Factory Denied Dragon's Flame

[Mike V'Trechen]

OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
• Intent: The new flagship of The Red Dragon faction.
• Image Source: Reddit , [member="Scherezade deWinter"]
• Canon Link: N/A
• Primary Source: Brain
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
• Manufacturer: The Dragon Works
• Affiliation: Mike V’Trechen as captain. Any Red Dragon member can use it. This is the first ship that The Dragon Works made. This ship is the flagship of The Red Dragons. This is unique.
• Model: TXS-1 Dragon’s Flame
• Production: Unique
• Material: Durasteel
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
• Classification: Utility Cruiser
• Length: 750 meters
• Width: 500 meters
• Height: 500 meters
• Armament: This is high armaments. It has Concealed laser cannons, Proton torpedo launcher, Minelayer, Heavy laser cannons, Concussion missile launchers, Twin laser cannons, Heavy laser turrets, Retractable weapons foils, Forward cannon, Precision laser cannons, Turbolaser batteries
• Defenses: This is low. They are cloaking device and shields.
• Hangar Space: moderate ships
• Hangar Allocations:
• Starfighters: 3
• Support Craft: 2
• Maneuverability Rating: Moderate
• Speed Rating: Moderate
• Hyperdrive Class: 2
STANDARD FEATURES
All standard features

ADVANCED SYSTEMS
They are tracking systems, cloaking device, hyperdrive, and state-of-the-art sublight engines.
Strengths:
• This ship is heavily armed and ready to battle.
Weaknesses:
• This ship does not have that much protection.
Description: This ship is ordered by The Red Dragons. The ship is to be used as The Red Dragon’s flagship. It will always appear in battles. It has some pretty good weaponry, but not so much for shielding. It has to rely on smaller ships majority of the time to be his shield., however it does have a hyperdrive and cloaking devices. The ship actually has a pair of sublight engines.

 

[Runi Verin]

Under Review.

 

[Runi Verin]

[member="Mike V'Trechen"]

Hey there. Just a couple of points for this one.

• Image Source: Reddit , Scherezade deWinter

Rather than credit reddit, please can you change it to reflect the original artist.

• Manufacturer: The Dragon Works

Please can you hyperlink this company.

• Affiliation: Mike V’Trechen as captain. Any Red Dragon member can use it. This is the first ship that The Dragon Works made. This ship is the flagship of The Red Dragons. This is unique.

As you're allowing your faction to use this vessel, please can you hyperlink the Red Dragon faction page.

• Material: Durasteel

Please can you hyperlink Durasteel's wookieepedia article.

• Armament: This is high armaments. It has Concealed laser cannons, Proton torpedo launcher, Minelayer, Heavy laser cannons, Concussion missile launchers, Twin laser cannons, Heavy laser turrets, Retractable weapons foils, Forward cannon, Precision laser cannons, Omnicannon, Turbolaser batteries

Putting aside that this is a mixed bag of weapons, please remove the Omincannon from this list. That is a superweapon.

They are cloaking device

Please list this in the advanced features.

heavy shield

Poor wording choice here, but this makes it seem like it contradicts the Low rating. Just remove the word heavy to avoid confusion.

• Hangar Space: 7 ships

Please place a rating here. As it stands, as a 750m vessel, you would need a 'High' rating in order to field seven squadrons.

That in turn would place you over on your ratings, however. So please reduce one rating accordingly if you want this to balance.

They are tracking systems, hyperdrive, and state-of-the-art sublight engines.

Please detail these advanced features more in the description. Also, as mentioned, include the cloak both here and in the description.

 

[Mike V'Trechen]

[member="Runi Verin"]

There. I hope that works.

 

[Runi Verin]

[member="Mike V'Trechen"]

Almost. You're still a little over on the squadron counts. A moderate rating only entitles you to 5 squadrons, but you're currently at 6. Drop one from either the support craft or the squadrons, and you should be good to go.

 

[Mike V'Trechen]

[member="Runi Verin"] Does this work?

 

[Runi Verin]

Approved.

 

[John Locke]

Submission Name:
Dragon's Flame

Link to Submission: https://www.starwarsrp.net/threads/dragons-flame.130987/

Reason for Pre-Factory Request: Affiliation and Description. The Red Dragons are being taken over by the Zweihander Union. We fled Bespin, because of unknown assailants.

Move to pre-factory per OP request.

Please remember to include a list of changes when you tag a member of factory staff to move the submission back to live judgement.

 

[John Locke]

Mike V'Trechen

What is the status of this submission?

 

[Mike V'Trechen]

John Locke

I have it back in my mind, but I have not had time to change anything. I have been busy trying to get my posts up and get my graduation going. I am sorry. I am hoping that I will have time to work on it sometime this week.

 

[John Locke]

Mike V'Trechen

Archiving for inactivity.

If you wish to have the submission pulled from the archives you may put a request into the submission modification thread.