Approved Tech Frost Bite

[Jake Ateris]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: Pay a debt Jake owes.
• Image Source: Here
• Canon Link: N/A
• Permissions: N/A
• Primary Source: N/A

PRODUCTION INFORMATION

• Manufacturer: Jake Ateris
• Affiliation: Ilwynog Cysgod
• Model: N/A
• Modularity: No
• Production: Unique
• Material: Alkahest Ice (Blade), Teej Wood., A Rose that grows in winter. A Hair from Ilwynog Cysgod

TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS

• Classification: Sword
• Size: Average
• Weight: Heavy

SPECIAL FEATURES

• N/A

STRENGTHS

• Clash with Lightsabers: It can clash with a Lightsaber easily.

WEAKNESSES

• Force Nullification: This would cause the ice to become normal, and thus easily melted. The wood would also become normal and thus could splinter / break when proper force is applied against it.
• Lacks the cutting power of a Lightsaber
• Not the best craftsmanship: Due to the rusty skills of the individual who made the sword, the blade is not the best quality.
• It has a weak point right where the hilt and the blade are connected. Should someone strike it there, it would break the sword.
• Heavy: The sword due to the enhancements done to it is heavy.
• Beacon of the Light Side: The sword is a beacon of the Lightside. Unless the Force is dampened, the blade would be an "I am here" to any Jedi, Sith, or others who are around.
• Two Handed Weapon: The sword is a two handed weapon if wielded properly, and so would prevent the use of other weapons.
• The Dark Side of the Force: The Dark Side of the Force is capable of destroying the blade if focused in a sufficiently powerful blast of that side of the Force, or attacks of that nature.
• The Force Itself: As the blade is enhanced with the Force, it has little to no protection against most of the abilities of the Force.

DESCRIPTION

Frostbite was created by Jake Ateris for Ilwynog Cysgod on the world of Hoth as a repayment for thawing him out of the ice on the world. This sword was made as a payment in order to balance the scales. It was also the first creation Jake has made in centuries. This sword was made out of Teej Wood, and a blue rose as well as a chunk of ice. Created as a weapon, the sword was infused with the Force by Jake. It was a sword made by Jake to repay his debt.

Unfortunately due to his time in the ice, the sword is not as good as any of his old projects so he will have to make a new one in the future.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Under Review

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

Jal Shey Ice

What exactly is Jal Shey ice please link it.

Cold Aura: The sword produces a cold aura that can freeze things. It has the same temperature as the world of Hoth as the maximum cold it can unleash upon people.

So how does the wielder of the blade protect themselves?

Force Pulse: It can release a massive pulse of Force Energy in the form of a dome, or slash waves.

How does a repulse become slash waves?

Summon to Hand: The sword can be summoned to the hand in a blue flash of light.

What force abilities does it use to summon/teleport it to the hand?

Release Recollection - Artic Storm: The recollection of the sword, Artic Storm is a technique that drains the energy of the wielder. It can release a massive blizzard that could catch someone inside it that will freeze them slowly, eventually freezing them solid.

As with others weapons, anything able to control the weather can be classified as a superweapon. Please remove this.

Release Recollection - Blue Roses: While not a Jedi technique per say, this will grow "blue roses" around the battlefield that will sap the health / force energy of anyone who is wrapped by the thorns.

So it creates plants with plant surge and they become a death field? That is bordering much liek the other on being a superweapon if it drains everyone and has no limits to distance.

Can fly to the hand of the wielder.

If it can already teleport into your hand what benefit does this have?\

The special abilities vs the weaknesses are just not balanced out. More then half of them are situational. This si going to need at best 3 substantial weaknesses added that aren't just a repeat of a previous one.

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms It is Ice that has been treated with Jal Shey, essentially.

Fold Space is the Force Power.

Would making it a Double Edged Sword that has the potential to damage the wielder unless they're wearing tons of insulated clothes to protect them from the cold count as a good weakness?

The fly to the hand is so that if they do not have the energy to fuel it teleporting to the hand, they can use that. The sword's battery for the most part is the user themselves.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

There is so many things now just give me a moment.

It is Ice that has been treated with Jal Shey, essentially.

The Jal Shey was a group not a material.

Fold Space is the Force Power.

The technique alone takes years of training and a lot of energy to use. The Aing-Tii are not known for just teaching it to anyone. Please explain where he learned it.

A doubled edged weakness would be fine but that is only one you still need two more substantial weaknesses and tring to throw in fold space now makes me want to add in even more.

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms Hopefully the weaknesses I added make it work. I've removed the Fold Space, as well.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

Heat: The sword's vulnerable to intense amounts of heat. It would take about 3000 Degrees Fahrenheit + to ruin the sword.

You do realize how hot that is correct 1000 degrees would be substantial and this at best is a strength

Release Recollection 1: Ice Thorns: Slamming the sword into the ground, the individual can at the cost of their own energy generate a 5 by 5 Foot Circle of Ice Spikes around them.

