HV-909A Disruptor Pistol

[Malok]

H V - 9 0 9 A ​

D I S R U P T O R​

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: A light, disruptor pistol with a twist.
• Image Source: Matthew Valverde, Gavin Bird
• Canon Link: Disruptor Rifle, Ghostfire Crystal
• Restricted Missions: N/A
• Primary Source: HV-55A Disruptor Rifle, AY-214 Combat Pistol

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: House Verd, Incorporated
• Model: HV-909A Disruptor Pistol
• Affiliation: Closed Market
• Modularity: No
• Production: Limited
• Material: Dallorian Alloy, Ghostfire Crystal, High-Capacity Power Cell

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Light Disruptor Pistol
• Size: Average
• Weight: Heavy
• Ammunition Type: Power Cell
• Ammunition Capacity: 10 rpc (rounds per cell)
• Reload Speed: Average
• Effective Range: Personal
• Rate of Fire: Average
• Stopping Power: Very High
• Recoil: Average

SPECIAL FEATURES

• Archaic: Based on obsolete, laser-based blasters, the HV-909A utilizes a crystal “gain medium” in the place of a gas canister.

STRENGTHS

• Disruptor: A single bolt from this weapon can vaporize armor or combatant alike.
• Covert: Utilizing a Ghostfire crystal creates near translucent bolts that are almost completely silent.

WEAKNESSES

• Light: Based around the "archaic" design philosophy of the AY-214 Combat Pistol, the HV-909A possesses significantly less disintigrative power than the average, modern Disruptor. In particular, an armored opponent would require three bursts to kill (armor, underlay, body); as opposed to the one-shot, one-kill of a typical Disruptor.
• Range: Compared to even average Disruptor or Blaster rifles, the HV-909A has a vastly shorter effective and optimal range. Thus, the wielder must engage opponents from much close to medium range, maximum.
• Finite: The HV-909A lacks any pronounced durability. It is reliable enough to not jam, yet complete submersion in water or mud will affect functionality. Furthermore, it can be cut apart by lightsabers, blown apart by ordnance, or shot apart by other firearms.

DESCRIPTION

The HV-909A Disruptor Pistol is a continuation of the budding, Light Disruptor Line.

After significant field tasting at the hands of the Confederacy, House Verd, Inc. found that their flagship model - the HV-55A - was quite capable on theme modern battlefield. However, while it thrives in standard, combat environments, versatility of transit outside of warzones became a glaring reality. In short, customers had more difficulty bringing and utilizing their disruptor rifles in cramped environments, such as cantinas, public gatherings, etc. To this end, the design teams put together a new armament that would answer this challenge head on.

While providing yet another, unique edge.

Operating similarly to a standard, stealth blaster, the HV-909A produces bolts that are nearly translucent and almost completely silent. Furthermore, as a disruptor pistol, this armament is much easier to access when off of the standard battlefield. Simply slip off from the belt and go! Aesthetically speaking, the HV-909A was designed to resemble custom, WESTAR-34 pistols; down to the Dallorian alloy plating. This choice was purely inspired by the CEO’s own Mandalorian heritage and a desire to have something absurdly flashy at his belt.

 

[Progflaw99]

<p>Under Review.</p>

 

[Progflaw99]

Hi! I will be the judge handling this submission. I'll jump right in!

Archaic: Based on obsolete, laser-based blasters, the HV-909A utilizes a crystal “gain medium” in the place of a gas canister.

What strength does this provide the weapon?

Disruptor: A single bolt from this weapon can vaporize armor and combatant alike.

While hits are on the writer to accept, something that without question vaporizes armor and combatant alike - is there someone who honestly would take a hit from that? Question notwithstanding, that's far from a balanced effect, even given Canon has disruptors that do that. I'd say tone this down just a bit and we might be able to play with it enough to bring better balance to the submission.

Light: Based around the "archaic" design philosophy of the AY-214 Combat Pistol, the HV-909A possesses significantly less disintigrative power than the average, modern Disruptor. In particular, an armored opponent would require three bursts to kill (armor, underlay, body); as opposed to the one-shot, one-kill of a typical Disruptor.

Additionally, this weakness seems to contradict the "Disruptor" strength listed above.

With the current ratings, everything seems to be average, excepting the Reload Speed and Stopping Power. You will have to add weaknesses to this submission that justify a lack of reduction in one of the other fields (or increase in recoil, a negative effect).

