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The Wraith of Achilles | Righteous Fist of Heaven Class Super Battlecruiser

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OUT OF CHARACTER INFORMATION
  • Intent: To create the flagship of Tristan Evore, and to create a test bed for future weaponry
  • Image Source: [x], [x]
  • Canon Link: N/A
  • Permissions: [x]
  • Primary Source: [x]
PRODUCTION INFORMATION
TECHNICAL SPECIFICATIONS
  • Classification:
    • Light Dreadnought
    • Command Battleship
    • Fleet Carrier
    • Heavy Destroyer
  • Length: 5,000 Meters
  • Width: 4,457.25 Meters
  • Height: 2,250 Meters
  • Armament: Extreme
    • [4] Covenant Class Hyper Velocity Cannon
    • [6] Shield Leach Weapon Cannons [Compartmentalized; (2 Forward; 2 Aft; 1 Left Ventral Plating; 1 Right Ventral Plating)]
    • [280] Heavy Long Range Turbolasers [Swivel Mounted; Compartmentalized; Barbette]
    • [200] NZ Heavy Turbolaser Cannons [Compartmentalized; Swivel Mounted; Arc Reactor Powered; Barbetts Variant]
    • [120] Missle Pods [Surface; (Ion Torpedo; Smart Missile, Concussion Missls)]
    • [500] Megamaser Batteries [Compartmentalized; Swivel Mounted; Barbette Varaint; Independent Reactors]
    • [275] Long Range Turbolaser [Kyber Focused; Broadside; Barbette Version; Fast Track Mountings; Fire Linked]
    • [240] Incinerator Class Plasma Railguns [Broadside; Fast Track Mountings; Fire Linked]
    • [8] NZ Damocles Electromagnetic Plasma Cannons [Compartmentalized; Swivel Mounted;]
    • [20] Tarus Heavy Ion Pusle Cannons [Compartmentalized; Swivel Mounted; Independent Reactors]
  • Defenses: Very High
    • Primary Shield Generator (Redundant Particle, Ion, Ray and Concussion, Overlaid)
    • Xythan Shield
    • Molecular Shields
    • Ray Shields
    • Interal Defense [Automated Turrets; Bulkheads; Ray Shields, etc]
  • Hangar: Very High
  • Hangar Allocations:
    • Starfighters: 32 squadrons
    • Support Craft: 10 squadrons
  • Maneuverability Rating: Very Slow
  • Speed Rating: Low
  • Hyperdrive Class: Very High
STANDARD FEATURES

  • Bridge
  • Command Center
  • Board Conference Room
  • Command Center
  • Secure Meeting Area
  • Can Shoppe
  • Weapons Production Facility [Small Arms and Replacement Cannons].
  • Prototyper (Equipped with various Duplicators, Synthesizers, and Garment-Fabricators)
  • Etc.

ADVANCED SYSTEMS
  • NZ-OS-H1 Hyperdrive - The Achilles is the third warship produced by the N&Z Corporation to include the impressive NZ Hyperdrive System allowing the vessel to shimmer in and out of hyperspace.
  • Syygium Cloaking Field - The Achilles, like the Dictator Class Battlecruiser's before it, uses a Stygium Cloaking Field as a means of protection, surprise and covert intelligence gathering. The Achilles cannot fire while cloaked, but by powering down it's weapons system and reverting power control to it's secondary reactor can enter and exit hyperspace while cloaked
  • Repulsor Ion Arc Reactor - The Achilles uses another Arc Reactor to power it's primary systems. Because of this powerful source of energy, the Achilles is a power-reduntat warship.
  • Advanced Sensor and Communication Systems - The Wrath of Achilles was designed as the flagship of Fleet Admiral Tristan Evore, who currently reigns as a member of the Supreme War Council of the Union along with a Joint Naval Chief specializing in Command, Design and Special Operations, along with Tactical Command.
STRENGTHS
  • [+]Workhouse
  • [+] Stealth
  • [+] Compartmentalized Weapons
  • [+]NZ Hyperdrive
WEAKNESSES
  • [-] Low Speed
  • [-] Low Maneuverability
  • [-] NZ Hyperdrive - Shimmer Ability
DESCRIPTION

