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Approved Tech Katbiyre's lightsaber

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Intent: To provide Katbiyre with a lightsaber
Development Thread: [x]
Manufacturer: Katbiyre Rekr
Model: Dual Phase
Affiliation: Katbiyre Rekr
Production: Unique
Material: Lightsaber Parts
Classification: Lightsaber
Size: One-handed/Two-handed,
Length: Blade(1 Meter, 1.5 Meters,) Hilt(0.6 Meters)
Weight: 1 Kilo
Special Features: Dual Phase lightsaber
Strengths:
  • Is a Lightsaber
  • Capable of working in water
  • Stygium Crystal:Due to the stygium crystals, the blade is quieter than the normal lightsaber, and the crystals can render the user harder to see if used with the proper force techniques.
Weaknesses:
  • Crystals: Although capable of working in a lightsaber, the stygium crystals Katbiyre Acquired aren't the best quality and tend to short out at inconvenient times.
Description: Katbiyre's first lightsaber was capable of working in water, and had three lengths. It is a jet black hilt, with a cyan colored blade, generated using Stygium crystals. It's blade has two lengths: 1, and 1.5 meters allowing it to be used in a variety of ways. Due to the stygium crystals, the blade is quieter than the normal lightsaber, and the crystals can render the user harder to see if used with the proper force techniques.
 
RESEARCH REVIEW
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Star Wars Canon:
Pending initial review
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Starwars Chaos:
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WITHOUT DEV THREADS
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WITH DEV THREADS
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SUGGESTIONS
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[member="Katbirye Rekr"]

OK, couple of things.
  • Dual-phase is hard enough to make. Triple-phase is doable, but for an apprentice it's iffy, especially without directly relevant dev. You can have dual-phase, or do another 10-post thread for triple.
  • This sub is really, really short. Plz flesh it out a good bit (like what benefits you expect to get from the stygium), and tweak the formatting, like the lists and such -- no formatting means it's hard to read.
  • The asteroid field is located in the same system as Shri-Tal on the map, so inside SSC territory. That means you should have made it an open thread and allowed opposition rather than steamrolling through the thread. However, due to some peculiarities in how that system was submitted -- piece by piece, poorly linked together, system not named on the map, etc. -- you're not the first to not realize that the asteroid field is in SSC territory, so you get a pass this time.
Sound fair?
 
[member="Katbirye Rekr"]

Looks good. Thanks for the reformat. List the stygium stuff under Strengths. Also, remember that lightsaber tech is not cloaking device tech. Stygium as a sabre crystal is generally understood to serve as a good focus for stealth Force powers. A stygium crystal in your sabre isn't going to hide you from sight by default or constantly.
 
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