Approved Tech Cybernetic Overhaul

[Haaza Kutter]

Image Source: Flannigan Mcnash
Intent: Character overhaul with cybernetics for a one Flannigan Mcnash.
Development Thread: To Rebuild A Pirate
Manufacturer: Hazza Cutter
Model: N/A
Affiliation: The Jackals
Modularity: Bodily modification and inner competent alteration is all applicable, cybernetics and biological mass are interchangeable with the latter being more refined and minor.
Production: Unique.
Material: The components in the makeup are consistent of Durasteel, wires and lighter miscellaneous metals.
Classification: Life support, strength/mobility modification.
Weight: 162 kilograms
Height: 2.14 meters.
Movement: Bipedal.
Armaments: Strength and Mobility modifications.
Misc. Equipment: None.
Description:

“Diagnostics, punctured lung internal bleeding and loss of movement in both arms and a leg. Cause of injury three slugs filled with a corrosive formula, and bludgeoning from a collapsing structure, conclusion patient will perish without cybernetic implants.”

Cybernetic overhaul, is the plan to keep the Jackals leader in action, it is exoskeleton of durasteel, and mobile life support it’s based off canon cybernetics, and only deviates from lore in aesthetics. The tubular pistons that make up the arms and legs can be used to drive them with extreme force, and the round points of the fingers give an increased traction to hold onto difficult terrain.

The replaced areas are everything except vital organs, it was done by gradually altering the organic with cybernetics, until nothing but the necessary organs e.g heart, brain, lungs and digestive tract remain, limbs, bones and lesser organs, were all removed and are replaced with machinery. It is powered by fuel cells and requires cleaning and maintenance every month. The strength and speed are considered above average, running lengths of up to 30 km/h and having a strength of equal to that of one of the more bestial species e.g. Trandoshan, Wookie.

Weaknesses

“He's more machine now than man”: The cybernetics follow simple paths, and take time for thought and technology to collide, so anything unorthodox or unexpected will meet with late response times.

“Yet the man half of him had a soul, or so my faith believes": The form and design is optimal for speed, and so the durability takes leniencies, a well placed blaster shot can rip through the Durasteel plating.

Strengths

In-human strength: The cybernetic replacements endow strength on the user, giving them power to press the attack or simply rip their foes apart.

In-human speed: The cybernetic replacements endow the user with speed, allowing them to have more versatility with movement.

 

[Raziel]

[member="Haaza Kutter"]

Hi there!

This could really do with being fleshed out more please?

At the moment it's a bit light. It would be good to know (within the sub):

• What's been replaced
• The extent of enhancements
• How they were undertaken
• How much maintenance is required
• How this is powered

Another couple of paragraphs should do it, and try to use nice succinct language so it's easy to pick out the main details

 

[Haaza Kutter]

[member="Raziel"] I hope the editations meet your standards.

 

[Raziel]

[member="Haaza Kutter"]

Could you expand a little more on the first weakness please? What's unorthodox mean here?

 

[Haaza Kutter]

[member="Raziel"], I hope that clarified it. First tec creation, so I'll admit it's a bit wonky.

 

[Raziel]

Not a problem at all, thanks for your work so far!

“He's more machine now than man”: The integrated cybernetics follow linear paths, and take time for thought and technology to collide, so anything unorthodox or unexpected will meet with late response times.

I'm still not sure what this really means. Would it mean that if the subject made a sudden change of direction the body might not respond as expected?

 

[Haaza Kutter]

[member="Raziel"], you'd be correct to assume that. If the opponent/obstacle was to suddenly change or feign an attack than switch, that might be unexpected there would be a lapse in response time, so it may not be able to react quick enough.

 

[Raziel]

[member="Haaza Kutter"]

Ok could you please try and make that more clear in the sub?

The whole thing could do with another good review and tweak to make the language more clear.

Start with:

Exactly what has been replaced. What are the components? Is it external or internal replacement?

 

[Haaza Kutter]

[member="Raziel"], I've tried to make the language more clear. But are there specifics.

 

[Raziel]

[member="Haaza Kutter"]

I think I get the general gist and it seems reasonable. Please don't abuse this. Please try and make the next sub nice and clear first up, but thank you for your patience and for working with me

@soliel talvin

 

[Soliath Devin Talith]

Approved.

Do not abuse.