The Wrath of Achilles is the most powerful warship ever comtrcuted by Jast Shipwright Co. which has recently come under the ownership of the N&Z Corporarion along with Infiverse, Zakuul Engineering and Rage Industries. By far, Jast has never produced a ship such as the Wrath of Achilles which is the largest and most powerful vessel to have undergone construction at the Xa Fel Orbital Defense Ring.

The majority of it's design is owed to Zwihander Fleet Admiral and soon to be N&Z Board Member, Tristan Evore. The Wrath of Achilles combines N&Z Produced Turbolasers, Long Range Heavy Turbolasers, Long Range Turbolasers, Megamasers, and various types of Missile Ordnance.

One of the weirdest facts of the design process was the fact the ship couldn't hide it's four massive Covenant Class Hyper Velocity Cannons and so the ship uses this to it's advantage making many believe it is a simple siege breaker instead of a Light Dreadnought. This still however proves to be a fatal flaw but the firepower provided more than makes up for this.

All of these weapons combined allow for the Wrath to take on small fleets and is classified as "a battle group unto itself". The warship also carries an impressive 50 Squadrons, 10 of which are dedicated support craft while the other 40 are attack fighters.

The Wrath of Achilles prides itself on three pieces of technology, the NZ Arc Reactor, the NZ Hyperdrive and the Stygium Cloaking Device which powers it's stealth operations quite literally. At the end of the day, the Wrath of Achilles has unreached potential and under the command of Fleet Admiral Evore, can reach that potential.

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Incinerator Class Plasma Railguns
Xythan Force Shield
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"Force" Shield
 
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Hey there. So overall this looks like a well-written and thought out submission. However, there are a couple of problems.

Under the Armaments and Defenses sections you've given me a list of each of the individual weapons and defense systems, which is fine, but you haven't listed an actual rating (ie. High, Low, Average etc...) for either. I'll need you to set a rating for each of these sections before I can go forward with looking at the ship's balancing. Please let me know when you've added these ratings, or let me know if you have any questions or concerns. Thanks!

Tristan Evore Tristan Evore
 
Okay, so I've come up with a couple of balanced options you could choose from if you want, along with the base values generally attached to each. The idea is that if you look at anything that enhances the ship as a positive number and anything that detracts from the ship as a negative, then all you need to do is have a final overall rating of 0.

You're not under any obligation to use the options I've presented to you. You can change the ratings of the ship however you like, so long as it's balanced in the end. Anyway, here are a couple of options to illustrate the point.

Option 1:

Production: Unique (-4)
Armament: Very High (+2)
Defense: Very High (+2)
Maneuverability: Low (-1)
Speed: Very Low (-2)
Hangar Size: Extreme (+3)

Option 2:

Production: Unique (-4)
Armament: Extreme (+3)
Defense: Very High (+2)
Maneuverability: Low (-1)
Speed: Very Low (-2)
Hangar Size: Very High (+2)

Hopefully this helps! Please let me know what you decide to do/make the necessary edits and let me know when you're done. Otherwise, if you have any more questions please ask! :)

Tristan Evore Tristan Evore
 
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Submission Name: The Wrath of Achilles, Righteous Fist of Heaven Class Super Battlecruiser
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Moved to pre-factory per OP request.

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Tristan Evore Tristan Evore

What is the status of this submission? As per the rules of the pre-factory, which can be found here, submissions may only remain in the pre-factory for one month before being archived. Unfortunately, your submission has been in the pre-factory for longer than a month, if you could please update us on if you still intend to complete it, or if you would rather the submission be moved to the archives till you're ready to work on it.
 
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