This is a very dangerous skill and powerful. Please justify it as generating that much ice would be substantial.

Energy Drain: The user's energy reserves are sapped by the sword at an alarming rate. It is their energy that powers all of the sword's abilities.

So potentially how log can they fight if the sword takes all of their energy to use it?

Can be stolen and used against the user.

This is not a weakness and since you can just fly it back to your hand not substantial

Anything generated is mundane and can be treated as such.

This is not a weakness and If this counts towards things it does the force light and ice it generates what is the point mixed with a heavy energy drain.

Can't be remade: The sword can't be remade out of the materials that it was made from, new materials would have to be gathered.

This is not a weakness

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms What I was referring to was that the ice would be physically the equivalent to REAL ice, and thus could be treated as such as a means of breaking it. I have however, nerfed it even further and took out the Flying back to hand. (Much to my dismay.)
I've detailed why the sword can do ice related things.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

Ah small problem

but it was impossible for the caster to channel that vitality into their own body or manipulate ice despite its name.

The technique drains heat it doesn't let you control ice

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms Would combining that with Alter Terrain work?

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

Altering the environment is what was putting you into the realm of making a superweapon.

My recommendation would be to narrow your focus with this. You try for ambition but just throw things onto the sub and hope it works out with less understanding.

Ditch trying to control the ice and just have it as a focus to enhance ice shaping abilities for someone who knows Shaping skills.

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms Did your edit, even though that kinda ruined the point of the sword. I'm probably gonna re-app later. But for now, is it good?

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

No, you just added my suggestion and kept the things that I told you to ditch making it in essence more powerful. Add to that you still have not made substantial weaknesses.

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms Does it look better now, or do I need to cut the freezing effect as well?

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

No you still have not addressed the weaknesses.

• Intense Pain: The cold the sword generates has a chance of causing the user intense pain.
• Double Edged Sword: The sword due to the nature of it is a double-edged weapon. The intense cold could hurt the individual if they do not have any protection from the cold.
• Energy Drain: The user's energy reserves are sapped by the sword at an alarming rate. It is their energy that powers the Freezing Edge of the sword. It can only be used for 2 posts at a time.

These can literally all be the same thing. It drains energy quickly and is double edged able to cause great pain.

• Can be stolen and used against the user.
• Heat: The sword's vulnerable to intense amounts of heat. It would take about 3000 Degrees Fahrenheit + to ruin the sword.
• Lacks the cutting power of a Lightsaber

These are not weaknesses as you have it able to freeze when it cuts. So just because it can't cut a piece of metal matters little it can freeze it and make it snap.

A best you have 1 out of 4 signifigant weaknesses that I asked for and 2 minor small scale weaknesses. The rest was just fluff and padding.

 

[Jake Ateris]

Krass Wyms There. It has no special abilities other than clashing with a Lightsaber and Never Melting now. If it needs more nerfs or weaknesses, let me know.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Jake Ateris

Given that I have asked you to change the 3000 degrees as it is not a weakness no. You have added no weaknesses as asked multiple times. This is not a negotiation. I was glad to give you some leeway but you keep refusing or ignoring requests.

So I am denying this

 

[Jake Ateris]

John Locke Can you move this back to Live Judging?

 

[John Locke]

Jake Ateris The submission has been moved back to live judgement.

 

[Krass Wyms]

Alright Jake Ateris here goes

• Sonic Weaponry: As the blade is made out of ice, the right amount of sonics could break the blade.

Material: Alkahest Ice (Blade)

Created as a weapon, the sword was infused with the Force by Jake

A blade forged and imbued with the force is substantially stronger. The generalrange of a sonic frequency needed to start damaging it would be dagerou to most species in the galaxy. Possibly making them affected similarly to a sonic screamer vs a bith.

• Electrical Attacks: As the sword is made out of what amounts to frozen water, electrical attacks would be an effective counter-measure against the sword. Due to this, the sword should not be used when someone is spamming electrical attacks.

Material: Alkahest Ice (Blade)

Created as a weapon, the sword was infused with the Force by Jake

Force enhanced blades generally are able to ground and absorb or even deflect lightning and shocks coming at them.

• Heat: Heat is an effective weapon against the sword as well, most flame throwers and the like being able to ruin it.

Material: Alkahest Ice (Blade)

Created as a weapon, the sword was infused with the Force by Jake

Again force enhanced blades are able to match a lightsaber and strong enough to shatter rock. A flame throwerr might be able to make the handle hot but it will need to be burning intensely for a long period of time to start warping and damaging the blade.

• Breaking the dang sword: As the blade is made out of ice, the application of enough force to the sword would be able to break it.

Material: Alkahest Ice (Blade)

Created as a weapon, the sword was infused with the Force by Jake

Again a force blade is substantially stronger then a normal blade its normally being able to counter a lightsaber shows that. Breaking it would take a huge amount of brute force.

These are not weaknesses, they are situational atbest and even then literally don't play a factor because a force enhanced sword would be able to shrug them off easily.