs, he believed it to be oversized and needlessly bulky. He then improved upon the designs of the Molecular Furnace infinitely by downsizing it into a more compact version as opposed to the size of the original which was a huge monstrocity.
Eventually he completed the Neo Forge, and has prepared it to be sold across the galaxy.
Alright so scaling down a molecular furnace is not a problem it has been done to mining droids in legends canon.... but just havinga furnace means little the World devastators were almost purely furnaces but had machine and forges there to develop the armaments and materials.
Now with that out of the waymy opinion is this sub requires a lot of work.. you packed on weaknesses but they are either largely the same weakness but with a different effect and contradict each other or they have no real purpose as lightsabers aren't going to be used much. Magnetic fields exist on planets in general so this thing is damaged being on a planet?
So the path to approval is this. One address
ALL of the edits required, condense the weaknesses down to 4 substantial weaknesses as opposed to the 14 you gave it for fluff. Rework the description to address issues and be more clear.
Mention me when this is done.
