Codex Denied Fana (FNA-67)

[Scald]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION

• Intent: To create an accomplice to the Mandalorian Bounty Hunter Scald.
• Image Credit: starwars.wikia.com
• Role: Fana is an assassin and lovable pet.
• Permissions: N/A
• Links: N/A

PHYSICAL INFORMATION

• Age: Less than a year- though she is not a baby. She is a kid.
• Force Sensitivity: Untrained Force Sensitive.
• Species: Fana is a genetically modified https://starwars.fandom.com/wiki/Felacatian. Scald took away her power to switch to a humanoid form and she is unable to speak basic. She is permanently in feline form.
• Appearance: Ok, so the SCARY kitty above, and imagine it the size of a pug. That is Fana. Auburn fur covering who body.
• EYES: blue.
• SEX: female.
• HEIGHT: 15cm and length is 20cm.

SOCIAL INFORMATION

• Name: Fana (FNA-67)
• Loyalties: Her only loyalties are to Scald , she LOVES Scald and they are completely inseparable.
• Notable Possessions: Nope!
• Personality: Fana is a hyper and cute little kitty- but she MAY be a bit sadistic. So if there is a rancor nearby- watch out.
• Combat Function: An assassin! She lives on Scald , either on her helmet or shoulder. Scald takes her everywhere with her, and on occasion she is hired for an assassination job. Fana is intellectually advanced and doesn’t do things on her own only due to her size, but Scald allows her to leave for hours at a time when they have been hired for such things. Her size actually aids in this job she was genetically designed for.

Strengths:

• Fana has incredibly sharp claws that can easily puncture skin and organic matter, she can even tear durasteal. Though she saves that for her brother- and fellow creation- Sanooth. Who is much larger.
• Fana is as intelligent as a human, though is unable to speak.

Weaknesses:

• Is unable to go long distances due to her small size
• is easily captured- that is why she usually stays on Scald personnel.

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Scald knew a felacat Kayûm Kratha , and took some of her DNA, starting to alter it for fun. Then out came Fana, immediately, though Scald refused to admit it, she fell in love with the Kitty. They've been inseprerable ever since, Fana sharing in some of Scald sadistic personality.

 

[WolfMortum]

Under Review

 

[WolfMortum]

Greetings Scald , what a cute little kitty you have there.

There are however a couple things that require editing/clarification on. They are:

Links: N/A Though she is in any thread with Scald

If you do not wish to add the mentioned threads to the submission then could you please change this to "N/A".

Species: Fana is a genetically modified Falacation. Scald took away her power to switch to a humanoid form and she is unable to speak basic. She is permanently in feline form.

The Species requires a link as per the rules and so you may find the wiki for Falacatians here.

I would however also like further clarification on how Fana's power to shapeshift was removed from her. You've mentioned DNA within the description, perhaps you could further explore this with more depth. Consider from a reader's perspective, how they might imagine this was achieved.

Combat Function: An assassin! She lives on Scald , either on her helmet or shoulder.

This is a suggested change, not mandatory, however perhaps more detail here towards what capabilities Fana might have in combat would be appropriate. If she's an assassin, how would she go about doing this?

HISTORICAL INFORMATION

Scald knew a felacat Kayûm Kratha , and took some of her DNA, starting to alter it for fun. Then out came Fana, immediately, though Scald refused to admit it, she fell in love with the Kitty. They've been inseprerable ever since, Fana sharing in some of Scald sadistic personality.

As previously mentioned in regards to the species modification, I strongly suggest further clarification regarding how Fana's shapeshifting abilities were removed of her. Was this done through the Force? Through Science and Chemistry, or through Sith Alchemy etc. How was her DNA manipulated and given that you started she's loyal to you, are we to assume she does not know what was done to her? The more detail provided here, the better!

 

[Scald]

Okay- Will do! Thank you for the critiques- I’ll get on that

 

[WolfMortum]

Scald

As soon as you're happy with the above edits, just give me a shout!

If you need anything otherwise, I'm here to help.

 

[WolfMortum]

How're you going with this, Scald ?

Just looking for an update on where things are at.

 

[WolfMortum]

Scald

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