[member="Darth Metus"]

 

[Malok]

[member="Rolf Amsel"]

1. It doesn't, hence why there it is in the Special Features alone. It's fluff. Delicious marshmallow fluff.

2. Canon and Chaos Canon Disruptors do as described in the Strength, to "tone it down" would be submitting something that isn't a Disruptor. The 55A that was previously approved had that strength verbatim. The fact that this is a Disruptor is balanced by the weakness that all but states "hey, if you take this hit it's not a one-hit KO. You'll lose some armor or your shirt but you're good." Already this submission, compared to every other Disruptor ever submitted on the board, is weaker because it does not one hit KO.

Well. I mean. If an opponent wants to walk into a thread buck naked then maybe, but even if they had a shirt and briefs on they can tank a hit from this thing. I think it's far from being unbalanced on that front. So all that said, I'd like to leave both as is.

3. Made the weight Heavy and made the Reload Speed Average. The only special roll on the weapon is the Stopping Power.

 

[Progflaw99]

Disruptor: A single bolt from this weapon can vaporize armor and combatant alike.

Light: Based around the "archaic" design philosophy of the AY-214 Combat Pistol, the HV-909A possesses significantly less disintigrative power than the average, modern Disruptor. In particular, an armored opponent would require three bursts to kill (armor, underlay, body); as opposed to the one-shot, one-kill of a typical Disruptor.

2. Canon and Chaos Canon Disruptors do as described in the Strength, to "tone it down" would be submitting something that isn't a Disruptor. The 55A that was previously approved had that strength verbatim. The fact that this is a Disruptor is balanced by the weakness that all but states "hey, if you take this hit it's not a one-hit KO. You'll lose some armor or your shirt but you're good." Already this submission, compared to every other Disruptor ever submitted on the board, is weaker because it does not one hit KO.

This strength and this weakness are contradictory in terms then, given that in the strength you state it is capable of vaporizing armor and combatant alike, but then describe a lesser effect/limited effect in the weaknesses. It is also important to note that previously approved submissions are not considered when judging present submissions, as precedence is not a factor. This strength and weakness are still in contradiction of each other. Once that's resolved, I can do a final once over. Otherwise it looks good with the ratings modifications you've made.

[member="Darth Metus"]

 

[Malok]

[member="Rolf Amsel"]

Changed the wording to "can vaporize armor or combatant alike.

Implying that one shot won't disintegrate a target. And then the weakness adds the necessary clarification.

 

[Progflaw99]

[member="Darth Metus"]

If you could change the wording to: A single bolt from this weapon can potentially vaporize armor or combatant alike.

It should be good after that.

 

[Malok]

[member="Rolf Amsel"]

Wording it that way makes it seem like contact between the bolt and armor or bolt and flesh won't have the Canon, vaporization effect - regardless of how light the Disruptor's strength is compared to its Canon cousins. So I'd like to keep the wording as is.

What I can do is add a disclaimer regarding usage and intent, as this wasn't designed to one-shot anyone. Or even two-shot anyone.

 

[Progflaw99]

Disruptor: A single bolt from this weapon can vaporize armor or combatant alike.

Light: Based around the "archaic" design philosophy of the AY-214 Combat Pistol, the HV-909A possesses significantly less disintigrative power than the average, modern Disruptor. In particular, an armored opponent would require three bursts to kill (armor, underlay, body); as opposed to the one-shot, one-kill of a typical Disruptor.

These two statements are still contradictory. If a single bolt can vaporize an armor or combatant alike, then it should not take more than one single bolt to do so as evidenced by the weakness. Can a single bolt from this weapon vaporize armor or combatant alike, or can it not do so with a single bolt? Wording it as follows would allow the weapon to retain its deadly vaporization effect, but more clearly describe the capabilities of the weapon given its strength/weaknesses.

"A single bolt from this weapon, unlike blaster bolts, can vaporize material at the atomic level. Though not as deadly as its counterparts, it retains a high damage output capable of vaporizing armor and/or organic material with repeated shots."

The above isn't verbatim what it must be, but you will need to accurately describe the effects of the bolt or bolts in alignment with the weakness of having to take multiple shots to have the same effect of a typical disruptor.

[member="Darth Metus"]

 

[Progflaw99]

[member="Darth Metus"]

What is the status of this submission?

 

[Malok]

[member="Rolf Amsel"]

You can archive this for now, my attention is all over the place currently.

Thanks!

 

[Progflaw99]

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