I made a song!

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

Well, that's a lie, I actually took an existing song and added my own lyrics before singing it. I know I'm not the best at singing and feedback would be appreciated .

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=H8A42DAwZ3Y&feature=youtu.be

 

[Rhurek Thane]

You may not be the best singer, but you are better than I. MUCH better than I.
There are singers and there are songwriters, you my friend are a songwriter. The lyrics are good, the music is catchy, and I think you've got some talent.
Just don't go singing for Simon Cowell. ;P

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

Thanks I've actually not been learning singing for too long, so I'm rather proud of this. The furthest I've gotten so far is a prep test, but I do enjoy songwriting for sure (though this is my first attempt at it).

 

[Rhurek Thane]

There's testing on singing now?
Where was that class when i was in school? !

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

[member="Thane"]

It's separate from school.

 

[Shelbeth]

Aw, I love this! It takes such guts to share your art like this. I know I get nervous every time I upload myself singing! I think your lyrics are great, and your voice shows promise. Keep doing both, and be sure to post your new stuff! I'll definitely be following.

 

[Shelbeth]

Sorry for the dang double post.

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

Thanks for such kind words . My voice is going through a rough time at the moment, a slight sore throat and it's being awkward as it's developing. I appreciate your compliment.

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

I've made lyrics for the sith version of it, and will hopefully have sung it by the end of Monday

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

Sorry it's a bit late, and I don't think as well-sung as before, but here is the sith version!

https://youtu.be/yX6BNA0V0l4

 

[Nyxie]

[member="Kha'ro"]
I'm loving your lyrical ability! ^^' If I'm going to be completely honest, critical and constructive, there are a few places where I'd change a couple words to match the syllables with the rhythm, and maybe cut the repetition out of the hook in lieu of just reiterating the last syllable (particularly the "Die die die" thing, heh), but otherwise this is pretty awesome and talented.

You have some serious balls of steel, I'll give you that, my man.

 

[Kha'ro Ottosuki]

[member="Cheshire"]

I appreciate any constructive criticism. I did notice the lyrics being slightly hard to sing at some points, but found it hard to think of alternatives. I did alter some lyrics while making the song.