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Danuta

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
GENERAL INFORMATION
  • Planet Name: Danuta
  • Demonym: Danutan
  • Region: Mid Rim
  • System Name: Colavas
  • System Features: 1 sun, 1 moon, 28 standard hours rotation, 402 standard days orbit
  • Coordinates: [The X,Y coordinates of the planet and its relative position in them according to the Galaxy Map]
  • Major Imports: Foodstuffs, technology
  • Major Exports: Minerals
GEOGRAPHIC INFORMATION
  • Gravity: Standard
  • Climate: Cold and dry
  • Primary Terrain: Badlands, hills, plains

  • Major Locations: Danuta Temple, Imperial Research Facility
POPULATION
  • Native Species: None
  • Immigrated Species: Humans, others, [formerly] Hutts
  • Population: minimally populated
  • Demographics: 90% humans, 10% others
  • Primary Languages: Galactic Standard Basic
  • Culture: Mostly miners
GOVERNMENT & ECONOMY
  • Government: Imperial governorship
  • Affiliation:
  • Wealth: Medium. Miners don't make much, but some of the mine supervisors live very comfortably.
  • Stability: The planet is fairly stable and unconnected from galactic politics. Sometimes there are union protests, but not much else.
  • Freedom & Oppression: Residents are legally free, but often restricted by the wages and demands of large mining corporations.

MILITARY & TECHNOLOGY

  • Military: Completely demilitarized, with the exception of an abandoned Imperial research facility.
  • Technology: Mining equipment is state of the art.
 

Netherworld

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This submission is incomplete – we don't allow WIPs in the active Codex, unfortunately. I'm going to move your planet to Pre-Codex, where you can edit and fill out the template at your pace.

When you're done making edits, just @mention the Codex Admin (Mahet) or RPJ (Zeradias Mant, Darth Pyrrhus), and they'll bring your submission back out for judging.
 

Netherworld

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Alright, let's see –

First off, you're still missing sections from the Planet template:
  • The Affiliation and HISTORICAL INFORMATION need to be filled out.
  • For the Image Credit, since you don't have an image, just put N/A.
  • For the Coordinates, please add the appropriate Chaos map information.

Overall, having read this submission and the canon article as well, there emerges the main issue – your submission doesn't expand on the Wookieepedia entry in any shape or form.

For Codex resubmissions of existing canon planets, we require a significant amount of work to be put into them; some good examples are Atrisia and Corellia, which are planets that have had many things happen to / on them on Chaos, thus warranting a new submission which catalogs all that.

The other instance in which a Canon planet would be resubmitted through the Codex is if the original article is a stub – with Danuta, that is definitely the case. You have plenty of room to expand the planet's lore, add new Points of Interest, describe the terrain in more detail, perhaps explore what marks the old Hutt dominion of the planet left on the local culture and populace.

In its current state, however, your submission lacks any of these significant improvements on the canon article that we expect to see from a Canon planet resubmission. If you do not wish to put in the additional work outlined above, this submission will be denied.


If anything is unclear or you have any questions, feel free to @mention me here and I'll do my best to help you out. :)
 

Netherworld

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This submission is being archived for inactivity.

If you'd like to have it brought back out for judging, PM Mahet, Darth Pyrrhus, or Zeradias Mant.
 
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